Just Beneath the Skin (Short Story) - Finish The Story Week 67
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Hi there,
A nice continuation. Only at the end, I was puzzled a little.
So Unit 25678 - the full mutant as I understood, have Clara White some wanter.
Then she said "No" Why?
Also, he interfered with her transformation process. Why? What was his purpose in knocking out the doctor?
Who was the chief of research? Unit 25678?
And what was the purpose of the dimensional portal?
Nice! I love what you did with the gurgling flapping thing next to the bed but out of her sight. And she has a snout! love this. I could not come up with anything for this, although I had become a bit obsessed with @tristancarax's 31 sentence story.
Thanks @owasco... I did like this story ending but I think it might have suffered a little from me trying to adhere to the word count. I think I edited it down from about 890 words to the 700 in the end. Some essential details got lost in the edit I think.
But sometimes I think a good story can be like this, where you can populate some of the happenstances with your own imagination lol.
For example, this was meant to indicate that Clara White was turning into a kind of Lizard/Human hybrid, along with the recurring use of the neodymium lamp (the type of lamp that is used in pet lizard enclosures to mimic sunlight), I wanted her to be a mutation with lizard DNA because various lizard species can regrow limbs which fits in with the idea that she'd recovered from organ failures.
To be honest though, I think all of this was far too subtle to be fully effective. This is the great thing about these types of writing exercises, learning is a life-long thing :-)
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Thanks for the curation @pibara. I'm glad you enjoyed the Sci-fi craziness ;-)
P.s. love the silent bob graphic!
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Thanks for the curation @bearbear613. I'm glad you enjoyed the Sci-fi craziness ;-)
This is so enjoyable, matey. I loved the way the paragraphs are divided and the rythm you gave. Not even to mention that everything flows impeccably.
Cheers dude. I thought you might like the crazy mix of genetic experimentation and dimensional shenanigans lol
Oh I do! That kept me stuck to the page.
Well, a sci-fi enthusiast would be in for a treat here - genetic engineering and interdimensional travel. That is cool. So, we are looking at genetic engineering progressing to interdimensional species (if we permitted more than 700 words). Clearly the word limit stymied the story and yet so much was delivered within the limit. That's the vintage @raj808 style. :)
Ha ha, yeah kind of... in my mind the research group were basically farming test subjects from our reality because they had already tinkered with the genetics of their own people so much... like clean subjects with pure genetics. I actually edited out a few paragraphs that alluded to this exact point now I think about it.
So Clara white, has had her genetics merged/mutated with that of a lizard with a view to regenerating tissue (her damaged lungs), kinda like some lizards can regrow a new tail.
I might take this ending I've written and just run with it over the next few weeks with a 7000-10000 word target to see if I can flesh it out with a view to submitting to one of the Sci-fi journals. It defo warrants more word space I think :)