SPU Poetry Contest #1: The More Than This

in #poetsunited6 years ago

This is my entry for the SPU Poetry Contest #1: Announcement!, hosted by @poetrybyjeremy.

This Poetry Contest uses the Steemit poets’ poems for the prompt. We are given three different lines from different Steemit poets for inspiration. Here are the poem lines I chose to write my poem. I thought they were very unique lines.

LOST -Poem @lymepoet

if I only had a match to light
and see where I am now
wrong side of heaven
or righteous
depth of
hell?


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The More than This

The fog rolled in; the hills were hidden, like in a dream.
The music became louder; faster than the flowing streams.
I was taken from all I knew; to see friends nevermore.
To chase beauty, I’d never seen and find treasures I would adore.

But the soothing rain never fell, and the land became decayed.
And then the sun scorched the trees, and the hills were filled with flames.
The people cried, and they could not find their fill.
The thirst for the more than this, and the promises of never will.

The grateful ones were the simple kind, never asking for their share.
Desolation covered the streets and the shame escaped their care.
We waited for the guiding light; if only a candle in the wind.
But before the light came the flood, and then their prayers chimed in.

We watched as the land fell into the sea, and we heard the horrid tales,
Of those who couldn’t take a breath and were eaten by the whales.
And darkness spread across the globe, from one land to the next.
I shook my head; I had to laugh, as I took my final breath.


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@simgirl,

I entered the PoetsUnited Poetry Contest too ... which makes you the competition. So, I thought I'd check you out. I'm glad I did. Your poem is very good. Indeed, it's one of the best I've yet to see on Steemit. I re-read it three times. You've got a new follower.

Best of luck on the contest and I hope we'll have a chance to chat sometime.

Thanks for reading, and for the ego boost! There is a lot of talented writers in this competition. I will be reading the others today too :D

This was a great write! I'm glad you entered our contest. One thing I appreciated is that you did rhyme, but only when it worked out. You did not force it - it remained a natural and effortless rhyme, with a great flow. I've enjoyed the vivid descriptions - especially when "land fell into sea"- clever words.

Thanks! I don't write too much poetry, so I don't know all the rules. The prompt was very good, and made it a bit easier. Thanks very much for hosting the contest for us!

Poetry is one of the strangest things - it has no rules. Unless you are forced by contest or form. But, for our contest and my poetry, there are no rules. To write and express yourself (and be inspired by a prompt in this case). That was totally good though, how you manage to weave in rhymes here and there but yet keep the rhythm going.

Great! Thanks for following me, i do hope to see you on my wall soon

Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!! <3

Thank you!!! Have a great night!

Night!! <3

Astounding, as usual with your writing. Just beautiful!

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