#Fiftywords: Backyard (Tiny Story)
He guided his fellow soldiers through the flower field. Another story in fifty words.
Another #fiftywords entry, I tired to use the full extent of the theme/prompt and I'm proud of the result. Here's the story below:
Backyard
"They're here."
He guided his fellow soldiers through the flower field.
"This was your old backyard wasn't it?"
One solider stepped on the roses he had always cherished.
"Does it matter?"
His grip on the shotgun tightened.
"It's their backyard now."
He never thought his home would become a battlefield.
END...?
What do you think?
Or you can check my longer stories "Your Heart Would Remember" and "A Fascinating Legacy."
Nice work @ahmadmanga! This feels like a video game scene, but it could easily be real life, in anyone's backyard, in anyone's country.
Yeah, your imagination is the limit for this story... Even the soldiers might not be real soldiers.
Awesome short story sir!!Deep meaning..I will definately read the other stories..
Thanks for reading and commenting :)
you are most welcome sir
When I was a kid I'd imagine ways to defend my house, strategic points at the roof to shoot and arrow and stuff. I really liked your story, and hope to see how that battle goes
Wow, this comment made me interpret my story in another interesting way, thanks!!
Wow, this is powerful. It puts us right there in that dramatic situation. Well done.
I tried to put as much action as I could because I read you said in your post:
I'm not sure I succeeded (I don't have any resolution here,) but your comment now made me feel really happy.
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You have really imagined this story excellently.
What a distressing setting! Your own back yard, now grudgingly acknowledged as having been taken by an enemy.
Only one word grated on me - I would suggest a revision of your final sentence to make this story perfect:
Thanks for a great read!
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Sorry I really suck at English tenses... I should use services like Grammerly but I always forget to do that.
Fixing now~
Hey, no apology necessary!
Do I understand correctly that English is not your native language? Then I must say that you have done an outstanding job overall, and I can only help that my small suggestion helps you a little bit. :D
I'm not sure if even Grammerly would have helped with this...
Thank you again for a great story. Really excellent!
Yeah (Arabic Native,) but I use English regularly for at least 8 years now, so I don't think that's an excuse. Thanks again~
My friend, you need no excuse... You're just plain good!
Please continue the great work. :D