6 shades shy of red

What an awesome description. ;) Maybe I will keep her lighter hair colour. She has green eyes right now, though. I like violet, but even that has been overdone. Maybe aqua-green, or sage-green?

I think the idea of columns is good for comparison edits, thanks for suggesting that. However, I think because this is a complete rewrite, it also works as old/new 'cause there isn't anything to properly compare. I won't be showing the previous text in every post, that's for sure, but talking about the revision process is helping me get it straight in my head.

I've worked with professional editors on multiple projects, and learned loads along the way. Your point about unaccounted plot jumps is excellent, though, especially in time travel books. Don't want the reader to be distracted and left hanging.

I'm glad to hear that this sounds like a story you're interested in reading. Thanks so much for your comment and encouragement!