Mizu No Oto - Every Image Has Its Haiku Contest - WEEK #8
Haiku by Kobayashi Issa (1803)
The Bananafish poetic contest!
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For those that want to unleash their poetic potential, here is how this contest works:
• Look at the prompt image and let yourself be inspired by it.
• Write a haiku related to the prompt image. The haiku should be composed by 3 verses with no title. The 1st verse should be 5 syllables long, the 2nd verse should be 7 syllables long, and the 3rd verse should be 5 syllables long again.
• If you aren’t confident with English enough, you can write your haiku in Spanish, French, or Italian as well. Only remember, if you write in languages different from English, please include an English translation for other readers.
• Post the haiku on your blog or in the comment section below this post. If you make your own post, don’t forget to put the link to it in the comment section below!
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Prompt Image:
[photo credit: @marcoriccardi]
• Kireji (切れ字), a cut between the 1st and the 2nd verses, or between the 2nd and the 3rd; the cut can be grammatical, as a sign of punctuation, or it can be a cut in the meaning, like two different images.
• Kigo (季語), an explicit or implicit reference to a season, that defines the time of the year in which the haiku is composed or referred to.
• Sabi (寂), the sense of the inexorable passage of time, the beauty or serenity that accompanies the advance of age, when the life of the objects and its impermanence are highlighted by patina and wear or by any visible repairs.
• Wabi (侘寂), the taste for frugal and natural things, rustic simplicity, freshness or silence; it can be applied to both natural and artificial objects, or even non-ostentatious elegance.
• Mono no aware (物の哀れ), empathy with nature and human life; the "feeling of things", nostalgia, regret for the passing of time, understanding of the changeability and of the transience without suffering.
• Yūgen (幽玄), sense of wonder and mystery; it represents the state of mind produced by the inexplicable fascination of things, the feeling of an 'other' universe, full of mysterious unity.
• Karumi (軽み), beauty in simplicity; poetic beauty reflected in its simplicity, free from preconceptions and moral judgment.
• Shiori (しおり), gentleness; the levity and the delicate charm that radiates from the verses, where things are evoked in the reader without aggressiveness or excessive explicitness.
Submission deadline: Wednesday 14th November, 11:59 PM, GMT -7 (Pacific Daylight Time).
The results will be out on Thursday 15th November, 1:00 PM, GMT -7 (Pacific Daylight Time).
I wish everyone good luck!
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My vote is for @vdux
Going to have to split my vote between @josemalavem and @cyemela, @josemalavem is very nice to read, but not understanding the original form, hard to come to a full conclusion, so splitting my vote with @cyemela who is so skilled at this
Cada nueva edición de este concurso se va haciendo más difícil decidir por un ejercicio, pues están concurriendo trabajos de mucha calidad. Desde mi perspectiva y gusto, valoro los ejercicios de @gaby-crb, @oacevedo, @kipswolfe, @aurodivys, @marlyncabrera, @gracielaacevedo y @adncabrera. Puesto en la necesidad de elegir, voto por @kipswolfe.
Antes de pasar al comentario, debo aclarar que me guío por la versión en español, aunque sé que esta es una limitación.
Observo en el ejercicio de @kipswolfe varios valores relacionados con el haiku: su distribución en los versos, con una imagen primera que se corta, y luego continua en los otros dos versos con imágenes complementarias; la visión de la realidad presentada con sencillez, dando cuenta de la belleza y serenidad de lo presente, en juego con la naturaleza; la inclusión del paso del tiempo, y con ello a lo estacional; lo sugerido sin ostentación ni artificio verbal.
Each new edition of this contest is becoming more difficult to decide for an exercise, as they are competing works of high quality. From my perspective and taste, I value the exercises of @gaby-crb, @oacevedo, @kipswolfe, @aurodivys, @marlyncabrera, @gracielaacevedo and @adncabrera. Put in the need to choose, vote for @kipswolfe.
Before moving on to the commentary, I must clarify that I am guided by the Spanish version, although I know that this is a limitation.
