The Celestial - a fantasy short story

in #fiction6 years ago (edited)


Lei sat in the stone window of the dormitory facing the northern horizon where a star shower fanned across the black like the mane of a great fiery horse. The stars had been streaking northward for more than an hour. At first, Lei had tensed with each star fall for a distant boom, but the silent grandeur of the spectacle soon consumed him. He now sat still, the dim light of the crescent moon touching his  hair.

Lei heard his younger brother sit up on his futon and plunk down onto the tiles of the stone floor. He did not turn to see that it was his  brother. He did not need to. His brother alone of all the students at Shukinjen Orphanage made such noise. Although Shen was still but a child of four years, there were many younger boys in the orphanage and any of  them would have crossed the floor with no more sound than that of late autumn frost settling upon the grass. Little Shen was the exception, and despite the fact that they were the only family for each other in this world, Lei felt shame smolder as he listened to his brother toddling across the room. Lei felt the swell of impatience, a weakness that grew with each new season, a weakness his brother did not have. The monks of the temple advised Lei to be grateful for this weakness because of the humility it could instill.

Shen came to his brother’s side and looked out across the lands. From the second story window of the orphanage they could see across the Fe Lung River, glittering with torchlight from the village on the far bank, to the wild country sky beyond the nearest hills.

“Stars hum when they fall,” said Shen.

“You’re hearing cicadas,” said Lei.

Shen moved closer to his older brother. His mouth widened. Wonder filled his eyes. Lei could see the reflection of star tails in his  little brother’s irises. He turned back to the window and the two watched the shower wordlessly for many moments.

Shen asked, “Will the sky run out of stars?”

Lei did not answer immediately. “They aren’t stars,” he said finally. “They’re small rocks.”

Shen turned his head to look at Lei, searching for the same sincerity in his brother’s expression that he heard in his voice. “Brother Tai says they are lost stars.”

“He doesn’t know,” said Lei.

Shen spoke with the unpracticed doubt of a child. “How do you know?”

“Our father told me,” said Lei.

“We don’t have a father,” said Shen, who was no longer paying attention to the starscape.

Lei still faced the sky, but his eyes were misted with memories. “We used to once when you were very, very young. A mother too.” Lei’s voice  dropped until Shen could barely hear. “We lived in a house in the country. Our father was a great warrior. Our mother was....” Lei looked down into his little brother’s face. “She could read the stars. And she could see things in the future. They traveled together up into the night, into the void beyond the sky, in a countless armada of wooden ships without sails.”

Shen giggled. His eyes wandered back to the cascade of shooting stars in the north, but his older brother continued.

“They rose into the skies on the dragon-necked prow of a mighty ship  after the Emperor made war and sent them to take the stars. We watched that night. All of us. I cradled you in my arms when the ships began to fall, burning, one by one. They went down into the sea. There,” Lei  pointed. “They were falling like slow-moving comets - globes of fire soft and round. At dawn hundreds of columns of smoke could be seen rising out of the ocean up into the sky and out of sight, like a bamboo forest with no top. The next day the monks came to take us away.”

Shen’s eyes were heavy with confusion and sleep, and Lei led him back to the empty wooden bed. Shen clambered up onto the wooden frame and lay back on his futon, the air between them filled with the scent of  stale wool. Shen rested his neck on the leather padded wooden crossbeam and met his brother’s eyes, searching for reality, unsure of the images of falling ships that now haunted his imagination.

Lei sat on the edge of the bed and took his brother’s hand. In soft words he spoke. “Our father was a captain, a hero of the Xiang Empire. Our mother was…powerful…a sort of priest. They rode into the stars to war on the ones that live above the sky. It was a secret they were forbidden to speak of.

“But Father told me several times of the barrier above the sky. He told me of flying up, up into the high air, up higher until the lands  below stretch out so far that you can see a hundred thousand leagues in every direction. Even further. He had seen all the way across the ocean to the shores on the other side. He said that the Sheong Forest in the north appears only as a tiny patch on the ground and you can look past the Fangs of Yeuw to the barbarian lands beyond. And the Tar Sea, Father told me that it glitters beyond the T’Gun Mountains like a shard of  polished jet.

