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Chapter One


Seven Weeks Earlier

Anna mused that there were few things, at least in her limited experience of life, that were more beautiful than a waterfall. She closed her eyes against the fine mist blanketing her face and listened.

It was a combination of things really. The constant thunder of its endless pour over the sides of well-worn rock, but when you listened closely it was as if there were hundreds of individual streams all calling out their own unique, triumphant cries as they jumped over the side in complete and joyous abandon, and when you put it all together it became one voice, like a well-trained symphony.

And that was what she saw of it with her eyes still closed and her head thrown back, breathing in the chilly vapor that seemed to refresh her to her innermost core, yet another element of its glory.

She slowly opened her eyes and began moving backward out of its delicious spray to fully take in the sight. She drew in a breath and experienced a shiver of pure pleasure. It was mesmerizing to watch and she grinned foolishly at the thought that those hundreds of slivers of water looked like strings of diamonds leaping into the shimmering robes of an angel, rippling the gown as they flowed to the bottom.

She heard voices headed her way and it broke apart the magic of the moment.
What is it with people that they are so rarely in tune with nature? She thought in exasperation. They're always loud and oblivious to everything around them except the sounds of their own voices. She watched as the group came stomping over, somehow managing to be heard over nature’s thunderous music. As they reached the rocky edge they stopped in unison, and in that brief moment there was absolute silence. Hmm, perhaps not so unaffected after all, she thought with a small smile. She watched them for a few more seconds before making her way back to the park’s expansive lawn.

As she walked she laughed to herself thinking that her ungenerous thoughts of the group were just a mite hypocritical. In a few minutes her friends would be arriving and the six of them would hardly be pensive and quiet as they made their way down the river bed to the main waterfall. She shook her head in bemusement and focused on her surroundings, smiling widely.

It was a beautiful day, the sun was out in full force and she knew the grass would feel amazing on her feet, so she slid her sandals off and curled her toes in the soft green blanket. She dropped down on the spongy warmth and stretched out on her back, closing her eyes blissfully as the breeze from the falls tickled across her face. Just give me a pillow and I could easily take a nap, she sighed. She entertained the thought for about two seconds before deciding against it. The girls would be there any minute and she shuddered to think of the different methods they might use to wake her up…cold water in the face, a spider on her chest, shouting in her ear, hmm, yeah, staying awake was definitely safer.

She stared up at the sky and decided to play her favorite childhood game while she waited-cloud animation. There were large pieces of white fluff scattered and floating across the great blue and she found her first cartoon immediately as a Viking ship came into focus, proud sails billowing in the wind chasing after a...large dog? Yup, complete with a lolling tongue. To the west a clown on stilts was bending down to pick up....nooo, not a clown, a transformer, and he was stepping out of another dimension. Good one, she mentally applauded...

"Anna bo banna fo fanna!"

She sat up and grinned as she spotted her friends making their way across the clearing. Her lip twitched at the sight of Jenna singing and bopping her head, her wavy long black hair swishing back and forth. She bumped her generous hips against her sister Jess who laughed and bumped her back, though when Jess did it the motion was far more sensual. With a classically beautiful face and an hourglass figure that tapered into long legs, Jess always looked like she’d just stepped out of a magazine. The siblings did a dance skip and Anna grinned before shifting her focus to the others.

Macey was watching the sisters with an expression of mock hilarity, a look that was often seen on her exotically attractive face. She was smiling from ear to ear, and God Anna loved that smile. White and wide and genuine, it was nearly always present. She giggled as she watched Macey reach out and goose Jenna, laughing loudly as she dodged retaliation.

“Hey, what about me?” Jess sulked teasingly.

“Ooh baby, get over here,” Macey made a kitty sound.

Anna grinned as she caught Holly’s eye roll in her peripheral.

Marina caught it as well, “Oh come on Hol, you know you want some!”

Holly looked up at the tall blonde and smirked, “Don’t even think about it,” she warned.

