Stories of Calik – Lata the Lawless

in #fiction5 years ago (edited)

A steady stream of fine drizzle fell from the heavens as the blood-soaked lumbering figure staggered through a particularly dense thicket of thorn needles.

Sharp incisors pierced his exposed flesh adding fresh pain to his already writhing body.

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His foe was closing in and he knew only sharp actions would save him from this relentless pursuer, someone he should not have crossed.

The trail he was leaving could be followed by a child, a far cry from his expert ranger skills and careful concealment normally placed to rid himself of such deadly predators.

Exhausted, defeated and unable to continue he slumped beside an enormous Yarrow Tree gasping at the sight of the gaping hole in his ruptured side. Blood was flowing freely from the crossbow bolt that had struck home and his vision began to blur.

In desperation, he flailed at a nearby large Boloa Bush with its massive colossal leaves in an attempt to stem the flow. Clutching at a couple he stuffed them into the wound elevating the pain to greater levels. This was not the way to stop the bleeding but he had to do something, anything.

The sounds of pattering raindrops became pronounced and the intense agony ravaging his body somehow temporarily magnified his senses.

Was that the sound of footsteps approaching?

Well, well, what have we got here”, came a raspy tormenting voice at the edge of his consciousness.

Tanor was now beyond caring and prayed for a quick death from his captor, better known as Lata the Lawless.

Pathetic worm’, sneered Lata, towering over the defenceless victim. Slowly he unsheathed the shimmering long knife at his waist otherwise known as ‘Glitter’ and stalked around the hapless ranger in a slow deliberate calculated pace.

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Lata revelled in the whole experience of death; the look in the eyes just before the knife cut into the flesh and the flickering vanishing light as the life drained from them never got old. He was insane and knew it.

In a smooth stroke, Glitter ruthlessly plunged into the throat of the victim showering the killer with a deluge of bright red-hot blood.

A single stab was not enough and the knife was repeatedly withdrawn and driven down until Tanor’s neck was reduced to an unidentifiable bloody massed pulp of sinew, shredded skin and blood.

The ranger deserved this; that he was sure about. Nobody disrespected Lata the Lawless unless they wanted to die, and to let this incident pass without retribution would be considered a sign of weakness.

Sorry friend but I have a reputation to uphold’, he growled softly to the corpse without a shred of empathy.

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The mostly jungle world of Calik with its unending rain had its advantages to some ‘trades’. Lata figured by the time he returned to the realms of civilisation that any signs of blood and gore would have long washed away.

Drizzle was a rare sight to see and the more normal persistent torrents of rain could be seen moving in from the east over the Vale of Ganner.

It had felt good to kill again.

Original Fiction (c) Slobberchops, July 2019.


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Nice start to what I am sure will be a very engaging story. Automating software installs must give you lots of time for your mind to wander into creative territory! :) I am joking of course. I look forward to reading future installments!

I don't know whether there will be anymore. It's not easy writing fiction and creating some kind of atmosphere or character that can be brought to life. I have never done anything like this before and it's just an exercise in seeing the responses.

@goblinknackers read it earlier and told me that 'people that are not of native English language may struggle with your diction'.

That is a possibility but chances are it wasn't targeted at them anyway. I feel like you did a good job of using descriptors and comparisons to help the reader "feel" what you were trying to say. I have a hard time believing this was just a flash in the pan but I understand if you choose not to continue.

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Wow @slobberchops, you're a very good writer of fiction, a real horror story though!

Hehe, very good. Them bloody reputations must be upheld!

They must, though I'm not sure where to take Lata from here.

Start the next one with someone else. Let Lata be the bastard :0)

They are stories based in that world.. so this is a possibility.

They are stories based
In that world.. so this is a
Possibility.

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Wow....you got some writers talent @slobberchops :)

Wow....you got some writers talent @slobberchops :)

I really don't know whether I have or not. Should I continue with this or does it read like drivel?

I'm no David Gemmell for sure, but there's some inspiration coming from there.

Seriously I do think you have, If I may advise... Continue :)

I'll try.. it's not easy I tell you!

I am sure it's not easy...... But that's the challenge isn't it :) But you'll manage just fine :)

Oh that's funny, I thought there was a hint of Gemmel in it. He was one of my favourite offers

That's what you get for reading Waylander... for the second time. My guy is completely bad though, unlike his protagonist.

Ah, him and Druss, my favourites. I met Gemmel once. He really was a top bloke

I met Gemmel once. He really was a top bloke

No more books from him, I have tried to track down his books on audio format as I no longer read.. car is more convenient for listening.

If I do more.. it will be in a similar vein. His stuff is so readable compared to a lot of others.

It is, that was his great skill. I can still remember the first one I read and it was like shining a light in a dark room. Top notch.

It's funy that, the no reading thing. I don't read too much either since this steemit malarkey

Good grief!

Is that good, bad or just boring? I'm looking for honest opinions here! I don't know whether to continue this or not.

Oh, I'm sure you'll get a following -- and if you enjoy them, that's plenty of reason to continue. But The Weasel will tell you how I feel about apocalyptic fiction and movies. (And anything that contains a "superhero" ... or anything with Marvel stamped on it somewhere. Hint: he has to watch all those on his computer ... by himself ... with the headphones on.)

Don't let that deter you though in the slightest. I am definitely in the minority. You wouldn't like my taste in fiction either. Fortunately, the market is big enough to accommodate a lot of diversity. And I can appreciate imagination when I see it.

Carry on.

Who said anything about a superhero, or protagonist? This world is full of bastards who get away with what they do.., and you wont find a hollywood happy ending.

Well written IMO.

Thanks @old-guy-photos, I do plan to do some more.

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