Finish The Story Contest - WEEK #27

in #finishthestory6 years ago (edited)

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A contest with a pot of 8 @steembasicincome shares? You're in the right place!

119 @steembasicincome shares awarded till now through the contest in 26 weeks!


Here are our ol'good prize categories:



1st place : n. 4 steembasicincome shares

2nd place : n. 2 steembasicincome shares

3rd place: n. 2 steembasicincome shares by popular vote (remember to vote your favourite!).


@f3nix here, your jack-in-the-box Bananafish prophet strikes again!

Once, I was worried to finish all my fiction ideas when writing on steemit but, eventually, I came to the conclusion that the well of good stories and good music never runs out of its pure waters. I've to say that your amazing endings just confirm the theory! In this 27th edition, I'm quite proud to offer you (and to its potassiumness as a ritual sacrifice)one of my early embryos of short novel.. My curiosity for your contributions will be relentless like Cerberus "the hound of Hades"! (a bit dramatic as a simile. Note for the newbies: no stress, the Bananafish is cute and benevolent.. generally).

This contest is unique, from the brand to the amazing community behind it (Join here our chat]). One of the things I like the most is that we here prefer spontaneity over rules, once again let me introduce you the ..

Thingies that please his supreme potassiumness, the Bananafish mighty god!


  • vote, vote, vote your favourite story!

  • use the #finishthestory tag.

  • Try to post your story the earliest possible and not at the last moment (or after the results! argh!)

  • Sustain, comment and upvote each other as a true group of friends and fiction lovers.

  • Respect the 500 words limit.

  • Post in your blog instead than in the comment section.

  • help our contest & workshop to grow by giving it some visibility.



And now.. let's dive into today's story!



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Apocalypse and Pretzels

by @f3nix

Early in the morning, in the bitey air of an unripe April, fine pearls of rain drew averted trajectories, trying to prolong their run towards the ground. The morning sunlight slipped through them, caressing their lopsided dances.

A freshly baked pretzel perfume mingled with the acrid, yet familiar note of wet tarmac. Similar to the inviting singing of a mermaid, that fragrant smelling trail traveled for blocks coming from who knows where, bringing the illusion of a tasty breakfast at hand.
On Madison, the sound of a distant pneumatic hammer, disinterested in that diaphanous moment of peace, reminded the city of its daily duties. The need to renew the infinite interweaving of order and chaos, the human sap of a monotonous and, at the same time, different becoming.

An old beggar was taking shelter from the drizzle under the entrance of the Met Breuer.
He seemed to come out of nowhere and, in a sense, gave the idea of ​​having been there forever. The shabby headgear with ear-muffs could barely contain the explosion of white hair, gathered in damp, frayed cords due to the persistent drops of aerosol. The festive and bizarre trichological chaos reigning on his head only sharpened the contrast with the fixedness of his gaze, veiled by a cataract under the crusty eyelashes. Forearms and hands rested parallel, laying on a small and unusual pink plastic banquet that seemed to have been recovered from an abandoned nursery.

In front of him, carefully lying on the small pink table, he placed a typical cardboard square. Strangely enough, where a message of help was supposed to be found, not even a "everything helps" decorated the miserable panel which, laconic and brash together, was left naked to look at the sidewalk.
None of the hasty passers-by would have ever bothered to look down at the bizarre old man but, if someone had stopped for a while, perhaps he would have noticed that his open lips uttered a constant chant, a whisper of elusive and continuous vibrations.

"Now the distortion around him has become almost visible, how much do you think it could go on?". In truth, for several hours what had happened under the gray shed had captured the growing interest of two luminescent figures, on the other side of the road. From time to time, they exchanged positions to steal each other the best view. Their feet seemed to slip soft like fog on the cold sidewalk.

"Learn about silence once and for all, Duth. Would it make sense to even just hazard a guess in front of this.. thing?".

"But how is it possible for a human to perform the Chant, or to just gather.."

"And instead, if you bothered to listen, you would have noticed that this supposed human has just added the sixth voice," the archangel interrupted him, punctuating the words as he tried to separate red pomegranate grains from their peel.

"I think we've observed enough, we do not want him to start opening a seal, do we?", he continued, trying to resume his usually compassionate tone, "We have to report about it to Metatron. Stop stalling, let's move".

The old man's eyes suddenly gnawed them, like a blacksmith's hot pincer. Duth did not even have time to finish wondering how a simple homeless had been able to identify them on the subtle plane from which they were watching him.

An Autie Anne's Pretzels van sped in the direction of East Harlem, sprinkling the city with its fragrant trail. For an instant, the driver seemed to have heard a curious song, but he didn't pay too much attention.

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Join the fun! Here is how this contest works:


  1. An unfinished fiction story or a script is posted.

  2. You finish it with your own post or a comment in the comment section. A limit of 500 words is recommended.

  3. YOU WIN! 8 @steembasicincome shares to the writers with the best ending.


    The result will be out on Tuesday 11th September, 14:00 PM GMT+7 (U.S. West Coast time zone) avg. Submission and voting deadline: Monday 10th September, 12:00 PM - noon GMT+7 (U.S. West Coast time zone)

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The great and generous @bananafish rewards the faithful!