Marina made a move toward her and Holly darted away with a squeal, her wavy brown hair streaming out behind her.

God I love my girls, Anna thought. All so different yet they complemented one another perfectly.

They reached her and she hopped to her feet, joining the two sisters of the group in song, doing a little shimmy shake.

"Party tonight!" Jess clapped Anna five and bumped hips with her, still dancing.

"You know it! So what guy are you lusting after today?" She raised an eyebrow, her lip curling in a teasing smile.

Jess smiled back at her in a very impish way, so Anna prodded, "Who is it, spill!"

"Nathan Ryden," Jenna stated, "she totally made out with him the other night at the pier."

"I did not make out with him, it was just one kiss!"

"Uh huh, is that what we're calling five minute long tongue action these days?"

Jess glared at her sister, then gave it up and grinned. "Okay," she confessed," I guess I made out with him a little."

"Nathan, really? Since when do you like him?" Marina piped in as she tied her long blonde hair back in a lopsided ponytail.

"Do you really need to ask that question," Jenna rolled her blue-violet eyes, "it was just a matter of time since he's one of the last remaining cute guys in our town that she hasn't had a fling with."

"You are so mean to me, and you make me sound so bad!" Jess pouted.

Anna draped an arm around her shoulder. "Don’t listen to her, there is absolutely nothing wrong with being boy crazy, Jenna just likes giving you crap."

"Oh pu-leeze," Jenna drawled, "this coming from you? You've kissed exactly two people and it took eons for you to get to that point both times!"

Anna blushed and shook her head. "It's not my fault that guys look at me and see a cute little sister."

That earned her a chorus of boos.

"Anna, what are you talking about, you’re gorgeous!" Jess put in, a frown creasing her brow.

"Yeah, false modesty is very unattractive," Jenna added.

Anna smirked. "Hey, I'm not being falsely modest, I just happen to know that my pixie look does not elicit strong sexual urges from the opposite sex. Since some of my friends have guys eye-screwing them everywhere we go, I should know." Being five foot three and petite of build she was convinced she was too tiny and childlike to ever be considered sexy. It was only her silvery blonde hair and unusual turquoise eyes that allowed her to admit she was attractive.

"What about Austin?" Holly offered.

"He doesn't count."

"And why not?"

"Because he’s like a brother to me,” she held up a hand to stop the objections, “yes I know he feels differently, but I just...I don't know."

"But he's tall and handsome, and obviously does not think that you're too childlike,” Jess pointed out.

"Well that's just because I have such an amazingly sexy personality! See, I'm not falsely modest, in fact I find myself fantastically awesome." She stuck out her tongue and laughter filled the air around her.

"Eh hmm,” Holly cleared her throat as the laughter died away, “if you want to talk about pixie-ish, let's talk about me instead." She waved her hand over her body and raised her eyebrows.

Anna shrugged smiling, "We're both pixies." Holly was a little taller but even slighter in stature if that was possible.

"So," Marina chimed in, tapping her foot in mock impatience, "are we going to stand around all day discussing our looks, or go see our waterfall?"

“Eww Mar, you be-otch,” Macey laughed and poked her in the side

They headed down to the river bed and began their trek towards the great falls, a much taller version of the one Anna had been soaking in before they arrived and therefore the main attraction, although privately Anna preferred the entrance falls. They were explosive and wild, the way she secretly wanted her life to be. Glancing around at her friends she wondered if any of them felt the same.

Over the years of their friendship, particularly once they’d turned sixteen and could drive themselves, they’d spent a great deal of time at this particular park. So much time it had begun to feel like an extension of their backyards. The previous year had rend some changes in that routine however, since she and Holly had graduated a year before the others and Holly now resided in the state of North Carolina where she attended college during the school term. Their group of six had become five for a time and they'd all felt the loss.

Anna had continued to live at home, taking some courses at the local community college, but she was currently toying with the idea of moving to California once the summer ended. Macey would be relocating to Buffalo for university and Jenna was considering the same....soon they would be living separate lives. It was equal parts exciting and profoundly sad, the duality giving her a head spin.

