Steemitschool Poetry Class - Critique Thursday Class #6 - 26/04/18 - Recording and Notes

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Yesterday's class of @d-pend's Steemitschool 100 Day Poetry Challenge has been the fifth "Critique Thursday" class. To follow is a recording of the class. It's only sound, but has been uploaded to Youtube due to it being the best available place to upload it.

This week's class had no lecture portion, so let's dive straight into the video and the notes. You can head over to the episode's Youtube page for clickable time-stamps as well.

I recently published a post providing an outline, a sort of rudimentary guide on how to critique poetry, so if you want to try your hand at giving critique, give it a look!

At the 1:22 mark we go over our first poem, @liverussian's "Into the Sea".

17:03 brings us to the second poem, @acousticstevo's "For of the women I am called."

At the 41:09 mark we reach our third poem, @yahialababidi's "What do animals dream?".

At the 1:18:20 mark we get to our fourth poem, @d-pend's "Take it from the top."

1:32:40 brings us to the fifth and final poem for the class, @geekorner's "Revolution".


Join Us! And Reminder on Critique Requirement:

Steemitschool Poetry hosts a daily lesson at UTC 5-7 PM at the Steemitschool Discord server, 5 days a week (Saturday and Sunday are off). Join the Discord server here. Thanks to Daniel @d-pend Pendergraft for organizing it!

The weekly Critique Thursday class takes place at the same time, in the same place, on Thursdays.
If you would like to get a piece critiqued, bring it over, but make sure it is under 250 words, as longer pieces take too much time. Do try to have someone go over grammatical issues before class though.

For future classes, people who wish to have a poem critiqued will have to leave a critique on another poem between Thursday 7 PM UTC after the class ends, and Wednesday Noon UTC the day before next class (7 PM UTC, April 12th, to Noon UTC, April 18th, for next class). Links to the critique left (must be in English, on a poem written in English) must be left as comments on this post, or DMed to me or Daniel on Discord, by Wednesday Noon UTC, so I could go over them before class.
(Note, poem doesn't have to be from someone participating in either the class or the challenge, nor does it have to be from the past week. No, you can't critique your own poems, and critique written before week does not count.)

Half-assed comments will not be accepted. If you've done your best, even if you are struggling, it is good enough.
If you have medical issues that hinder your ability to leave comments, please talk to me in private and we'll work it out.

Update: If you can't or don't want to make it to class, you can still leave a critique comment, and reach out to me about a poem you'd like to have critiqued, and you'd be able to check it out in the recording!

Thanks to @tygertyger, @acousticsteveo, and @d-pend for giving critique in yesterday's class! Thanks to @d-pend, @liverussian, and @tygertyger who took the time to leave critique comments on others' poems this past week.

And thanks to anyone else who tuned in, or has checked this post out!


Check Out the Prior Classes Here:

(Don't upvote, older posts past pay-out.)

  • Week #1 - Including "lecture" portion on what critique is, its different forms, and how and why to go about it.
  • Week #2 - where we speak of what you should critique, reasons to not share critique, and reasons to.
  • Week #3 - Nothing but good ol' critique.
  • Week #4 - Critique, and topped off with a special critique we gave to a poem by Percy Shelley.
  • Week #5 - Critique, with a couple of short detours to discuss questions raised during class.

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Oh my God! I missed such an interesting class and so grateful for the recording opportunity!! Guys and Guy, you're just awesome! Thank you so much for taking time and critiquing my poem, I don't write often, bit this time I was really inspired by the poem of @carmalain from the fifth critique class (if I remember it well) thinking of the Babylon tragedy made me write it and I'm glad that you, Guy, actually even mention it in your critique, I really appreciate your analysis and a deep look into the poem, you got a lot of what was intended to be there. Thank you, Daniel, for pointing out that by choosing the "conclusion in the end of a poem" option, we take a responsibility of not giving our reader much of a choice, I'll think about it next time, I so wanted to push this ending, you know me)). Tyger, I wanted to say that you felt exactly what meant by "intelligence and wit", that's so pleasant to know that there are people out there who actually understand you... Thank you all, guys! I'm learning with you and I'm doing what I've never done! No matter how tired I am the next Thursday, I'll be there)

We've mentioned that piece of Alain's, but we didn't critique it, the one about the Tower of Babel, because that poem is almost 2,000 words long :D

BTW, Katya, I really recommend breaking your reply above into multiple paragraphs. First, because you're covering multiple ideas here, so you should. Second, because it'd make it much easier to read ;-) You do tend to leave your comments as one block, so it's something to also keep in mind.

Also, it's good there are people like Tyger who get you, but do consider whether you want others to get you too, even if they are not exactly coming from the same place you are in. But maybe you don't want that to happen too much - as one of the charms of poetry is that different people read it in different ways. And that also ties into the "clear ending" message. The tension between wanting to be understood, and wanting to leave people room to read themselves into the poem.

As for this Thursday - don't come too tired, Katya. We care about you, so we don't want you to be in class when you should be asleep.
And we loved going over your poem, and you're making great strides in poetry-writing. Good job!

Haha, I must have read that piece of Alain and your critique after the class, it felt like a part of the class))

Thank you for the advice about breaking my comments into paragraphs, that's true, I tend to give the info as a full package, haha

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