Metallic Kisses - Baci Metallici [ENG - ITA Freewrite]
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English Version
With the passage of time, the omnipresent buzz of the generators - and God knows what else in the bowels of that cathedral of circuits - had become for him like a second skin.
It was funny how the white noise coming from the racks was indifferent to him and could, at the same time, speak to him in the most modulated and subtle of languages.
After months, Ethan was instantly aware when something in the monotonous chanting cracked, foretelling one of the increasingly frequent system errors. It was like the third ear in place of the third eye.
He just smiled at the thought, his gaze fixed on the secondary pylons n. 6 and 11, the last still working in the experimental orbital station DDG-31/DD-936 Decatur, renamed The Decaf.
Silence was a mute vowel shouting inside him. Always. Suffocate atrophic thoughts. Dodge the anguish, sharp like the debris of that day. The slashed modules were scenic elements for a cheap movie. All the modules except his one. Follow procedures, rituals, checklists, the tenacious regurgitation of life of a castaway.
He had renamed the pylons Romeo & Juliet. For each orbital period, about 90 minutes, the two arms were almost touching each other. A fleeting kiss and again far away. From the beginning of the mission, he had liked to play the game of renaming equipment and modules with funny nicknames. He allowed himself a slow sigh.
The inclination of the station displayed the earth down there. He had promised never to look in that direction again but the mauve color, so iridescent, so alive, so omnipresent, took him by surprise. He thought for a moment that it was .. beautiful, and the remorse for that thought flooded him soon after. Ethan hid his face between his hands as the tears surfaced and many names knocked on his heart's door once again.
Versione Italiana
Con il passare del tempo, l'onnipresente ronzio dei generatori, e di chissà cos'altro nelle viscere di quella cattedrale di circuiti, era diventato per lui come una seconda pelle.
Era buffo come il rumore bianco proveniente dai rack gli fosse indifferente e potesse al contempo parlargli nel più modulato e sottile dei linguaggi.
Ethan si accorgeva istantaneamente, dopo mesi, se qualcosa nella monotona cantilena si incrinava, preannunciando uno dei sempre più frequenti errori di sistema. Era come avere il terzo orecchio al posto del terzo occhio.
Sorrise appena al pensiero, lo sguardo fisso verso i tralicci secondari n. 6 e 11, gli ultimi ancora funzionanti nella stazione orbitale sperimentale DDG-31/DD-936 Decatur, detta "Il Decaf".
Il silenzio era una vocale muta che gli gridava dentro. Sempre. Soffocare pensieri atrofici. Schivare l'angoscia tagliente come i detriti di quel giorno. I moduli squarciati, nemmeno fossero elementi scenici di un film da quattro soldi. Tutti i moduli tranne il suo. Seguire procedure, rituali, checklist, il tenace rigurgito di vita di un naufrago.
Aveva ribattezzato i tralicci Romeo & Juliet. Una volta ogni periodo orbitale, circa 90 minuti, i due bracci si incontravano per un istante, fin quasi a toccarsi. Un bacio fuggevole e di nuovo lontani. Così, dall'inizio della missione, gli era piaciuto giocare a ribattezzare quasi tutte le attrezzature e i moduli con buffi soprannomi. Si accordò un lento sospiro.
L'inclinazione della stazione gli permise di vedere la terra. Si era promesso di non guardare mai più in quella direzione ma il color malva, così iridescente, così vivo, così onnipresente, lo colse di sorpresa. Pensò per un attimo che era..bello e il rimorso per quel pensiero lo inondò subito dopo. Ethan nascose il viso fra le mani mentre le lacrime affioravano e tanti nomi bussavano alla porta del suo cuore una volta ancora.
Your writing skill is increasing every day. I'm speechless... You get up early, work hard many hours, and in the evening you've got still enough energies for writing stories that are so intense and deep! I'm in awe.
I agree!
As I told you my engine is the current frustration for being apart from Mrs F3nix.. probably when she'll be back I'll write about snapchat selfies XD Thank you dear friend!
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Certo accetto! Grazie @sardrt! Questa è un'idea da sviluppare fra i miei progetti di racconto lungo..
tip!
speachless.. thanks dear!
Great work, Seems like it could be developed into something bigger.
Here's today's for you to get your teeth into.
https://steemit.com/freewrite/@mariannewest/day-97-5-minute-freewrite-wednesday-prompt-bowl
Thank you @deirdyweirdy.. one day I'll take my time and write a longer novel, I just need to find the courage and focus ;-)
It seems to me you are not lacking in either.
😊👍
If you try to write a novel from this story, where will you find enough "Space" to put it all? ;)
Deacon probably I'll put my f3nix glasses on, those that noone should touch, and find it 😜
🤓😂
Oh my gosh! You are an amazing writer and I want to know when you're writing your book because I definitely want to read it.
I'm flattered Janelle, thanks! I will start writing it when I'll stop farting around on steemit hahah ..thank you for your encouragement, really.
You never know - you might be writing your book one freewrite at a time. - that is what happened to Amy Tan. she has at least 10 books out now :)
What you say is really interesting Marianne. In fact I'm starting to consider these freewrites like small bricks to build a home. I want to share this idea when I'll post that article on the best 5 ones.
sounds like a plan!!
Tip!
someday, I can dream, I would love to be able to describe things like you are able to do.
You continue to amaze me what comes into your head and out on paper
and yes, you DO miss Mrs. F3nix so terribly so and writing is a healthy way to find a way to get rid of your frustration. A stunning beautiful way!
Bravo!!! my friend!! Bravo!!
Words like yours are a powerful push for me to keep writing and probing my limits in the keyboard. You know I'm just trying to channel my energies within a bad situation in life and turn them into something positive.. thanks my friend for your warm comment and for the tip!!
That one beside her, that @f3nix fellow! How will he find my books? He doesn't sit still. Mumbles in his sleep all fracking night about a 3-D f3nix something! Whatever this 3-D contraption is, this f3nix, the one you say will save us, best go about finding it soon! He is useless to me. To US! Even with a trail to the room, which you know we can not do, he will never find it!
Hrumph.
Ehhhhh?.. maybe I'm tired after the training but i understood nothing 😅😅 but you're right about me being useless .. I'm just beautiful 😂🤣
sorry, it's part of my newest story
Remember your rule..never say sorry!! I want to read it absolutely 😁 Is It posted?
yes it is :D but it's long and you need sleep!!
La tua storie ma fatto desiderio una mano a tenere. 🌹 Your story of Ethan keeping his sense of humor while desperately missing so much makes my chest hurt. The yearning that you wrote into the arms of Romeo and Juliet was so written so well!
(I hope that you can give 3-D wife a big hug soon!)
The hug will be tomorrow at last!.. I'll be away from freewrites all the weekend 😱😜 Your words make me feel I could write more about it.. to know that I could transmit you such feelings is the best thing I can read here before falling asleep, thank you Bris!
Nice post. Doesn't look like you are getting the votes you deserve though. You should check out steemengine.
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