When they reached their destination they all stopped to pay homage to the great waters rushing down from high above. Though it was narrow, the sheer height from which it fell was greater than that of Niagara Falls making it impressive in its own right. Sometimes, when there were few people around, they would swim at the base of it. Today the park was busy and they would not escape notice if they were to jump in with their typical banshee cries so they restricted themselves to the benches that lined the wooden railing.

Their conversation consisted mainly of their impending trip to Europe. The journey overseas would begin in two weeks, a mere two days after the remaining four girls received their diplomas. They had been planning their great escape for a year and it was hard for them to believe it was almost here.

The vacation would center in London, with side trips to France, Ireland and Italy. At first they had thought to stay in Paris for the greater part of it, but the language barrier presented a problem. They’d finally agreed on five days each in Paris, Venice, and Dublin, the remaining two weeks would be spent partying at the famous English pubs and clubs in and around London town. Initially they'd intended for their trip to last the entire summer, but Holly had an internship, Jess a job obligation, and Macey's parents wanted her home for a bit before she moved into the college dorm-so they’d narrowed it down to a month.

"Sooo, are we ready to head back?" Macey inched in that direction indicating that she was and they all stood. Macey was never overtly demanding, she would always tell you what she wanted in a question, but after years of friendship they all knew that when she was done with a particular place she would become mildly and increasingly irritated if they continued to stay.

They walked back through the canyon continuing their discussion of Europe. Holly had been doing her research (she could always be counted on for that, organization and planning were her specialties) and she had an itinerary made up for them. Anna insisted however, that they leave some things blank. She liked surprises and doing things in a fly by night fashion, as did Marina which was evidenced in nearly every one of their excursions.

When they were once again at the grassy field that led to the parking area, Anna halted to salute her entrance waterfalls and turned to the girls with an expression of thoughtfulness. "Isn't it amazing how two hundred years from now, barring any major catastrophes, that water will still be pouring down over those rocks?"

"You think too much," Marina grinned, pushing her playfully.

She shrugged, smiling back. Well I think it's cool, she thought defensively, it's just too bad I won't be around to see it.



Chapter Two





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This was a great follow-up, and just when I told you that it's alright to miss a post, I missed the intro post to this one! Haha! This had a really serene feel to it, which is a nice contrast to the prologue. It still stands, that this is my favorite writing-wise, the reader can feel your passion for this piece seep through every word. It's amazing that you have such differing writing styles for this, The Playground Series and Today Again, but still have your special @dreemit touch to it. Every series stands great on their own, and I'm glad that people have taken notice of your spectacular skill :D Looking forward to reading more of your seminal work alongside your current one!

The characters in this story came to life for me, I feel as if they are out there, as real as you and me. I'm so glad that it comes through! This story also had the great benefit of being reworked and rewritten that is not the case for the work of mine you've seen so far, haha! It's also the perfect time for me to be re-reading it since there has been enough time to give me a fresh perspective, I feel like I'm visiting people I adore and haven't seen in a long while, it's great!
This is not a short novel, just so you know what you're in for, it's well over four hundred pages, maybe more like 500, as is the book that follows. I'm about 200 pages into the first draft of the third book in the series...Oh! I have not come up with a series name so when the story really gets going keep that in mind and if you think of anything I am open to suggestions!

The hard work and effort really shows! The revisions really highlight your skill and potential. I get what you're saying in terms of revisiting, as I'm doing it myself. It's fun getting to be re-introduced to old characters, huh? It's like meeting them for the first time again.

500 pages?? Wow! My debut novel was about 150 pages, if I remember correctly. 500 pages.. now that's a labor of love! That's really something to be excited about, and definitely a series that could last you an entire years worth of posts. I'm sure that it will put @dreemit on the map as one of the premier writers in this platform :D

Without knowing the plot of the third one, hmm... Restoration? Haha! Had to take a shot!