“Father told me how it was to rise above all the lands until the air was so thin that no bird could fly and that a great barrier stretched above the sky, flat and clear like the surface of a never-ending mirror. He told me that when ships pass through the barrier it ripples like the  surface of a lake and then flattens again until it is as smooth as glass. Beyond the barrier there is no day, only night, and some of the stars burn as bright as the sun, and there are more moons and comets and  stars than can be counted, and there are ships crewed by strange types of men from distant lands, and if you set off from the barrier, you will be lost and might never find your way back,” Lei hesitated, “might never want to.

“Father said that the land stretches out forever in every direction and that from outside the barrier you can look back and see when the sun disappears at night past the end of the world and you can watch it appear again in the morning when it rises from the misty seas in the East. He said that there are ports and kingdoms in the void beyond the sky, and markets and wars and races of misshapen men and beasts, and vessels as large as cities…all out there.”

Lei’s eyes returned to the darkness of the dormitory room. The cold  of night was in the air. Shen’s breathing indicated deep sleep. His eyes  were closed and his face was at peace. Lei stood and crossed the floor  noiselessly back to the window. The stars were still streaking into the horizon. Never since that night long ago had he been able to watch a meteor shoot across the sky without expecting a far-off boom, without seeing the falling ships in his mind, or without hearing the urgency and wonder that had filled his father’s voice as he related the forbidden lore of worlds above the world. Lei had shared that wonder. Lei had understood. Lei had wanted to go see the void beyond the barrier with his father. Even now he yearned to rise from the earth and go straight into the sky. But instead, just as he had done each year as the annual star shower passed, he went to the cedar box that his mother had left for him, opened the lid, and removed a tiny cotton scroll.

“Dear Son,” it read. “How often I have seen you with your father. He loves the stars and I know that someday he wishes to share that joy with  you. I know as well that you burn with desire to see them with him. But  listen to me, my son. You were born under the aspect of the snake. You  are of the earth and your destiny is bound to it. You are strong with  its power. But just as I know that I shall never see your face after  this night, so too I know that your feet shall never leave the paths of  the earth.

“Please do not be angry. This is simply your karma. Your brother is weak of body but strong of spirit. He was born under the sign of the  dragon and he is attuned to the stars. They will speak to him, just as  they speak to me. Guard him well, my son, and teach him what you have  learned from your father. Teach him that above the moons is the realm of  the gods and that no one, not even the Emperor Himself, can conquer what lies beyond. Teach your brother well, for one day he shall walk among the stars.” 



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Hello, I loved this one :) Such pretty imagery and world creation. I found it particularly interesting because yesterday I wrote a story about outer space (link) and a universe beyond the universe. Did you read that one?

I've read a lot of Chinese fiction and although this one is similar in a few things, it seems very different in others, maybe a bit westernized, but it also contains that awe for giant stuff which the Chinese love.

I'm glad to see that you're still here.

By the way, I noticed that you've been sending money to the @null account for some reason. Why is that? I didn't take you for a money-burner, although you do spend more freely than anyone I know.

The null account is what happens when you use the "promote" function. The sbds are simply destroyed instead of going to some other account (at least I think that's what's going on).

Oh. BTW, not to make you feel bad about your choices, but as far as I know, nobody does actually look at the promoted section (and I've heard people say that the promoted section is not very well designed). It's like a selective ads section that people consciously avoid (who would choose to see ads?), but I could be wrong.

Anyway, in my experience, it's better to just use the better bid bots and throw your posts at curation lists and comment as much as you can on other people's posts, brings good results.

I've heard that too but I'm willing to spend the money to test different ways of getting visibility. If you think I spend a lot here you should see what I spent testing Amazon ads and Google Analytics. The numbers I come up with are often much different from what I find out through research, because of course what I am offering isn't exactly the same as what everyone else is, so the results are bound to be different from what others get. I figure just spend the money and come up with my own numbers. To tell you the truth I kind of find it fun to do. I was even thinking about doing a post about Amazon ad strategies, because I noticed that most authors that use those ads do not go about it right and they waste a ton of money.

