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RE: Radical Revisions — Fun with Queries and Main Character Makeover
😂 (really wanted to use the word warp).
Awesome word, "warp." And I haven't used it yet in the story I don't think. hmmmm.
Your suggestions are excellent to keep in mind as I continue to work on the query. As for her being timid, that was the old version of the story. This new makeover makes her a lot more bold, even if she's scared inside sometimes.
As for the name, I'm leaning towards Sasje as well. Thanks for the vote of confidence. ;) She's not a redhead. Sandy hair and sage-green eyes.
And I have not read Haydon's Symphony of the Ages. I'll go look that up. Thank you very much for the thoughtful critique! 💖
You are welcome. I am glad you found something useful in it.
Oh... I like green eyes. She has fire in her then.
A bold version is better I think, if she is the one who is going to save herself.