Abandoned House - 5 Minute Freewrite (Day 63)
He finished with the lock on the back door and held it open while she snuck inside. After closing the door, he peered through the windows to see if anyone had seen them. None of the lights near the abandoned house had come on. He grinned, pulled the curtains and turned to reassure her that he'd been right.
She wasn't there.
Moving through the mudroom, he peered into the kitchen doorway, calling her name. Quietly at first, and then with more force as his annoyance grew. Once he'd left the kitchen, he heard a crackle and saw a soft glow coming from a front room.
She was there. Staring into a lit fireplace, entranced by the flames. He sighed, and as he went to tell her not to scare him like that, it dawned on him that there shouldn't be a fire. She hadn't had time to start a fire, let alone get one blazing along merrily like this one was. When he called her name again, she didn't respond. Getting angry, he strode forward, reaching up to grab her shoulder when the log made a loud pop. Startled, he looked down into the fireplace.
The fire was bright and its heat felt good after being out in the cold. When had be been so warm? So comfortable? The flames, oranges, yellows, and blues, performed a mesmerizing dance. How beautiful! He couldn't look away. Why look away? He had everything he needed right here.
The couple stood, entranced with fire. Unable to hear the dark, satisfied laughter from deep within the house.
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Nice work, very moody and suspenseful. A welcoming fireplace indeed...
I'm so happy that you liked my story! Thank you! You may want to cover your ears cuz I am about to shout... " I LOVE YOUR SEAL!!"
Loud and clear over here :)
I really like this and I love the last sentence. Tip!
Thank you for reading my story! It makes me smile to know that you liked it! Iwas in the middle of writing this when I thought of how I wanted it to end. So I typed the sentence and then typed 'move' after it. I guess I was worried I was going to forget where I wanted it to go. 😂 Thank you as well for your kind tip. I really appreciate it!
The pleasure was all mine on both counts. Looking forward to reading more of your freewrites. : )
Ohhhhhhhhhhhhh this was GREAT! :D by next Halloween I'm going to be afraid to read anything LOL
Thank you! I recommend that you stay away from @f3nix and his basement butterfly collection. (And me with my spiders....)
I'm staying away from you guys! LOLL
Ha! I'm picturing you running away Scooby Doo style from me, f3nix, spiders and butterflies. 😂 I LOVE the gargoyles! Surfer Santa looks good there! LOL
OMG!! I LOVE your squirrel!! :D
Thank you! I couldn't resist!
oh I like this one. Is someone in the house, or is it the house???
Thank you! I'm so glad that you like it! (As for the house, it's both.😉)
Well, the dude sounded like an angry kind of a guy - but did the girl deserve this too? :)
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Well, she did break into the house with him...
True - but people do silly things for love! lol
Thank you for alerting me to this wonderful story. You do a good job of making me want to read more. Very suspenseful.
I'm happy that you liked it. I was hoping you would. I thought I was doing a good job of not finishing a story! 😂
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