Original Flash Fiction, THE TIME TELLER, Plus a writing challenge, with a prize!

in #writing8 years ago

Add your flash fiction piece, 200 to 1000 words, following the rules at the end of the story!

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To help expose good writers and offer a chance for writing development, I've created this challenge for fiction writers on steemit. The rules follow the story, thanks for playing!

Washington polished the dash of his 2065 Chronohopper, looking at his wrist chronograph impatiently. If they didn’t show in the next 20 segments, he was hopping, with, or without the damn jewels. As a Time Teller, it was his job to know “when” it was, in all times, and right now, it was late.

The Chronohopper was designed for intra-atmospheric light speed jumps, moving from one time to another, without changing locality. That made for a lot of limitations. For instance, like now. He was waiting on his expeditioners to return via historically unreliable 19th century ground transport with a collection of “borrowed” diamond jewelry that had an expiration date.

Once the diamonds had been retrieved from this time, they were to be delivered to a very impatient customer, who held the keys to the master chronograph, and could, at will, decide to send them spinning off into time, rather than being dragged back through the centuries to deliver the jewels in 2121.

It was a science, stealing from the past. The current crew was attempting something new, known as a parallel snatch. They transported back into to a location, but in a slightly off kilter dimension, so that, in their own dimension, the jewels were never seen as stolen to begin with. Getting caught, however, meant the same as it always did, only they would be stuck in a dimension that was not their own, in another place and time.

That’s not what bothered Washington. His cut came from the crypto currency that would be transferred to his wallet upon delivery, and he knew that transporting items across dimensional lines was unpredictable at best. The diamonds might stabilize and last forever, or they might only be pretty to look at for a few minutes, up to a day, before slowly fading back to their original location on the continuum. He didn’t really care, as long as he got paid first.

The client understood the risks, but would have a jeweler standing by to perform tests to ensure their permanency. The longer it took to get them back, the more likely they were to have problems. Finally, Fin turned the corner and headed toward the back of the van at a dead run, Theo right behind him, and right behind them, half of the police force of London.

“Hurry up Washington, fire it up! Let’s go!” Theo yelled, tossing a satchel into the chronohopper as he and Fin crawled in, helmeted and buckled. Washington was ready. He checked the sync on his wrist, adjusted a single dial on the dash and hit the accelerator. The Chronohopper vibrated, it’s appearance slowly turning transparent to onlookers, and then popping back into corporeal form at the other end.

Washington removed his helmet slowly, it always took a segment to adjust to temporal displacement. They were in the right place, but something was off. He turned to find the customer, tied to a chair, a gun to his head, Wolf Fitzer holding it.

“Toss the satchel, lads,” the big man sneered. This was the third heist in the last seven that Wolf had boosted. It was getting to be a habit. He swore under his breath, he was buying a second master chronograph with his next good haul. Position it somewhen safe, then a bad landing like this just meant a second hop to escape the problem.

  1. Upvote the original post to enter the challenge.
  2. Using the image as inspiration, write an original piece between 200 and 1000 words and add it in a comment on the original post. It can be anything, from a narrative piece, to poetry, as long as it refers to the image in some way.
  3. All stories comments should be limited to pg13 material, please.
  4. Vote for your favorite comment entry by upvoting the comment containing your favorite story!
  5. The comment with the most upvotes wins 1/3 of the SBD payout on the original post! Plus, curation rewards for the comment! The more upvotes you get, the more you can make!
  6. Please add a link to your story leading back to your blog, so readers can follow your other writing.
  7. Feel free to comment (constructively and encouragingly) on other entries, if you'd like critique on yours, please note that at the top of your comment and I will add my two cents on your story!
  8. Have fun! If this goes well, you can expect to find a new one on my blog in the near future. Happy writing!

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Fraser looked at the device with interest. Was it some sort of a watch? An older time piece of some sort? It was in good condition. It looked like it had only recently been constructed. The leather handle felt new. And what about the dial and buttons? If it keeps time, then he had no idea how.

"I like the look of that one," he said to the man behind the counter. He was in a second hand dealers. He wasn't particularly wanting to buy a watch, or an item that vaguely resembled a watch. But he liked it. It had a certain rustic charm to it. "Does it work?"