I observe in the exercise of @kipswolfe several values related to haiku: its distribution in the verses, with a first image that is cut, and then continues in the other two verses with complementary images; the vision of reality presented with simplicity, realizing the beauty and serenity of the present, in play with nature; the inclusion of the passage of time, and with it the seasonal; the suggested without ostentation or verbal artifice.
I'll go with the @theironfelix, because his Spanish version was music to my ears.
Comentar los hermosos productos de este concurso es una tarea muy difícil por varias razones (entre las que se encuentra la imposibilidad de dar un comentario a cada trabajo).Siempre sentiremos que algunos nos impactan más que otros, pero todos son hermosos.
Puesta a decir cuál interpretación de la fotografía de @marcoriccardi me llegó más profundo tendría que decantarme por el haiku de @calluna.
Creo que @calluna dejó de ver las briznas de paja, venció la hipnosis del agua y a través de las inocentes aves llegó poeticamente a un lugar muy poco frecuentado, donde vive el espíritu de la esperanza. El poema de @calluna contagia alegría y certeza por la sacralidad de la vida. Este haiku me produce confianza: La vida- que para los humanos, es la cultura (la posibilidad de entender y de hacerse entendible)- siempre encontrará un camino.
Creo que este poema es propicio de ser generalizable, podría aplicarse a situaciones difíciles, no ya de ciudades sino de países (siempre fluirá el santuario secreto). La ciudad también puede ser metáfora de uno mismo, como ser. Gracias @calluna por construir tan bella poesía. Gracias @bananafish por propiciarlo.
Commenting on the beautiful products of this contest is a very difficult task for several reasons (among which is the impossibility of giving a commentary to each work). We will always feel that some impact us more than others, but they are all beautiful.
Setting out to say which interpretation of the photograph of @marcoriccardi came to me more deeply I would have to opt for the haiku of @calluna.
I think @calluna stopped seeing the straw, beat the hypnosis of the water and through the innocent birds arrived poetically at a place very little frequented, where the spirit of hope lives. The poem of @calluna spreads joy and certainty for the sacredness of life. This haiku gives me confidence: Life - that for humans, it is culture (the possibility of understanding and being understood) - will always find a way.
I believe that this poem is propitious to be generalizable, it could be applied to difficult situations, not only of cities but of countries (the secret sanctuary will always flow). The city can also be a metaphor for oneself, as a being. Thanks @calluna for building such beautiful poetry. Thanks @bananafish for propitiating it.
thank you so very much <3 I have just been so moved by this comment, thank you so much for taking the time to say it, and then translate it as well <3
You are welcome,@calluna. I really like your haikus...
The haiku presented so far are all beautiful exercises in which inspiration appears from the good photography shared by @marcoriccardi.
In all the editions of this contest in which I have participated, are always my favorites @josemalavem. This time I also like the haiku of @oacevedo because it speaks of love and harmony and I believe that love is the feeling that strengthens the world.
As I cannot vote for both of them, I give my vote to the haiku of @josemalavem because it transmits peace, tranquillity and, moreover, these simple and profound words resonate in me: "water that passes" / "fluidity and calm", which make me think about what Heraclitus said: "the only permanent thing is change", so, the same waters will never be the same, everything changes, everything flows and so life itself, nothing is forever and after storms comes calm.
Los haikú presentados hasta ahora son todos ejercicios hermosos en los cuales la inspiración aparece a partir de la buena fotografía que nos comparte @marcoriccardi.
En todas las ediciones de este concurso en las que he participado, siempre son mis favoritos los de @josemalavem. Esta vez me gusta también el haikú de @oacevedo porque habla de amor y de armonía y yo creo que es el amor el sentimiento que fortalece al mundo.
Como no puedo votar por los dos, le doy mi voto al haikú de @josemalavem porque transmite paz, sosiego y, además, hacen resonancia en mi estas palabras sencillas y profundas: "agua que pasa"/ "fluidez y calma", que me hacen pensar en lo que decía Heráclito: "lo único permanente es el cambio", así pues, nunca serán las mismas aguas, todo cambia, todo fluye y así la vida misma, nada es para siempre y después de las tormentas llega la calma.