We already know the wise and fair @bananafish can be strengthened with offerings of delegation, and curation. Through this, the strength of many, shall become the strength of one. So in time, the strength of one, can in turn, become that of many. As the delegations grow, so does the value of the vote, so as the power grows, so it returns. Indeed, the mighty god will appreciate those who support it, and in doing so, support this entire contest. For many of us, it is already it's own reward. In a steemit full of vanishing contests, your support allows this one to keep going, and allows everyone to polish their writing skills with a challenging weekly work out (not to mention @curies's precious support and votes on the participants!). By coming together and sharing the work, we can empower the potassium rich deity to create an oceanic fruit-salad that never runs out!

So join the core, support the mission! Pledge your allegiance with your delegation, show your continued support through by joining the curation trail, and all will share in the glorious bounty of the @bananafish!



A special thank to @theironfelix, @raj808, @brisby, @maverickinvictus, @cyemela, @marcoriccardi, @calluna, @oivas, @anixio, @ntowl for their precious delegations, making this project a reality!

If you like this contest..SPREAD THE GOSPEL! We're grateful for your resteeming and word of mouth. Everything helps to grow together!

GOOD LUCK, BRAVE STORYTELLERS!


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Prepare yourself for an amazing haiku contest this Friday 7th September!



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I was nearly afraid to face this story, because I think it's perfect as it is. Indeed, it's one of the best short stories @f3nix penned.

After many doubts, however, this is my entry:

https://steemit.com/finishthestory/@marcoriccardi/the-new-song-finish-the-story-27

Grazie Marco, but this is aproject on hold between mines ad you know.. I'm very curious to see your interpretation!

Yo man! First in da house!

I know. Usually last in line. This week first. Some new changes are coming (I say with little conviction).

Believe in the change and it will happen Tristan!

I'm more concerned with coming up with material people will enjoy reading for these instead of getting it out first. 8-)

concerned with coming up with material people will enjoy reading

You're totally on the right track.. and very few people understand this. My advice: copy. I do that from good writers like Dirge all the time.
Add: I don't mean to copy the ideas.. I mean to try learning from them

It's always a pleasure to see you in the contest @iamthegray!

Here be me submission: Pretzel's apocalypse for this contest here.

Cool! I was wondering about Dr. Felix

Seen a Witch-in-training summon Nyar, wasn't a pleasant time trying to talk her down and compromise with her to not use Nyar. Not for Nyar's sake or the World's sake, but to give the Witch-in-training something more fun to do with her time and training. Here's to Dr. F3nix has doin' well otherwise...
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Rofl! Tsk.. these young witches wannabe.. you don't summon Nyar for shit.. not twice, at least.

Dr. F3nix. This Witch-in-training turned her teacher to a spoon! A peckin’ spoon! She is the John Wick of young witches... eh, at least she’s... woah lemme check now... ah yes - she’s terrorizing the entire galaxy of sweets. I mean, peck now I want to murder them as well because they look disgusting and probably great to consume.

Vote your favorite story below!

My vote is for @marcoriccardi

I'd like to cast in my vote for @agmoore as well.
Her use of given elements from the beginning, the realizations of her character, Cassandra (love this name), and the reason for the beggar's vigil made her ending my favorite for this week.

My vote goes to @agmoore
I liked so much her writing, the anaphoric image of "Kansas" and the ascension-like closing!

I'm going with @maverickinvictus this week. I like the way he unraveled time. I was able to follow him all the way back to the beginning of the Word--until it ended. Don't think that was easy trick to manage, and still create a coherent story line.
The last line, Apocalypse now, was perfect.

I think this may be your best--my personal opinion. Each vision before our eyes, vivid. Aromas call up vague memories of street scenes from years past. There is a sense of timelessness about this, and of course mystery. So many points of view to go with.
I hope I come up with something--very possibly will.
Good job in any, event. You're bound to catch some creative fish with this one.

It's midnight here, I just finished writing my "Horror Vacui" version and I literally poisoned myself for the sickness of that horror story lol. Thank you for your compliment, it means a lot coming from you..now I can sleep nice dreams :-)
I hope that the guys will feel inspired, I care a lot when it's about delivering some good first half of the story.

I'll hide in my monadic dimension and read it!

You are welcome anytime!

Eww. This one is fun

Thanks bud. The difference when I pick something not written for a deadline.

Glad to know that you had fun bud ✌️

Congratulations to @f3nix for writing a cracker. This could spawn a TV series!

Thank you @sarez! I remember that I stayed an amount of time checking google street-view for the best sidewalk in NY where to place the beggar.

The driving wind splitting the rain and the cubby- hole shelter. I thought it was an experience recreated. Will try to write something good.

Looking forward for that, bud!

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