Yes, I am definitely going with the Re theme for the book titles, and actually one of them probably could be Restoration! ;) But what I meant was a title for the whole series, like the lord of the rings is the series title and each book had its own title. I just can't land on a series title, haha!
I know, five hundred pages, it might be four hundred it's hard to say because some pages are filled with text, while others are broken up by conversation, but when I did a page comparison to novels similar to it, that's what I came up with...one of my friends read it in a few days, of course they said they were burning the midnight oil while they were doing it! Actually another one of my friends has read the books three times already and is getting very snotty with me about finishing the third one, LOL.

Hmm.. How about Remember or Rewind? Haha! I love coming up with titles almost as much as telling stories :D I'm a slow reader, so that's going to be a labor for me. Although, one that I would be happy to undertake.

Oh, also... https://steemit.com/fiction/@fiction-trail/fiction-trail-daily-magazine-24th-of-january-2017 :D

500 pages!!! Wow.

I know, the craziest part is that instead of starting out my writing career simple, such as having two leads and a few side characters, I end up taking on a series with several dimensions and a big cast of characters-which is an enormous challenge. Keeping the voices of everyone involved unique is what I learned is most important. You'll see for yourself as you continue down this path, I expect one day you'll have a manuscript I'll be saying Wow about!

Excellent episode dear friend @dreemit thanks for another great material

Hey lovely @dreemit!

First off, I'm so so so sorry I've not being around for a while. Your writing I feel is just too good to simply skim through so now I've had a chance to relax and finaly take it all in (however as I mentioned before, you are on my bot list so will ALWAYS be upvoted by me).

Well, what a way to connect with the reader. The four girls are very descriptively written and really show their closeness and playful natures. Your use of English and general flow of narrative is just top notch and I fully agree with my brother @jedau when we say that you are destined to be part of the premier writers on Steemit (if not already, lol).

Awesome way to start proceedings, I'm so happy that are getting the recognition you absolutely deserve and now am on to the next chapter right now.

Excellent work, @dreemit!

Hey there :) No worries at all! I LOVE that you enjoy my writing, but I don't get anxious if I don't see you for a couple of days ;)
Actually this book is finished, as is the second in the series and since they are hundreds of pages each, yes, the story is planned out. These have been rewritten and revised, and actually The Scene, that you thought was horror, is the prologue to it.
Since you have been away, I did want to make sure you know that there is a Caleb chapter which contains a little backstory that you may have missed ;)
Now since you're here I have to go check on your blog.
Thank you, always, for your support @ezzy!

Lots for me to catch up on then, lol! Thanks for the heads up and keep up your awesome writing! :)

This is an amazing read.
Read the prologue too. Someday I'll write as good as you do.
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Would be nice to have you contribute a few pages 😊

Hi there! Thank you so much. I will definitely check that out :)

Ah... A little light-hearted fun to break up the pain. :)
Onward to chapter 2! I need to know what happened to her!

I'm afraid there's a bit of build up till we get there...it's not a small novel :)

I shouldn't have put it that way...a shift is coming, this right now is character building, but once they leave for Europe...it's not far off and the pace speeds up :)

Finally got the chance to buckle down and enjoy Chapter 1 fully after recently completing your maniacally thrilling good prologue. This had a very serene feeling to it, and your control and introduction and interaction of the new characters was very natural and believable. This was an easy read and wow was the introduction quite poetic with the descriptive art form of the waterfall Anna was cherishing and observing. Truly blows my mind how talented everyone is here, and now that I've take my first step on another literary journey, I look forward to completing all 500 pages worth and see how their trip to europe transpires and what comes next. Great first chapter my friend. A big up vote and recognition of your creative writing skills from me :)

Aw thanks :) I spend some time on development for the prologue comes into play, just to warn you :)
I agree, this is an extremely talented place! It's fun discovering one talent after another. And you know I love your stuff!!

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