aging - a poem

in #poetry7 years ago (edited)


Old Man. photo by Torico, original street art from Gamma Gallery, Denver



unsettled
that smell of blackened earth
spits red wine on disused tongue
scents of what you once were
a primal dirt pulsing in your veins

an energy of life running in tunnels
of blood familiar as a womb
quickening and you
digging underneath

siphoning white sand on skin
bury your legs
pretend
what it is to die
surrounded by life

as sea and sun flicker
like flapping wings
a sound of tapping fingers
as waves tickle the edge of your feet
then pull away

_
a stone washed
man lingers in your spine
like summer rain
he follows you home

to that dread where you once lived
a stray dog with paper thin
matted fur
of ribs that have not seen
love for days disappears

weeks or years later
his memory pulls at you
fills you with pain
and sorrow
as if sensing his death
as your own

a backwards glance
life fading in the distance
a passing parade
lost with the turn
of the tide



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Time is so elusive and seems to fall through our fingers even faster as we age. Your imagery is so powerful in this poem and your diction is perfect. The line that gets me is "...of ribs that have not seen love." Powerful. Thank you for inspiring me to pick up the pen again @torico.

thanks doghaus! I totally appreciate the feedback! I'm happy to inspire even one person :)

Thanks again @torico. We write because we have to but inspiring people is certainly a great spinoff. Looking forward to reading more of your work.

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Thank you xyzashu, what an interesting idea for a contest! I applaud your creative approach and will look forward to seeing what comes of your contest. I appreciate your choosing my poem as part of it, Best of luck :)

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Great imagery and full of deep thought. Hope I'm reaching people in their emotions with my writing as you are here.

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