I am in love with the ambience, the way the piano comes in and that voice is a wonderful compliment to all of it. The percussion sounds great, the kick with a little bit of reverb is clean! And those toms really keep the beat moving. The sound you bring in at 1:48ish is superb as well.
This may be more personal preference, but I think the piano could either use less space between the notes, more precisely timed space, or a different more reverberated sound. When she's first exposed around 1:07 you can clearly hear some space between the notes which throws me off a bit. Once more stuff comes in it definitely masks this little imperfection though. She is re-exposed around 4:45 which I also think could be cleaner.
Also preference, but my ears are dying to hear some higher end melody when the lyrics come in. Whoever's voice that is is beautiful, and the lack of effects on his voice shines through in a great way. Juxtaposing such a clean sound next to the ambience of the rest of the track is nice. Though I feel like maybe a tiny bit of chorus, a little bit of harmony with the voice could go a long way.
rad! thanks for taking the time to listen and FEEDBACK! i like your notes and will probably use them or try them and see what i find. the vocals were done by me. thanks kindly for the compliment. i know my voice is a bit strange and is not for everbody. so it is nice to hear! so thank you for saying such. like it is tittled as, this tune is very much in the demo stage, so your notes are wonderful. thank you!
Every time I hear you sing Morphine jumps to mind, do you know that band? Your voice reminds me of Mark Sandman the lead singer <3
Edit... Oh yeah & you remind me of the Butthole Surfers too!!!
The production is very good Brian!!!!!!
Love the daring dramatic poeticness with a touch of melancholy but an undertone of determination!!
Yes you definitely are a storyteller & a really wonderful at that <3
As @fireawaymarmot pointed out, the voice is too upfront in some parts ( mainly the end ), you could work with automations to settle that though <3
wow yeah! I have heard this before but I never really gotten into Mark or Morphine. and yes i agree the vocals are not yet right. i like your ideas on how to go at it. the production is half me, have my brother @lefthouse . it means a lot to me to have one of my heros listen to my music. means the world!!
I like the way you hold that first note, it shows that you aren't afraid of low attention spans out there. And it sets the tone for the rest of the song. The opening piano and drum mix work very nicely, I really like the way the drums circle around.
A very emotional song, and overall quite well put together. The one thing that does need work is the lyrics mix- it's too separate from the instruments. Not sure what to do, but some way to bring your voice back a bit, or the instruments forward, it takes me out of the song as it is now. And maybe a retake on the singing, you wobbled a little in a few parts (I know, it's just a demo).
Powerful stuff otherwise.
awesome! thanks! yes i agree. the lyrics are not yet placed right. and glad you liked it. i think its getting close but needs more work indeed. thanks kindly for listening and your FEEDBACK!!
I liked instrumental thinking about timbres. Something more focused to the low frequencies and a big sustain of the notes. The deep voice is something touching here, an excellent tuning. This mix of timbres with electronic and acoustic sounds in oposition, is something very interesting to explore, and very well done in the course of music!
sick song my man!
I am in love with the ambience, the way the piano comes in and that voice is a wonderful compliment to all of it. The percussion sounds great, the kick with a little bit of reverb is clean! And those toms really keep the beat moving. The sound you bring in at 1:48ish is superb as well.
This may be more personal preference, but I think the piano could either use less space between the notes, more precisely timed space, or a different more reverberated sound. When she's first exposed around 1:07 you can clearly hear some space between the notes which throws me off a bit. Once more stuff comes in it definitely masks this little imperfection though. She is re-exposed around 4:45 which I also think could be cleaner.
Also preference, but my ears are dying to hear some higher end melody when the lyrics come in. Whoever's voice that is is beautiful, and the lack of effects on his voice shines through in a great way. Juxtaposing such a clean sound next to the ambience of the rest of the track is nice. Though I feel like maybe a tiny bit of chorus, a little bit of harmony with the voice could go a long way.
I can't think of much else! Great track my dude!
rad! thanks for taking the time to listen and FEEDBACK! i like your notes and will probably use them or try them and see what i find. the vocals were done by me. thanks kindly for the compliment. i know my voice is a bit strange and is not for everbody. so it is nice to hear! so thank you for saying such. like it is tittled as, this tune is very much in the demo stage, so your notes are wonderful. thank you!
I wann give feedback, Dsound doesn't play the song anymore! Do you have it uploaded somewhere else Brian??
THE DEMO OF A SAD SILLY LIFE - THE SOUNDCLOUD LINK:
https://soundcloud.com/lefthouse-recordings/the-demo-of-a-sad-silly-life
Every time I hear you sing Morphine jumps to mind, do you know that band? Your voice reminds me of Mark Sandman the lead singer <3
Edit... Oh yeah & you remind me of the Butthole Surfers too!!!
The production is very good Brian!!!!!!
Love the daring dramatic poeticness with a touch of melancholy but an undertone of determination!!
Yes you definitely are a storyteller & a really wonderful at that <3
As @fireawaymarmot pointed out, the voice is too upfront in some parts ( mainly the end ), you could work with automations to settle that though <3
Much love & respect to you!! Huggins, D <3
wow yeah! I have heard this before but I never really gotten into Mark or Morphine. and yes i agree the vocals are not yet right. i like your ideas on how to go at it. the production is half me, have my brother @lefthouse . it means a lot to me to have one of my heros listen to my music. means the world!!
@dvine
weird. i will oad it to soundcloud now and link it!
Gave it a couple of listens, here's my feedback.
I like the way you hold that first note, it shows that you aren't afraid of low attention spans out there. And it sets the tone for the rest of the song. The opening piano and drum mix work very nicely, I really like the way the drums circle around.
A very emotional song, and overall quite well put together. The one thing that does need work is the lyrics mix- it's too separate from the instruments. Not sure what to do, but some way to bring your voice back a bit, or the instruments forward, it takes me out of the song as it is now. And maybe a retake on the singing, you wobbled a little in a few parts (I know, it's just a demo).
Powerful stuff otherwise.
awesome! thanks! yes i agree. the lyrics are not yet placed right. and glad you liked it. i think its getting close but needs more work indeed. thanks kindly for listening and your FEEDBACK!!
I liked instrumental thinking about timbres. Something more focused to the low frequencies and a big sustain of the notes. The deep voice is something touching here, an excellent tuning. This mix of timbres with electronic and acoustic sounds in oposition, is something very interesting to explore, and very well done in the course of music!