To tell you the truth I kind of find it fun to do. I was even thinking about doing a post about Amazon ad strategies, because I noticed that most authors that use those ads do not go about it right and they waste a ton of money.

Well, if I had the funds I'd surely like to test some ads too. :P I'm more like "what you see is what I have". I'm all in in Steemit and you already surpassed me in money hahaha, so sad. You're good and lucky, a nice combination. I'm not as good and all I have is hard work, no luck, maybe.


I was writing a bit of a post when you answered, so I'm just gonna put it here:

Some possible strategies to get readers:

  1. Run contests (like the Muse of March, that was good); people love money.
  2. When you get higher voting power, upvote your commenters. Same principle, there are upvote hunters who are willing to read and give constructive comments for people who will vote for them with a bulky weight. Say $0.1 - $0.3 per vote, that's around 1000 to 3000 SP, and it can be rented if you're up for that, but it's not cheap, now that I think about it. I think that 1k SP comes for 10 Steem a week.

There are other ways but they're not as feasible.

  1. One is using Kryptonia to give people the task (like freelancers but for cheap) to read and leave constructive comments (they do this for a couple cents, so it's inexpensive and it ensures results, but they are usually more interested in cryptocurrencies than literature, and they can be spammy).
  2. There's some Discord servers where you can get some promotion (like @thesteemengine, which even has the chance to get you in a list that people read and some extra upvotes), but you made it clear that you're a bit too busy for social networks.
  3. You could probably hire a couple Venezuelans for 1 SBD a week to throw your posts everywhere they go. It's a bit spammy, but it would certainly get some eyes on your work hahaha. Ah, ethics, so hard.

I think that the most viable ones are the first two, contests and higher voting power. VP gets you readers, but not necessarily high-value voters (which, I assume, is your target). Contests get you higher-value views but not loyal readers, more like people interested in your efforts to giving back to the community.

There are also community efforts that can get you a lot of results. I was mentoring a Venezuelan guy who ended up running a curation list. Every three days, they select around 10 posts and everyone votes for them. This takes time, but it can be delegated, and you get people to view you as a community leader.

I'm sure there's more stuff I'm missing but this is a nice starting point.

Yeah I've seen people talking about those kinds of systems but like you said a lot of them are spammy and don't generate much legitimate interest. I think the promote feature is worth more than some people give it credit for. Like we talked about before, I don't have all that much time to spend searching for fiction. I do what I can, but I do use the trending and promotion tabs to find good poetry and fiction and I have found some really valuable writing that way. I'm not sure it's worth what I spend on it, but what I think that it does do better than other methods is attract readers who are simply interested in what you are writing. In my opinion those are the best readers to target, because to maintain their interest all you have to do is continue writing what you already enjoy writing. There is no "social media" component to maintain. I love writing. It's all I really want to do. I would rather try to identify the methods for increasing readership directly in response to my actual posts, rather than things that rely on social media networking and other side activities.

Awesome! That's a nice motivation and it explains your reasoning very well, so I understand where you're coming from. I agree with you in the value-gain disproportion, but I don't think that there is any shortcut that can bring you what you described without high investments.

Maybe this money that you're spending won't bring you to your ultimate goal, but it may bring some nice eyes to your work without having to do much more networking than pay-and-write.

I hope that you don't lose too much compared to what you earn. :P

Maybe keep participating in contests? That way you'll have some eyes, you'll be able to just write and you'll have a stable income from them. And a little bit of bid bots meanwhile to keep you on trending and you'll get a nice touch of both sides.

That first contest I ran was interesting but it was a whole lot of work. I might run another in May. I don't really think they serve much purpose as far as finding readers, but I love writing in general and giving people an inspiration to create through writing has its own appeal for me. I hope if I run another one you will enter it. I love your writing. Maybe the next contest will be about space...or dreams :)

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