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RE: #Fiftywords: Backyard (Tiny Story)
You have really imagined this story excellently.
What a distressing setting! Your own back yard, now grudgingly acknowledged as having been taken by an enemy.
Only one word grated on me - I would suggest a revision of your final sentence to make this story perfect:
"He never thought his home would become a battlefield."
Thanks for a great read!
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Sorry I really suck at English tenses... I should use services like Grammerly but I always forget to do that.
Fixing now~
Hey, no apology necessary!
Do I understand correctly that English is not your native language? Then I must say that you have done an outstanding job overall, and I can only help that my small suggestion helps you a little bit. :D
I'm not sure if even Grammerly would have helped with this...
Thank you again for a great story. Really excellent!
Yeah (Arabic Native,) but I use English regularly for at least 8 years now, so I don't think that's an excuse. Thanks again~
My friend, you need no excuse... You're just plain good!
Please continue the great work. :D