Poem - Wave Shaped Walls - Dsound Reading - Freewrite, Prompt - Big wave
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Reading this in the early morning makes me want to procrastinate more (unhelpful)! I enjoyed reading and listening to the poem. One thing I truly appreciate and like is your extensive use of vocabulary -- I always end up learning new words when reading your work. Thank you for that :3
You're welcome Jeremy... for the rather verbose lessons ;-) I honestly don't go out of my way to bring complicated words to my poems it is just the way I've always written poetry, I guess my style is more inventive than simple classical style lol. Thanks for reading buddy and I'm glad you enjoyed the surf trip :-)
It does seem natural and not forced, so I get that. Especially when it comes to vocabulary that fits the theme perfectly, it shows a wide knowledge of vocabulary or theme more than anything. :3
Interesting poem. It read like shel Silverstein to me. For some reason. That’s a good thing. Thanks for sharing.
Thanks coldsteem. That's a great compliment, I hadn't read any of Silverstein's poems but I checked them out and they're really good. Cheers for reading my poem :-)
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STOPI enjoyed it, especially with the waves :)
Thanks arbitrarykitten I'm glad you enjoyed the free surfing poetry ;-) Wave-washed in slipstream-dreams
I love the consistency in your lines and how you kept the wants flowing. I particularly loved this three lines.
Really glad you digged the poem abmakko. Any sea related poem just flies out of me and usually flows naturally as it's the place I like the most. Born in the wrong body mate, I should have been a dolphin lol Thanks for reading :-)
Im always a fan of a nature inspired poetry. Anyone will have no problem relating to it..:) thanks for sharing! :)
No probs Kymio. Many thanks for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed the poem :-)
I love the beauty and rhythm. Your word choice is excellent. I have never surfed but your verse gives me the feel of this and I entered in headfirst!
I'm glad that I captured it so well to give you that surfing feeling wandrnrose. It really is like a slipstream of time when your surfing, time fly's by in the blink of an eye as you're so focused on the rythm of the sea and trying to catch a wave. They usually come one out of 3 or 4 and you have to wait and judge it and then when you stand on a perfect wave and barrel toward the shore, wind whipping salt stained brow, the exhilaration is so much more for the waiting. :-)
Love the poem. A wonderful use of words that man!
"I want to go surfing
through adrenaline rushes,
smashed into splinters,
my mind at double speed
as I wipe out and fall,
through icicle water,
a beautiful alarm call."
This was the clincher.
Think about it a bit then set the alarm, ok!?
Thanks Jay. Yes, I will set the alarm for surf city m8 ;-) Remember North Carolina, Wilmington? I was surfing all day until I got ill, you stayed out in the waves for the rest of the day while I puked my guts up lol
I really liked this. I myself am a man of the sea. I live near the sea, I live of the sea, and I can say(At least for myself) that everything you do at the sea has that bigger and deeper meaning, and eventually you get addicted to sea. And that sensation is what I recognized here.
Thanks spalatino. I appreciate where you're coming from as I have a deep affinity for the sea myself. I am a massive scuba diving enthusiast and wish every day that I lived nearer to the sea. It is a spiritual connection with wave and water that I can hear and recognize in your words, this is something I feel also. Thanks for checking out the poem, I'm glad it resonated strongly with you :-)
Cool imagery. I think you have a lot of potential in your poetry!
Thanks uniwhisp. I think my poetry can be quite heavy on the imagery but that is my strength for sure, your comment and support is appreciated :-)