Is this a good ad?

in steemit •  8 months ago

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Hello Steemains,

Today I want to know your opinion on one of my ads. In my position, I can never fully know what the consumers want. A piece of paper can get me a sale but to what extent. Can you guys assist me with the following:

Would you read this or is it too long?

How fast will this go in the trash?

What I'm I missing? Maybe statics form that area code?

How can I Improve this.

I have this as well would this work better?

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Why would you write that you can speak Spanish in English? There is a typo, you wrote professional when it should say professionally. In the second add you wrote 'some', maybe get rid of that word or change it to 'interested'.


Thank you crypticat! I will definitely update that! Maybe I should bold the Spanish part as well since they won't read an article in English.


Always happy to help

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