Folco’s Birth – Page 07 and 08
Hello !
OK... Only two more pages.
That dialog I had to place in the following part was scaring me a bit... So I'll use some caution and share my thought about the work.
I wasn't sure how to deal with text/images balance.. Which ideas to place, and to express them : which of words or drawings to use ?
Writing a bunch of long sentences and swapping between both character's faces at each reply has been my first reflex... Of course, it's not a good one : I don't aim at building some closed-door story.
My goal is to build and present an imaginary universe, and I have several tools for this : texts, drawings, characters, and landscapes.
They have to be linked : even if playing with faces and expressions could be a great exercice for me, the interest for a reader wouldn't be so fantastic, so let's use part of the dialog to share a glance on the universe in which these dudes live.
Of course, any serious illustrator or comics maker would have prepared its concepts in advance... I won't pretend at becoming serious at this exercice, but I already know I've been taught a few interesting new things since I've started this sketchy comics experience :)
Enough blah blah ! Here we go :
That dialog I had to place in the following part was scaring me a bit... So I'll use some caution and share my thought about the work.
I wasn't sure how to deal with text/images balance.. Which ideas to place, and to express them : which of words or drawings to use ?
Writing a bunch of long sentences and swapping between both character's faces at each reply has been my first reflex... Of course, it's not a good one : I don't aim at building some closed-door story.
My goal is to build and present an imaginary universe, and I have several tools for this : texts, drawings, characters, and landscapes.
They have to be linked : even if playing with faces and expressions could be a great exercice for me, the interest for a reader wouldn't be so fantastic, so let's use part of the dialog to share a glance on the universe in which these dudes live.
Of course, any serious illustrator or comics maker would have prepared its concepts in advance... I won't pretend at becoming serious at this exercice, but I already know I've been taught a few interesting new things since I've started this sketchy comics experience :)
Enough blah blah ! Here we go :
Previously in Folco's Birth :
Will there be more than two pages next time ?
I sincerely promise that I truly don't know ! D
See you, and have fun :)
(c) Berien 2018
Posted from my blog with SteemPress : https://berien.com/blog/folcos-birth-page-07-and-08/
Girls are disappearing, AND THEIR OWNERS TOO??? Something's not right here... I wonder what is going on ! :D
A great 2 pager, Pascal !!!
I want more \o/
Thanks Liske ! :D
Next parts should follow this week. Waiting for the dialog to come naturally to my mind first, then I'll start drawing :)
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Once more : many thanks ;)
Even your texts are done artistically :D. I also like how scratchy this comic is, and the expressions of the characteres' faces.
Well done =).
Thanks a lot you @scrawly :)
Just a quick note: at first I was charmed with the harsh black & white style you use, it's my favorite style. Now, some bits of larger plot begin to appear and it becomes rather intriguing... I'd like to see more & more of this -- BUT! No more than 2 pages per post, I think it'd be more thrilling for your readers to have some waiting to do for the next page!
Thanks for this, @nyarlathotep :)
As long as enough informations transits through these two pages, I think it will be ok.
I was suspecting some heavy dialog management problems last time and feared to place an interruption in the middle of an action that shouldn't be sliced :)
But now, I guess knowing when to stop is also part of the storytelling skills to acquire :D
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