Wild West - Chapter 6 - Part 17 - 5 minute freewrite challenge

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Chapter 1

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Chapter 2

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Chapter 3
Chapter 4

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Because Chapter 3 got split into two chapters (namely 3 and 4), we are now at chapter 5.

Chapter 5

1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12

Chapter 6

1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14, 15, 16

Part 17

With the empty wheelbarrows in place they all went back to work, smashing their iron tools against the bedrock. Definitely not a ridiculous amount of fun. It seemed, however, that the break time came faster the second time around, and even faster the later times. It wasn't because they were working faster – they were more sluggish with every passing minute – but because they got much better at putting their mind on idle. Instead of counting hours as they would otherwise, they kept track of the number of breaks that they had.

Over time they noticed that some areas were very rich with the desired ore, while the others were completely deficient of it. It definitely seemed as if the further they dug, the less ore there was. Looking back they also realized how much of the rock they had already excavated – the tunnel had widened substantially – and because they were using no support at all they tried their best not to think about the possibility of a cave in.

With every break they were increasingly more tired, but at the same time cared about it less and so resembled brain-dead robots always more. On the 30th break, however, the miners started leaving alongside the other workers and James and Tom happily followed suit. ”Is our shift over?” They were wondering quietly, both with a subtle smile on their face. The light outside was blinding and they were squinting their eyes hard, but before they could adjust to the light again, they were instructed into a new tunnel and had to start with mining all over again.

Disclaimer: The full story is in its unfinished state. All content is tentative to change.

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The prompt was:

"A ridiculous amount of fun"

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#3 - A young thief
#8 - A traitor from hell
#9 - Not alone
#10 - Millitary testing grounds
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#14 - And angel in love with a whore
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#18 - Reborn as a 10 year old
#19 - A struggling door to door salesman
#24 - Rebellious talking food
#26 - Ssssnails!
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#32 - Dog's breath
#38 - Abducted
#42 - Killer clowns
#43 - A penny
#44 - Fear
#2 - A dolphin tea party
#4 - Stained hands
#7 - The giant depressed onion
#21 - The red star
#25 - Long-distance Relationship
#27 - A dream
#30 - Potato
#31 - Dragons
#33 - The Jungle
#35 - A life lesson
#36 - Unicorn meat
#39 - The Purple Road
#40 - Immortal Store Clerk
#41 - Artemis' Hell
#45 - A scientist's journal

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#6 - A blind date
#11 - The wealthy man
#12 - Happy ending
#16 - Asshole soulmate
#17 - My bunny Fluffy
#20 - War veteran
#22 - Wishing to meet a villain
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#34 - Turkey Trauma
#37 - Stuck in a loop

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I love how this story progresses. I can feel the frustration of long and grueling hours in a mine coupled with the fear of possible collapse. Great use of the prompt, as always!

Thank you! And I am so happy that the "boringness" of the work can be felt by reading alone. Maybe I'm writing a bit too boring at the moment. Too bland. Hmm.

Thanks again! :D

And the smiles fell harder than smiles have ever fallen...

The shine of their teeth dissipated into the night of their mouths.

^Okay, I've read too many comments of yours and you've infected me with something. Have you given me comment-drugs? Is that what I'm on right now?

Would I do that? (Slips some pixie dust into Svashta's coffee...) ;) Come on, you know you like them. Just relax and enjoy the ride...

I didn't say I didn't like whatever you've drugged me with... ;)
sips some more coffee

nice chapter bro, already followed

Thanks! Greatly appreciated! :D

that is what happens when you work physically - tired, tired, tired...

Yep, and even if you're allowed proper breaks... not just sitting down next to your tool and eating in the shadow instead of out in the open, breathing fresh air.

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