Tell a Story to Me – Contest #9 – A Portal Opens . . .

in #tellastorytome6 years ago (edited)

portal-2035130_1920.jpg
Image Credit Pixabay.com

Prompt: Deep below ground, a portal opens . . .

From @calluna’s writing contest, for more information please see the link:
https://steemit.com/tellastorytome/@calluna/tell-a-story-to-me-and-win-5-sbd-writing-contest-9-a-portal-opens-and-winners-of-8

My Entry:

Deep below ground, a portal opens . . . while in a violent storm at sea Captain Deng Tougher clutches his golden compass. The South Pacific Ocean swells lifting the yacht 20 feet in the air before sinking 10 feet below sea level. The raucous roar of thunder, the perennial parade of lighting, and the endless inundation of rain, were not enough to tamper the spirits of this seafaring hero.

His eyes steadfast on the horizon searching for a foreign coastline that harbored one of the greatest secrets of mankind, so legends told.

Could Captain Deng Tougher be the first to discover what writers had made myths of, or would he, like others before him, find his efforts fruitless in the cavernous jungle that awaited him?

333

Captain Deng Tougher’s feet stomped in the mud after a jump from a ledge, and he began to run.

Struggling through the water with a backpack, and dressed like Indiana Jones, the need to continue moving forward drowned all doubts in his mind.

Gunshots, and murderous yells from the bushes behind him. A pirate mob had claimed his yacht in the port of the village. They now wished to claim his head and whatever else could prove of value.

Green leaves smashed against his cheeks as he pushed forward blindly into the unknown. Under more prestigious conditions he would be swinging a machete, walking a new path. Now he only hoped to conceal his location in the dense foliage.

However, it would be nice to have a machete for close quarter combat if the need were to arise. Yet he found himself with only a couple of sticks of dynamite. He’d been lucky to get them in his backpack.

And he continued to run . . .

333

Panting for breath, and almost in tears, Captain Deng Tougher did his best to remain silent in a cave entrance while a mob of castaways still hunted him.

His journey to discover the Timeless Portal of fable began as a fairy tale. As a playboy billionaire he’d been on countless adventures around the globe and made breathtaking archeological finds that made him famous in the scientific world.

Now gulping for air, scared out of his wits, with his eyes bulging from his skull watching the jungle for a group of armed men that meant to kill him; never had a journey of his gone so wrong. Not even close. Maybe he’d been picked pocketed in a small island town on a port call by some poor local.

A wild crowd of thugs intent on inflicting death not the norm for this humanitarian.

Finally he felt calm to a degree. Adrenalin filled veins causing his entire body to pulsate with the rhythm of his breath. He needed to make a muffled plan.

“American!” A call echoed through the large green leaves of the jungle. Somewhere out there the green eyes of a Jaguar had found its prey; this environment as familiar to these locals as their own house, because most of them were probably homeless, finding food and shelter in this savage palace.

“American,” again the call through the rain forest trees and the sound of people closing in on his position from every direction, some slapping their hands on their machete, some breaking branches purposely, others stamping their feet and giving out a guttural war cry, while all moved toward him.

Captain Deng Tougher knew that returning to the yacht would not be an option now. He would have to enter the cave and pray for a miracle if he were to survive today.

333

Captain Deng Tougher stumbled in the darkness of the cave without a flashlight. Another item he’d not had time to find since this chase began. All hope of finding the Timeless Portal lost.

Orange torch light a good distance to his back as his arms and legs clawed forward. A gunshot rang out chipping the rock walls.

“American.” The voice then turned into a garbled local language. Finally the coastal greeting party retreated leaving Captain Deng Tougher alone in the pitch black.

333

Hours had passed. He’d found a lighter in the knapsack. The silence made him feel safe enough to use it in order to illuminate the rock walls of the cave of which he found himself caged.

A gunshot, voices, a flashlight, and the jingle of falling pebbles on rocks like sand in an hourglass alerted Captain Deng Tougher that the time to flee deeper into the rabbit hole had arrived.

He made his move without the aid of the lighter, crawling deeper and deeper into the unknown depths of this mysterious cave, not even a name on a map.

Captain Deng Tougher simply existed in the moment between life and death this tale never to be relayed to his colleagues while sipping martinis in a marble ballroom with a glass ceiling draped in the stars of the night sky.

Feeling trapped in desperation, he lit the two sticks of dynamite and threw them towards his pursuers.

333

An entire day might have passed in the darkness, as Captain Deng Tougher came to terms with the fact that this could be the rest of his life. With the collapse of the cave his body probably wouldn’t be found by searchers. If the pirates sailed his yacht, it might increase the search radius to thousands of square miles.

Captain Deng Tougher never imagined his search for the Timeless Portal would end like this and so he went forward with his lighter making it a bit brighter as he descended into the abyss of this endless cave.

He had a couple of water bottles and protein bars, meaning he could survive for days, and so he meant to follow this path to the center of the Earth if need be.

333

The concept of days and nights ended. To Captain Deng Tougher life now determined by being awake or asleep. The lighter had run out of fuel. Perpetual darkness; conscious or unconscious.

He crawled along the uneven rocks feeling his way.

Somewhere ahead he made out a faint green glow, something to believe in. Hope sprang anew.

Soon Captain Deng Tougher found the source, a phosphorescent clear green pool with stalactites deep below red from an algae grow. He took off his backpack and clothes and dove in.

Then slipped across a marble floor wet and naked.

“Nice entrance,” said a woman wearing a navy blue evening gown. A white pearl necklace curled around her tan silk neck.

