“A surprise is coming...” - freewrite

in #freewrite7 years ago

This freewrite had a lot in common with one recurring scene in Confessions of the Damaged that I heave been sharing at steemit called A Dream Sequence

To join the freewrite fun, checkcout @mariannewest’s original post here
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She turned the corner. There were hardly any people. It seemed as if the entire neighborhood was entirely abandoned. Trees lined the empty roads and the thoughts that lined her psyche were plucked one by one by some unseen force. The road prodded her onward, choosing for her which way to go. She had been on her way home and now she found herself in an unfamiliar little corner of her town, which mysteriously was void of civilization aside from the empty houses that hid behind the overgrown trees, scattered between forest.

“This way”, it seemed the trees were speaking to her.

She followed their suggestion and found herself at a dead end. She knew because there was a sign that said “DEAD END”.

“We’ve been waiting for you.” It said, beckoning her towards the house wedged between two woods at the end of the road. She walked up to the door and, as if possessed, turned the knob on the door without much of a thought.

“There’s a surprise coming to you...”

She let the door creak open.

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Well written and intriguing piece.

There is something about doorways isn't there?

The promise or threat of the unknown - a portal for the mundane, unexpected - good/bad/indifferent. A true metaphor for growth.

It certainly sucked me in and left me wanting more :)

xox

Yes, sometching about doorways indeed. I like stairways to!

Thanks!

Oh how nice someone threw her a surprise party :D

(was it supposed to be horror? XD)

goatsig

No horror, There was an upgoat inside!

I could feel all of the emotions coming from this woman and I like the funny part you added about the dead end. LOL! You gave me a creepy feeling about what her surprise is that is waiting for her. Please tell us what it was...please? Now here is a surprise for you...Tip!

It might just be another door or something like that ;-P This might actually make it into “A Dream Sequence” which is kind of a series of sub stories connecting the short stories that make up the collection I’m working on. Thanks for reading!

Sounds good to me. I will definitely have to check out your collection. : )

Not sure if I like the surprise...
glad you remembered to post the link!!
https://steemit.com/freewrite/@mariannewest/day-71-5-minute-freewrite-prompt-toothache

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