The Man in the Moon - an original poem
Bringing forth the darkness
The man in the moon
Peaks from behind the clouds
Looking down upon anyone
Walking the night
Before he retires
With the arrival of the sun
Bright white light
Floods the Street
A new day
Met with harsh reality
Life is just a moment
Soon to expire
Pitch black
No man in the moon watching over us
At journeys end
...eternal darkness
I really enjoy that you continue to share your work with the community. :)
You really have a strong focus on imagery. The rhythm seems a little choppy, but that could just be the Stout. I think that your word choice was well done so as to set a relaxing tone that allows the imagery to float from one idea to the next. Great work. :)
Thanks! I enjoy reading your poetry also. I am still figuring out how to be a good poet, but the feedback I've recieved has helped me improve.
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