Something Found | Lola's Story Part 8 | Five- Minute Freewrite- prompt: grocery list

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Lola's fingers grazed the grocery list that sat next to the empty fruit bowl on the counter.

Apples
Bananas
Tissues
Deoderant

The last item, scribbled quickly on by Kyle before he had left for work that morning.

Lola placed the stack of mail she had scooped off the floor next to the list, and sat on the stool.

The hummingbird feeder still hung outside the window by the sink.

The refridgerator still hummed.

The coffee pot sat obediently, waiting for it's next pot.

She scooted off the stool, and headed to her bedroom to pick up some extra clothes, passing the empty room with the paint can lying in it's own pool of blood.

A laundry basket sat on the unmade bed, and she began to rifle through it.

This was all fruitless, she thought.

Her belly was only getting bigger, but her mom had insisted and had dropped her off.

As she scooped up a pair of underwear, a glimpse of a logo peered out through the heep of clothes. She scooped it in her hands, and held it close to her face.

She breathed in deeply trying to find him somewhere in the soft blue cotton.

And there...right there. He was.

She quickly put Kyle's favorite t-shirt in her bag, turned off bedroom light, and locked the front door behind her.

Thank you so much for coming to read this! If you would like to read the previous parts to get a fuller picture of Lola's story, I've linked them below!

Part 1

Part 2

Part 3

Part 4

Part 5

Part 6

Part 7


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Very nice... I love to read your blogs... Thanks for sharing

This is a hear-breaking tale that I had to go read from the start. I'm glad this is fiction. But, the fact that I had to check your tags to find out is a testament to your writing.

Thank you! I'm so excited you read it from the start! Before this, I wrote a lot of feel good freewrites...then one day this story popped out. They say to write what you are afraid of, and I think if I was where she is....well...it makes me emotional to think about.

for sure one has to go and read it from the beginning. I hope many do. so good!!!

Well I didn't read the previous parts (maybe one?) but I really liked your writing intimate style..compliments :-)

Thank you! I have to say it because it's driving me crazy...I used the word "scooped" three times...very close...😂 I would normally fix it, but something is holding me back, haha. Maybe because it flowed so nicely I don't want to start picking it apart...but I am! Thanks for listening to my rant...and for the comment!

It's true you scooped the scoopable but I didn't notice it since it was really pleasurable in its whole :-))

Ahhhh....thank you! Very reassuring! 😊

lovely freedomtowrite. i always been looking for your post from where you have find your signatures ??

I'm sorry @mehrab, but I don't think I understand your question.


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This all works so well, feels so real. Like a memory more than a fiction piece. I like the detail of the t-shirt.

scent is the strongest trigger for memory :( sad

@tipu send tip please!

Yes...I'm pretty sure I cried with this one...

Yep... You know it's gonna be a good one when you're crying in the writing!!!!

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