Captain Deng Tougher stood on what resembled a highway road, only with a finer marble finish. The vastness of space encircled them. Electrical charges bursting spontaneously from the ether. Turning around he could see a clear green pool of water with stalactites deep below red from an algae grow.

“Have I found the Timeless Portal?” Asked Captain Deng Tougher.

“Yes and no.” The elegant woman answered. “It’s a bit of a misnomer. The few that have entered without any knowledge of the Milky Way Federation thought it a time portal for planet Earth. It’s really a gateway for travel between planets populated with intelligent life. We’re waiting for your civilization to develop more before opening negotiations for incorporation into the Federation.”

“What?”

“Just follow me. We’ll get you some clothes and show you around. We might have some work for you on planet Earth. You’ll be given a chance to return to your normal life.”

“I destroyed the cave with dynamite.”

“There are other portals. That one had begun to attract notoriety and needed to be decommissioned. You’ve completed your first mission for the Milky Way Federation Captain Deng Tougher.”

Thank you,
Cyrus Emerson

Red Roses the audiobook for your consideration at the Voice Arts Awards (NYC), and the Grammys (LA).
https://www.audible.com/pd/Fiction/Red-Roses-Audiobook/B07F2LWHPN

Red Roses narrated by Kira Omans
www.kiraomans.com
Red Roses Dress.jpg

Red Roses music by Rike Luxx
www.rikeluxxbeats.com

Red Roses sound by Pond5
www.pond5.com

Also, available from The Author:

Fear and Loathing in the State of Jefferson - ebook
https://read.amazon.com/kp/embed?asin=B079R5KLPN&preview=newtab&linkCode=kpe&ref_=cm_sw_r_kb_dp_GsURAbAVDYNEM

Lost Angel – Introduction with Ray Manzarek of The Doors
https://www.downpour.com/lost-angel?sp=249812

Sort:  

This is such a masterful story, the intro/opening sets up the story so perfectly. Your ocean description is just beautiful

The raucous roar of thunder, the perennial parade of lighting, and the endless inundation of rain, were not enough to tamper the spirits of this seafaring hero

Your use of cuts/breaks really build tension, creating the sense of being drawn in, and carrying the reader in the pacing. The way you have written this, the segments coming in waves, even more evocative of a sea faring hero. The plot builds with each bit, rising perfectly to the ending.

It is impossible not to love your main character, I really want to read all about the adventure of Captain Deng Tougher in the Milky Way Federation, I just love the name Deng, brings up all the right sort of connotations for this story.

I adore your portal and your ending <3 this would make a fantastic series!

Thanks for the thoughtful feedback @calluna.

Way to go with the @curie vote! This would make an awesome book series. Know you're Independent Jax and didn't vote for Trump, this would be fantastic for the Nuclear Republic crowd though. LOL

Ha, ha. Makes me think of that new Nuclear Republican Country song, "Why Do Rich People Have to Die".

Awesome swashbuckling tale, full of high adventure, with a neat twist! I enjoyed this! Captain Deng Tougher rules. :D

Poor Cap'n Deng Tougher, he's outta the loop and gets unexpected plottwists thrown at his face with words of appraisal at first mention. He's riding on a thin line and going to have to play that balancing act real well now. Anyways resteem'd and good job on the curie and c-squared vote.

Seems like something that could be stretched into a large novel or a series. Loved it. Thanks for sharing. Really good

Thanks @solcross. Have been using another character Desmond Mayday a former star player for the Lakers. Didn't fit the prompt. Thought of Luol Deng though, LOL.

Congratulations! This post has been upvoted from the communal account, @minnowsupport, by cyemela from the Minnow Support Project. It's a witness project run by aggroed, ausbitbank, teamsteem, someguy123, neoxian, followbtcnews, and netuoso. The goal is to help Steemit grow by supporting Minnows. Please find us at the Peace, Abundance, and Liberty Network (PALnet) Discord Channel. It's a completely public and open space to all members of the Steemit community who voluntarily choose to be there.

If you would like to delegate to the Minnow Support Project you can do so by clicking on the following links: 50SP, 100SP, 250SP, 500SP, 1000SP, 5000SP.
Be sure to leave at least 50SP undelegated on your account.


This post was shared in the Curation Collective Discord community for curators, and upvoted and resteemed by the @c-squared community account after manual review.

PRICES HAVE CHANGED TO 0.150 and 0.151!!!
NEW TIER UPVOTES user guide



Current price is 0.150 or 0.151 SBD for 200%, 250%, or 300% upvote based on tier level.

200% ($0.30) - Bronze Level - No requirements
250% ($0.37) - Silver Level - SteemAuto Upvote of 100% or $0.02 (whichever is possible)
300% ($0.45) - Gold Level - SteemAuto Upvote of 100% or $0.02 AND 50 SP delegation

All delegators make a "striking" return on your investment!
50 SP --- 100 SP --- 200 SP --- 500 SP --- 1000 SP

That being said...

BOOOOOOOOOM!!!

The ground shakes as incredible power lights the sky. The thunder tests the quality of your post and deems it worthy, rewarding it with an upvote and comment from @thundercurator.

Investors who delegate SP to @thundercurator are entitled to 75% of @thundercurator income after curation. Get on-board early and grow with us!

Cool story. It gets my vote.

Hi cyemela,

This post has been upvoted by the Curie community curation project and associated vote trail as exceptional content (human curated and reviewed). Have a great day :)

Visit curiesteem.com or join the Curie Discord community to learn more.

Coin Marketplace

STEEM 0.16
TRX 0.13
JST 0.027
BTC 60690.86
ETH 2905.70
USDT 1.00
SBD 2.39