"No, haven't been able to get that to do anything, to be honest with you. We only just got that in yesterday." He was keen to offload it, having no real idea of its selling points. To get interest after twenty four hours was a bonus.

"How much?" Fraser was hoping for a bargain.

"Give us twenty quid. We'll call it even."

Twenty pounds sounded reasonable to Fraser. He took the money out of his wallet, and proceeded to place the device around his wrist. Fraser tried turning the dial at the bottom edge of it, and waited. Nothing moved. The numbers all stayed the same. There were no hands, no ticking, just some numbers exposed on the face of it.

"I hope it's not broken," and having spoken those words he pressed the dial in, and realised it was also a button. He was just starting to wonder what that did, when he felt something. A strange sensation. A stirring in the atmosphere. He felt himself drifting, not physically, more at an internal level.

He watched in horror, as he heard himself speak the words, "I hope it's not broken." And press the button. And speak the words. And press the button.

It was some sort of a time device. It was broken. He was stuck. In a loop.

My page https://steemit.com/@naquoya

I like it. The only thing I would say is some more descriptive terms about the shop keeper, his shop, why Fraser was there... hard to critique it much though, solid bones. Well done.

Thanks for your comment. I will take all that on board for sure. I did somewhat rush it, but none the less I see what you mean.

That's the nature of a 24 hour contest, I guess! I hope you'll enter again. It looks like Geke is edging you out, with the two of you being the only entrants.

Not to worry. Thank you for the opportunity, and for helping to generate a new idea. I may work this story into a longer piece, adding more details, etc. I do think @geke was a very deserving winner.

I have worked this "bare bones" concept into a longer story, and posted it here: https://steemit.com/story/@naquoya/original-fiction-where-did-the-time-go

Nice, I will definitely be around to check that out! Steem on!

Congratulations to @Geke! With 5 votes, you are the winner. I'll deliver your prize shortly, well done!

Well deserved win too. It was a quality written piece.

Thank you @naquoya. I'm enjoying your work, too!

Well, he had some good competition, and if we had more voters I think you would have given him a run for the SBD! LOL Thanks for playing along.

(BTW, I'm a female.)

Oh, sorry! LOL, weird how we get impressions stuck in our head! I'm sure you are a perfectly lovely female. I won't forget.

Geke does sound like a guy, and my interests probably sound sort of guyish. But tonight I posted a picture (check it out - there's a funny video along with it), so hopefully people will start to have a better mental picture of me. :)

Thank you!

No thank you for playing! Please come back and share that style again! Have you published, or at least submitted some? I have a great site with an awesome submissions list that I use. Some magazines will pay hundreds for poems.

Not once ever. My writing tends to be all non-fiction, econ-related, so poetry is this fun thing I do as a palette cleanser and mental floss. It's my second poem with this type of Seuss-y meter (I've written a few strict sonnets, haiku, etc.), but the first one is much longer, with six lines per stanza. Someday I will post that one! I'd like to check out your submission info. Please post a link!

It's just writertown.com they charge 99 cents a month subscription, but I think you get a week free. Inside the site look for the gigs link and in there are both job listings (for people looking to hire writers by the project) and markets, (publishers, websites and magazines that accept open submissions.) it's a great site. you can also post your writing related posts there, and link to your blog, or your steemit page, if you wanted. It's the only subscription site I recommend.

What an awesome way to pay it forward. You, Sir, are a gentleman! <3

Well, it was actually suggested by my business coach as a way to build audience participation, I assure you my motives were almost entirely ulterior! LOL I'll do another soon, you should get here sooner and throw your hat in the ring!

I love your newly coined word: somewhen!

Thanks, so, where's your entry?

Okay, I upvoted and wrote a poem in response to this challenge. So much fun! Should I reprint the poem here in the comments?

Here is the link to my poem's post (per #6 of your instructions):
https://steemit.com/writing/@geke/the-banker-and-the-bulova-an-original-poem-steemit-flash-writing-challenge

Yes, the poem should be a comment on the post itself, though, so reply at the top.

Great content. Followed! :)

When is this contest over?

The post has paid out and I just got back to my computer. It looks like Geke is the winner on this one, I'll have to calculate the prize and deliver. I'll do another one within the next week, though, with a completely different image of some sort.

Wow that's a story!!

Thanks, if you like it, follow my blog, I share a lot of fiction and have two novels in daily serialization right now.

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