@raj808 - I have been wanting to participate in @f3nix’s Finish The Story since last Fall. Just seems like there’s never time... But your entry has gotten me motivate and excited to participate again! Well written - loved it!
It's the weekend and we offer a freshly baked 47th edition. Don't you smell it's inviting fragrance? Also, allow me to invite you in our Bananafish Realms, a place for brave storytellers only.
Thank you, I'm so pleased you enjoyed the story @aejackson.
Also, that it has inspired you to have a go in the next round. I find the 'finish the story' to be one of the best writers prompts on steem. I always seem to get right into a strong rhythm and natural flow working from someone elses beginning... Also it's fun😉
Dear Melinda, a good practice would demand that you get well informed before starting to blackmail someone. There's so much in so little space and yet that word limit seemed to me not only respected but also in a large way. The merit goes to the magic in your descriptions and to the knowledgeable dosing between atmosphere, suspense building, and the twists. Once again, a true pleasure to read (and forgive my belated reply).
Ha ha, yes Melinda chose the wrong guy to mess with, or rather the wrong group of ancestral spirits lol
Glad you enjoyed the story m8. This was an exercise in pace for me. I wanted it to be like a real slow build of creepiness with a shock of graphic gore at the end. I could definitely have spent another hundred words on the final paragraphs to make it more gut wrenching but ya know what they say... sometimes less is more 😉
I'll check out this week's FTS beginning tomorrow and have a crack if it grabs me by the toes like dirges did.
I found the moment of the great grandmother's statue scratching the message equally intense and scary. Well, in this edition my story had to keep high the bar after Dirge's one. I hope I accomplished the mission. It's one of those stories where I'd love your opinion 🙂
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This is just spectacular, the way you open so beautifully, and then the statues, the way you incorporate his ancestors is just brilliant, it builds this palpable horror tone, painting so wonderfully the weight of the Leitner Legancy Benjamin faces. Then the history you bring in with each of them is like flashes of vivid memory. It all combined in a strong sense of realism, that is just prime for the statue carving its foreboding message.
Then the spirits inhabiting him, playing so fantastically on the set up in the first half. And the moment of memory you chose then, with it's searing descriptions, just a beautiful teaser of the visceral action that follows.
The way you use Melinda, with her lover - a great touch, building suspense in her wavering confidence, until she is forced to find her way through the darkness. It leads so perfectly into your ending, (which I love!! <3) as dripping in horror as his blood soaked face. Just wonderfully done, so very glad you managed to bring us this one!
Thank you @bananafish knight, Calluna. I must say this is the thing I've missed most on this hiatus from writing poetry and fiction on steem; the wonderful insightful comments that help me see the piece through another person's eyes.
I'm so glad you enjoyed the story ending. I wasn't sure if I'd gone overboard with the shock factor at the end but I was really happy with the atmosphere and pace when I gave it a brief edit. It's really cool to have your feedback which confirms my instincts. Glad to be back writing horror, it is one of my fav genres to write :)
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@raj808 - I have been wanting to participate in @f3nix’s Finish The Story since last Fall. Just seems like there’s never time... But your entry has gotten me motivate and excited to participate again! Well written - loved it!
It's the weekend and we offer a freshly baked 47th edition. Don't you smell it's inviting fragrance? Also, allow me to invite you in our Bananafish Realms, a place for brave storytellers only.
Thank you, I'm so pleased you enjoyed the story @aejackson.
Also, that it has inspired you to have a go in the next round. I find the 'finish the story' to be one of the best writers prompts on steem. I always seem to get right into a strong rhythm and natural flow working from someone elses beginning... Also it's fun😉
Thanks again for checking out my post
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Dear Melinda, a good practice would demand that you get well informed before starting to blackmail someone. There's so much in so little space and yet that word limit seemed to me not only respected but also in a large way. The merit goes to the magic in your descriptions and to the knowledgeable dosing between atmosphere, suspense building, and the twists. Once again, a true pleasure to read (and forgive my belated reply).
Ha ha, yes Melinda chose the wrong guy to mess with, or rather the wrong group of ancestral spirits lol
Glad you enjoyed the story m8. This was an exercise in pace for me. I wanted it to be like a real slow build of creepiness with a shock of graphic gore at the end. I could definitely have spent another hundred words on the final paragraphs to make it more gut wrenching but ya know what they say... sometimes less is more 😉
I'll check out this week's FTS beginning tomorrow and have a crack if it grabs me by the toes like dirges did.
Thanks for reading @f3nix 🙂
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I found the moment of the great grandmother's statue scratching the message equally intense and scary. Well, in this edition my story had to keep high the bar after Dirge's one. I hope I accomplished the mission. It's one of those stories where I'd love your opinion 🙂
I had to read the last part twice. That was intense. The monster got me the first time.
I'm glad you enjoyed the grisly ending Tristan :) Also, how intense and creepy it was. I was sort of hart in mouth while I was writing it lol
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This is just spectacular, the way you open so beautifully, and then the statues, the way you incorporate his ancestors is just brilliant, it builds this palpable horror tone, painting so wonderfully the weight of the Leitner Legancy Benjamin faces. Then the history you bring in with each of them is like flashes of vivid memory. It all combined in a strong sense of realism, that is just prime for the statue carving its foreboding message.
Then the spirits inhabiting him, playing so fantastically on the set up in the first half. And the moment of memory you chose then, with it's searing descriptions, just a beautiful teaser of the visceral action that follows.
The way you use Melinda, with her lover - a great touch, building suspense in her wavering confidence, until she is forced to find her way through the darkness. It leads so perfectly into your ending, (which I love!! <3) as dripping in horror as his blood soaked face. Just wonderfully done, so very glad you managed to bring us this one!
~ Calluna
Thank you @bananafish knight, Calluna. I must say this is the thing I've missed most on this hiatus from writing poetry and fiction on steem; the wonderful insightful comments that help me see the piece through another person's eyes.
I'm so glad you enjoyed the story ending. I wasn't sure if I'd gone overboard with the shock factor at the end but I was really happy with the atmosphere and pace when I gave it a brief edit. It's really cool to have your feedback which confirms my instincts. Glad to be back writing horror, it is one of my fav genres to write :)
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Wow! Everything fits together. The ending like a symphony of gore to an emotional high.
Ha ha, I love your description @cyemela
I'm a sucker for a traditional gore-fest ;-) Also, I wouldn't wish that death on anyone.... but... she kinda deserved to get fckd over lol
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