Man overboard! - Write Me a Sonnet Poetry Contest

in #writing7 years ago

Ahoy, steemateys! I hope you've been having a great weekend, unlike little old sick me! Being sick, however, opens the possibilities to sit down and really get some creative and academic work done, which is what I've been doing.

A couple days ago I noticed the Shakespeare(-an actor) of Steemit @Chrisroberts was running an English Sonnet competition and, having become really enthralled by poetry recently, I decided I'd give this more complex kind of form a try. With inspiration taken from my constant existential crisis and communism-induced suffocation, I give you:

Man overboard!


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"Abandon ship!", that's what everyone screams.
No time to think, I've heard we must jump ship.
What in the past would have been deemed blaspheme.
Or they, I fear, will from me my life strip.

A sailor here I did become, I did;
With rotten beams and quite weak winds, we sailed.
And we could see the end was near, I did;
My friends, this crew, through squall and calm, we sailed.

We see our ancient mates, they yell, "Ahoy!"
From better ships, where proper captains lead.
Some welcome us, some don't, with flags of joy.
They drift away, if we waste time we'll bleed.

Oh, this sinister end I won't embrace!
Another ship with my strong hands I'll grace!

Afterword

I think this may be my best poem to date (not that there are many, eh?). The reason might just be that my inspiration was true and my love for ships, sailing and pirates blew strong.

I wrote this poem while thinking of my current situation, constantly asking myself whether I should leave and become a barista in Argentina or something like that, or continue my studies in Caracas, risking my life every day just going to and coming from campus, in hopes that the totalitarian "socialist" government eventually goes full Titanic and lets us establish something new, something better.

If you read the poem, you'll see I'm currently leaning towards migration.

Anyway, I hope my verses shall be enough to woo @chrisroberts and land me a win, hahaha!

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Thank you so much for a great entry!

I was only expecting a few entries if any, but I really appreciate everyone giving it a try here. A lot of people are really out of their comfort zones; it's a tough poetic form. But I'm getting some really brilliant stuff, and your poem is no exception.

English is not your first language, correct? Just wondering. I can't even imagine being able to write a poem like this if English wasn't my native language.

If I may offer my opinion (with what limited knowledge I have) on your living situation... Safety is number one. Formal education is number... well, it's further down on the list. All I can offer is my distant perspective, but it's that you should be safe. If being safe means moving to Argentina, I think you should make it happen. That's all I've got on that.

Keep up the good work, @steemedchitty!

I really, really appreciate the thoughts and support. I believe that you're right, safety should always come first. It may sound strange, but you kind of forget that sometimes when living in this kind of situation.

English certainly isn't my first language! But don't give me too much credit. I may be above average, but achieving a good level in English is easier than most other languages because of the amount of content, entertainment and research made in English. It's effectively our world's lingua franca. Just existing online means studying English through practice constantly.

I also study German and French, and while I've achieved good proficiency so far, they remain on levels completely different from English for me. The reason? Lack of practice! At least by comparison.

Anyway, many thanks for reading and taking the time to show interest, it means a lot.

Steem on!

You did an awesome job of the sonnet... I think I have to spend some time reading a bunch of sonnets LOL. It's great to meet you and I hope you're feeling better very soon.

Thank you! I was very intimidated by it at first but little by little it started becoming easier. I made sure to practice the rhythm aspectin other poems which weren't sonnets first, then I added the "pentameter". It required some thinking because what came to me at first were always tetrametric verses.

I'm sure that with practice we'll both get quite better at it. And thanks, I've been getting better throughout the day!

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