Fireflies - Chapter 20

in fantasy •  2 years ago  (edited)

Thank you for being a part of the journey! If you'd like more Fireflies - contact me in discord! I'll be happy to point you in a new direction!

Always, Dreemie
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All caught up!!!

LOLOLOL

laughing because I cannot believe you actually took the time to go back through 20 chapters and i'm so incredibly honored :)

Actually, you were there for much of it.
I was either listening to PYPT, or DM'ing, too.

LOLOLOL hmmm i should give you a quiz to see how much you were REALLY paying attention ;)

Do you like butter?
How old were you when someone first told/showed you?
Was it here? Or in the other dream world that only you two meet in?

Wrong wrong wrong.
Dreem has two e's.

Sigh.... It's the little things @bluefinstudios!!!!

😜

OMG... it's the little things?
So, they've been lying to me all this time about...

... never mind.

Now see.....you left the show because of that.

And now you're starting it again!!!!! 😂😂😂😂

Oh crap!!!! Well, so its Derek huh??? While he may be a looker he is just a wolf is sheep's clothing. I am screaming at the top of my lungs to Talia not to trust this sly attractive man... don't do it Talia!!!! Runnnn!!!!! Will she hear me??? I need to call Mom!!! Ummm mom, your daughter is being manipulated by the devil!!!! Helpppp!!!! Awesome chapter Dreemie!!! Omg I'm on the edge of my seat!!!!!

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!! Well if Talia can cross over into other worlds - maybe you can cross over into hers!!!! try it @monchhichi23!!!! yell louder!!! LOLOL

hehehehehe i was reading your comment to my hubby and he was cracking up!!! :)

That's exactly what was in my head Dreem lol... Derek sucks ... he needs to go... Brooke needs to stab his ass!!! just sayin hahaha

With a chopstick!!!!!! Lololol

Oh my! So worried for Talia and Bryd! And damn this Derek dude! He's a predator! I'm going to amass all my energy and quash him! (If I knew how to do that)

Loving the story Dreemie! If you want to whisper to me what happens next I won't mind ;)

XXXOOO ~T

Amass it!!!! Amass it all!!!! LOLOLOL I bet if you tried - you could be the next Talia! hehehehhe

You want a whisper???? hmmmmm well.... I'll do something better. Very soon, I'll have some fun with my readers ;)

Wait? What? Fun with your readers? I’m actually a little frightened.....don’t send Derek after me PLEASE! Yikes!

Bwahahahahahaha!

ROFLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL don't you know @tamala....
Derek has a mind of his own ;)

😱☠️😵

Best chapter yet. Read fluid and loving 'Derek'😎

hahahahaha you are such a fast reader!!!!!! LOL
I'm so glad you liked it!!!! I was thinking that since this one doesn't have much conversation in it - it might be a little bit hard to read!

but - wow!!!! i'm so glad that you think it's the best chapter yet!!!! hehehehehe
That is an unexpected surprise!!!! :)

Well I told you before he hunts similar to the way I do. Stalker. True predator. Like in this paragraph:

He had been stalking her for three weeks now. Careful to keep his distance, he observed her from afar. He knew her patterns, her habits, and her schedule. Her waxy pallor revealed that she was slowly starving herself for energy. Good. Nothing like a little oasis to tempt a desert wanderer.

He's a badass.

hahahahahahahaha you know what i love?????

come back and watch the comments in a day or two - when my sweet subscribers have had a chance to all read and comment!

EVERYONE feels so differently towards the characters!!!!

like @monchhichi23 HATES this guy! hahahaha and @zen-art couldn't STAND Bryd and then... felt so bad when she saw what was happening! and then HATED this guy! hahahahaha (i'm not saying his name yet - so that they can read the story after seeing the comments hahahaha)

but - yes... i wanted to make this character very complex. and.... i think it's working so far :)

I'm SO loving your investment in this story!!! I totally feed off of all my reader's energy! hehehehehehe

Well it's a damn good character, love him or hate him. My favorite in the story. I mean, what if Bryd and Talia are really the evil ones? Or maybe that's just the way this 'creature' is. His nature. Can't hate him for that. It's like hating a caterpillar that eats your roses so it can turn into a butterfly.

That's exactly right. You can't usually tell at first glance what is what. And we are dealing with other dimensions here! Who is to say exactly what he's feeling? We can only view him through our human eyes and make judgments from our limited perspective. but when you can suspend your imagination enough to immerse yourself completely into the story..... that's when the fun begins! hehehehe

I love that you love it! (have i said that enough? i don't think i tire of saying it to my readers.... i really don't hahahahahaha)

Lol no worries sweets, looking forward to the next one for sure😎🤗

like i just told @tamala.... I'm thinking about having some fun with my readers very soon... keep your eyes peeled :)

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OH THANK YOU!!!!!!!!! :) i'm so excited!!!!!!!!! thank you @scuzzy and @poeticsnake!!!!!

so happy to be SNEKKED!!!! :)

Just caught up from chapter 16. I don't trust Derek even slightly.

Looking forward to seeing how the story progresses! Chapter 17 has been my favourite so far.

ohhhhhhhh.... that's interesting!!! Now I want to know why that chapter was your favorite :)

The twist in events and the mystery/suspense you create. It struck me particularly in that chapter, when I wanted to know who the captor was and imagined the scene of the boy being tortured mentally instead of physically.

