The Gut Monster - My first story written using three 5-minute prompts

in freewrite •  last year 


The Gut Monster

My friends and I frequented a local cafeteria because of a cute waitress. We were all single, all four of us, and they all fell for her blonde hair and long legs. She was our age and very cute but there was something off about her smile.

They all complimented her on it, but whenever I saw her smile, it gave me the creeps.

There wasn’t anything about it that I could point my finger at and identify as spooky, but no matter how hard I tried to ignore it, I still got the chills every single time we locked eyes and she smiled.

Over time we became friends and talked a lot when there weren’t other customers around and she seemed like a very cool girl. Judging by the occasional wink I received from her, I could even say she took a liking for me.

I didn’t tell the guys about it at first, but caved In at last and they all told me to make a move.

(End of prompt 1: “She had, what they call a healthy smile. But whenever I looked at her, she gave me the creeps.”

I ended up asking her for a date one day and she was overjoyed with the idea.

I took her to the movies because it was dark and I didn’t need to watch her smile.

We kissed after the movie and she ended up over at my place.

It was a fun night but when I wanted her to leave in the morning, she wouldn’t budge. She demanded I make her breakfast–but not something I’d ever expect from a normal person.

She demanded I cook her an entire pot of chili. I couldn’t make sense of anything but at that point just wanted her gone, so I agreed to make her an entire pot of chili if she then left.

She didn’t leave.

She chowed down the entire pot of chili and returned to her somewhat normal self.

I figured since I was home alone and she was okay and cute she could stick around and we’d have some more fun, which we did. She spent the entire week at my place, only leaving for work, and eating two entire pots of food each day. I liked her and her company so I thought to myself I can live with that oddity.

When my parents returned from their trip to the seaside is where things really got messy.

I couldn’t tell them my new girlfriend eats two entire pots of food a day, so I often had to sneak into the kitchen in the middle of the night and cook for her in advance.

My parents were kind enough to let her stay in my room, but only if we took a long walk with our dog every Sunday afternoon. Given no other choice, we agreed.

(End of prompt 2.: “Sunday afternoon walks were mandatory. But sometimes, I hid in the kitchen and cooked huge pots of food.)”

Everything was normal–if you could call it that–for about two months, when we set out to clean the attic. All the stuff inside was very old and because it was of no sentimental value to me or my parents, we decided to throw it all out.

We were taking out boxes full of whatever junk had piled up over the years, when one of the boxes gave in to the weight of its contents.

A whole lot of old medical equipment dropped on the floor, along with a book that opened at a certain page, the title of which read: “The Gut Monster.”

I picked it up and jokingly told Stacy it was what she had, but the more I kept reading it, the more I realized all her symptoms did indeed match with the ones listed in the books.

I rushed her to the emergency room that same day and they confirmed she had giant tapeworms inside her.

They prescribed her some medicine and in a matter of weeks she was completely fine, and her weird spooky smile was gone.

Prompt 3 was: “a book dropped”

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Short stories I have written so far:

Happy ending
#1 - Living off the grid
#3 - A young thief
#8 - A traitor from hell
#9 - Not alone
#10 - Millitary testing grounds
#13 - Bigfoot
#14 - And angel in love with a whore
#15 - Down the rabbit hole
#18 - Reborn as a 10 year old
#19 - A struggling door to door salesman
#24 - Rebellious talking food
#26 - Ssssnails!
#28 - Mission Erased
#32 - Dog's breath
#38 - Abducted
#42 - Killer clowns
#43 - A penny
#44 - Fear
#49 - Morning coffee
#50 - Midnight sunshine
#51 - My new home
#52 - Protest
#2 - A dolphin tea party
#4 - Stained hands
#7 - The giant depressed onion
#21 - The red star
#25 - Long-distance Relationship
#27 - A dream
#30 - Potato
#31 - Dragons
#33 - The Jungle
#35 - A life lesson
#36 - Unicorn meat
#39 - The Purple Road
#40 - Immortal Store Clerk
#41 - Artemis' Hell
#46 - A scientist's journal
#47 - One of many
#48 - Gone in 10
#53 - Loss

#5 - The homeless man
#6 - A blind date
#11 - The wealthy man
#12 - Happy ending
#16 - Asshole soulmate
#17 - My bunny Fluffy
#20 - War veteran
#22 - Wishing to meet a villain
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#34 - Turkey Trauma
#37 - Stuck in a loop

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Five minute freewrite challenges I have fulfilled so far:

Fire, Toilet, Flash, Soft feet, Pillow, Grounding, Surprise, Ending the pain, Going for a walk, Car Mechanic, Murderer, Dog hair, Ducks, Untested medicine, Forbidden love, Vacation, Awakening, Dentist, Wild west, Frozen Lake, Flea Market, Accident.

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Very good use of the prompts my friend! A well written and entertaining read! :)

Thanks! :D

I can't help but feel I could've done much more had it not been for the time constraints. Ugh.

I'll have you know I cooked up a 2000 word story with the prompt "Radio Show" from a couple days ago because I couldn't just stop it at 5 minutes :P Maybe I'll do the same with some other prompts as well if I get a good idea :P

Thank you very much for stopping by though! :D

Well, there is nothing stopping you revisiting freewrites and turning them into novels if you think they deserve it! Freewrites are just there to get the mental juices flowing. And now you need a towel to mop up all those juices! :)

Hahahah well put! :D And indeed, it's the brainstorming phase, really, that you then just need to type down on a computer/write down on paper. ^^

You're absolutely right! I might revisit some of the old, or maybe rather prolong some of the new. :P

Indeed: use it as a base. Sometimes that is how I write my stories. Start with a five minute blast and then go from there.

I actually used a similar approach with my latest two (still unpublished). I cooked up an idea in my mind, then recorded myself "telling myself the story", then essentially just transcripted it.
Easy way to make use of the time spent in my car on my way to work/home haha :D

That is ace! Years ago I spent a lot of time driving and I bought myself a small tape recording thing, but never used it. I am ok in front of a keyboard but can't seem to tell the story. I need to see the words.

While I wholeheartedly agree that I need to see the words too, sometimes it's the exact absence of the visual cue that causes the best ideas to surface :3