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The poor bird
while a Third keeps silent
and is satisfied
Interesting choice of words and point of view!
Is the first verse a sort of title or something?
Is the Third the photographer (a.k.a. me)?
Water running past
the river bed. Natures birds
gather down for nests
Interesting choice of kireji in the midst of the verse, creating two "enjambement"-like movements.
I like this very much @gaby-crb. It gives me the sense of natural flow of time and life, with the birds preparing a future and the river (like the river of life) flowing.
I like how you bring the background into the foreground to shift the sense of focus, creating a wider picture
Deep in the city
Flows secret sanctuary
New life finds a way
So this is my second try. Good thing I deleted the other before anyone noted it. This one may not be better, but it does make me smile. That's worth something:)
Nest building season.
Is that a duck or a dove?
Are these two in love?
awww i love the idea of these two having run away together (coot and a pigeon - I think) like modern, feathered Romeo and Juliet, they couldn't come from more different worlds and looking at the picture after reading this, they do have a sense of togetherness!
Hi @calluna: I know nothing about birds--except that I'm a bit of an odd one :) But I love that picture. The picture is love. It's hope, and the future. We see it, together 🐣
Exactly @calluna: a coot and a rock pigeon! I was saving this for the proclamation post... pigeon and dove are somewhat synonims, but many called the other bird a duck, altough is very different-looking. But it's not so important, at the end... the haikus are beautiful anyway!
We met by the shore
She was afraid of the deep
It came from behind
You told a story in 17 syllables! But "It" was a well intentioned monster, it wanted only take a pic (lol!)
You also made me laugh, though :) I can totally relate to this 'It' when it comes to photographing wildlife.
Jeez, don't go on dates with this dude ;)
I feels as if you have actually read my other option for the last line - the one I did not publish ;)
as if this one isn't promising enough, but now I really want to know, or maybe really don't...
Well, I think I ruined it already, but for curiosity's sake:
...
'There're other birds'
Wandering birds rest
Autumn leaves summer changes
Next to water's edge
https://steemit.com/haikucontest/@kipswolfe/writing-mizo-no-oto-haiku-contest
Welcome to Mizu no Oto! Thank you for you haiku and good luck!
Antes que nada, quiero poner de relieve que solo me atrevo a comentar los escritos en español porque mis conocimientos del idioma inglés son demasiado rudimentarios y respeto mucho el trabajo de los compañeros participantes en ese idioma de cual desconozco la métrica, el ritmo, la melodía...
Ahora bien, aún así es bastante difícil elegir un solo texto entre los excelentes trabajos presentados hasta este momento, sin embargo, como quiero emitir mi opinión, hago mi voto preferencial por el haiku de @aurodivys:
Tranquilas aves
a la orilla del lago.
La sed saciada.
Percibo que en este haiku queda expresada la sustancia que mana de la imagen. En los dos primeros versos, con un lenguaje hermoso y muy sencillo, nos presenta la apacible naturaleza en movimiento para terminar en el tercer verso con un giro que nos sugiere el resultado de lo acontecido en ese ambiente orgánico.
Felicitaciones a los amigos de @banafish por la convocatoria y a todos mis vecinos en este concurso tan sublime.
Entiendo la honestidad intelectual detrás de su elecciòn!
A decir verdad, yo hago un trabajo de azar, porque me atrevo a juzgar en idiomas que conozco, pero ciertamente no son mi lengua materna, y sin duda tengo algunas lagunas, pero espero que nadie tenga una ofensa o esté resentido por mi trabajo :)
在草地上嚼
虽然被相机逮捕
晴朗的天空
Hierba jaspaeda
mientras arrestado
cielo soleado
Gobbled grass
while arrested -
sunny sky.
This here be me entry for this contest.
It is absolutely beautiful in Spanish. Kind of poem I want to read out loud to hear the music of it.