Short but intense, which is my favourite style of writing.

thanks for replying :) I'm smiling right now as I read (and reply) because it's such a joy to strike a chord with someone through art :)

I appreciate you sharing!!! :) and hoping that I can keep entertaining you with the story :)

just realized that I replied to that with the wrong account @alheath. LOLOL (sorry it was ridiculously late last night) but that was @dreemsteem that was talking to you in the Welcome Wagon comment hahahaha

Evil little man makes my skin crawl, I do not like him one bit, not a single bit. Buuuuu... If someone is in his nature evil @enginewitty, you give that person a tranquilizer and lock him up lol. Love how the story is progressing @dreemsteem, but a bit annoyed with this character :D

But who defines what evil is? Is it not just a point of view?

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Yeah sure. Your point of you may be to use me or hurt me and my point of you may be that you are evil and I should defend myself from you :D There is no good or bad if go to a philosophical level, it is all a matter of perception but on a larger scale, we are all very subjective. :) If someone hurts your kids, I am sure you would not debate with that person or think about their point of view and try to justify their actions. You would show them your teeth and that is normal, subjective. Being objective is an illusion. We are humans, not robots.

LOLOLOLOLOLOL she's got a point there @enginewitty!!!!

She brought the kids in. Can't even argue with that!!!! LOLOLOL

but.. Derek... hmmmm who will he show himself to be? good...evil.... somewhere in between? I know who he is. because I'm the writer ;)

tomorrow is Saturday! another chapter revealed. hehehehe i love both of your interactions!!!! never stop pleeeeeeeeeeeease. I love every minute of it and love every comment! LOLOLOLOL
and..... i love you both ;)

Wondering if, after her initial flush, it is Talia who turns the tables on D.
I am hoping. We will see... they must act out their play... and see where their third act takes them.

indeed we shall ;)

LOLOLOLOLOLOLOL but you were annoyed with Bryd too!!!!! and that changed!!!! LOLOLOL will it change again??? or deepen??? so much to be revealed! hehehehehe

and i'm laughing so hard at

Evil little man makes my skin crawl

LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL

How do you find the time to type this story and run the Wagon Wheel as well? I'm barely finding time to do the odd tiny post and all yours are massive pieces of incredible writing!

I've missed a few of these so I need to set aside a week to go back through and read them all! Although I remember bits from earlier so this still works, what is it about Derek though? I was trying to find a good Derek joke but all I found was Urban Dictionary saying Derek is this incredible, kind hearted person that every man aspires to and every woman desires! So is that coincidence or is it just me that never new the significance of a Derek! I always though it was one of those big structures you see in oil fields that have a massive bar that goes up and down.

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AHAHAHAHA I can't help but love the villain!!! There is nothing in this world like a good villain, amiright??

You and @enginewitty will be fast friends! LOL

Right you are!

How do you find the time to type this story and run the Wagon Wheel as well? I'm barely finding time to do the odd tiny post and all yours are massive pieces of incredible writing!

I've missed a few of these so I need to set aside a week to go back through and read them all! Although I remember bits from earlier so this still works, what is it about Derek though? I was trying to find a good Derek joke but all I found was Urban Dictionary saying Derek is this incredible, kind hearted person that every man aspires to and every woman desires! So is that coincidence or is it just me that never new the significance of a Derek! I always though it was one of those big structures you see in oil fields that have a massive bar that goes up and down.

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#thealliance

I love that you're into the names of characters too!!!! I always choose my characters' names carefully :)
I can't say why I chose the name Derek yet...it's too early and I can't let anyone peek inside my mind or else they will start guessing things about the story hehehehe

And chapter 21 was released yesterday but don't read it!!!!! Wait til you catch up with the other chapters or you'll ruin it for yourself hehehe

You can borrow my time machine if you like.

BUT JUST THIS ONCE!!!!

Cuz there are a bunch of people sitting around my house waiting to use it, and I'm tired of cooking for the masses. Gotta get these people moving!!! I'm a writer not a cooker! Lololol

Or cook... 🤔
See? I don't even know the proper term.

Talia is so naive, but I am sure that is about to change. Is she special, even amongst the special?

Great chapter!

Well she is only 17.... and Derek... hmmmm he's been around a looooong time ;)

What do you think @notconvinced? hehehehe I'm not sure which i enjoy more.... writing for you all, or READING your comments and talking with you about it!

Thank you for sharing your time with me :)

He can't be very powerful if he must deceive and steal the power of others. It seems he learned to cheat, rather than master the ability.

this was from a previous chapter.... what do you think of this :)

Although he had been in exile and in a weakened state, he had still been able to utilize his particular strengths to keep his edge. Having had the advantage of years and experience, he didn't doubt that he would be able to outmaneuver two teenagers,but Bryd had proven to be more resistant than he had expected.

Lol, what does age have to with a fictional character? Harry Potter comes to mind.

well.... it doesn't have everything to do with it.... we've already seen that both Talia and Bryd are old souls for sure!

But... certainly time and experience (lots of it) make someone a little bit knowledgeable in some ways.

but..... will that affect Talia? hmmmm let's wait and see :)

Of course my friend. My questions are just for me. Putting them out there allows me to compare them with the actual outcome.😀

hehehehehehe well that's kinda cool!!! :) Now that I think about it... this is an unusual experience for me as a writer.... being able to feel the reader's energy. But it's also just as unusual for my readers!!!! Mostly - people would read from chapter to chapter without any breaks and not really have the time to consider what THEY thought was coming. but you all really get to wonder :)

the point is.... i hope this is just as fun for my readers to interact in the comment section as it is for me! hehehehehe

thanks for always contributing to my enjoyment! :)

Ahhhh I read @enginewitty's comment.....I gotta read them all this weekend!

Def worth it. Have my endorsement 😋

LOLOLOLOL you peeked!!!!! you weren't supposed to until Lola was done! hahahahahahaha

He probably does not know he is the bad guy else won't be so smug at the end.