RE: Radical Revision — An Experiment in Writing
I like the cover, and Dark/Black hair has been overdone I think. Give her a unique eye color something along a violet color or 6 shades shy of red or something that is different. A blonde bad-ass could work especially if she starts out as an apparent weak willed person that does some very quick growing up.
For on steemit comparison of chapter or edits you might want to use columns, I think @michelle.gent used that method very well in her side by side of How I edit my own work - Plus a story to read too - 14, just a sugestion. I found it pretty easy to see the changes, additions and deletions.
I do not know a lot about editing, and what an editor will do for a person, but along with grammar, spelling and punctuation, make sure there are not to many unaccounted plot jumps. Time travel can be pretty hard, but if you do not make the reader have to thumb backward through the story to find out the "why of something", you should have no problem keeping a timeline even in a time jump story.
Looks like I can look forward to a couple of new stories to read, I don't write, but I do like to read, oh and comment when I read a story.
What an awesome description. ;) Maybe I will keep her lighter hair colour. She has green eyes right now, though. I like violet, but even that has been overdone. Maybe aqua-green, or sage-green?
I think the idea of columns is good for comparison edits, thanks for suggesting that. However, I think because this is a complete rewrite, it also works as old/new 'cause there isn't anything to properly compare. I won't be showing the previous text in every post, that's for sure, but talking about the revision process is helping me get it straight in my head.
I've worked with professional editors on multiple projects, and learned loads along the way. Your point about unaccounted plot jumps is excellent, though, especially in time travel books. Don't want the reader to be distracted and left hanging.
I'm glad to hear that this sounds like a story you're interested in reading. Thanks so much for your comment and encouragement!