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RE: Just Beneath the Skin (Short Story) - Finish The Story Week 67
Nice! I love what you did with the gurgling flapping thing next to the bed but out of her sight. And she has a snout! love this. I could not come up with anything for this, although I had become a bit obsessed with @tristancarax's 31 sentence story.
Thanks @owasco... I did like this story ending but I think it might have suffered a little from me trying to adhere to the word count. I think I edited it down from about 890 words to the 700 in the end. Some essential details got lost in the edit I think.
But sometimes I think a good story can be like this, where you can populate some of the happenstances with your own imagination lol.
For example, this was meant to indicate that Clara White was turning into a kind of Lizard/Human hybrid, along with the recurring use of the neodymium lamp (the type of lamp that is used in pet lizard enclosures to mimic sunlight), I wanted her to be a mutation with lizard DNA because various lizard species can regrow limbs which fits in with the idea that she'd recovered from organ failures.
To be honest though, I think all of this was far too subtle to be fully effective. This is the great thing about these types of writing exercises, learning is a life-long thing :-)