DECENTRALIZED Fiction Writing – Add a Chapter to My Story :-)

in #writing9 years ago (edited)


Hi there. I have been writing short novels for some time, mostly in my native language (Italian).
Now, I would like to play around with the fact that Steemit easily enables us to collect decentralized contributions to any activity, including creative writing...

Do you want to play with me? Then it works in this way:

I decide the abstract of a story, and write an introductory (very short) chapter, labelled as CHAPTER 1.
The first person willing to contribute is going to write a comment to the post containing a short chapter (labelled CHAPTER 2) which is logically connected to my CHAPTER 1 and develops the story...

Further contributors will post their own chapters as follow-ups to the last contribution submitted (e.g. CHAPTER 6, logically linked to CHAPTER 5).

Let's see what comes out..

IF YOU DONT' HAVE MUCH TIME, JUST WRITE ONE PARAGRAPH OR TWO :-)

After the first payment period (24 hours from now or so), I will post the stitched-up story resulting from your contributions (possibly with some edits, depending on my personal taste) and then we can continue from there for the next 30 days...

Ok, here we go:

ABSTRACT
Fabio and Emma are in their late 20s and live in London. Fabio is Italian, Emma comes from a small town in the north of England. Fabio has just lost his well-paid job in a major financial institution in the City, while Emma has just gotten a cool job in the fashion industry.
They have been together for three years and want to have children, but the recent professional changes are putting their relationship under
pressure. Fabio would like to either accept an offer from Wall Street and move now to New York City, or take a sabbatical year for them to travel and decide where to go and what to do next...

CHAPTER 1
A funny smell in the subway. It's not unpleasant – just weird. It reminds Fabio of one of Emma's body odours...the one he likes most.
Fabio was trying not to think about Emma for as long as possible, following last night's discussion. Sometimes he feels she doesn't realize how lucky they are: his savings can easily pay for 12 months of travelling, making love, and deciding where to go next. Ok, she has a brand new job, but they are still young and Fabio feels they should grab now their chance to travel and then decide where to settle down and have kids.
The train stops. Time to get out.

PLEASE POST YOUR FOLLOW-UP CHAPTER AND MAKE SURE YOU STATE CLEARLY YOUR CHAPTER n, WHICH SHOULD BE THE FOLLOW-UP TO THE CONTRIBUTION LABELLED AS CHAPTER n-1

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CHAPTER 5

The smell had intesified.
Fabio is staring at his own reflection in the window.
Why did he break down so quickly ?
Every time they argued, this would happen;
Emma goes passive and calls him silly.
How silly he is - a self-made millionaire and world class broker.
-Paying for her lifestyle of parties and nice dresses.
He's hurt and lonely.
He turns to the girl again, they start speaking simultaniously.
'What is your name ?'
'Have you been to the Fijis ?'

Please, please, please:
Don't make Fabio grab his phone to call Emma.
If anything, make her call him, please !!

hahaha , no smartphones please, no text,no whatsapp . Better to let him go to the tropics for a failed one night stand attempt because I want Emma to show up before its too late because I love happy endings.She might change her mind and comes back.

Maybe you should write a chapter from Emmas perspective ? :P
I think she is acting silly ...

Interesting thought I had as well

CHAPTER 2

The funny smell had followed him to the door. It's more present now.
Fabio can't help picturing tropical beaches, palm trees ... sunsets and peace.
He feels exhausted.
There is no way he can make her understand; fashion can wait -this train can not.
He stops in the door.
'I'm not coming - I'm sorry'
Emma turns arround on the platform.
'Don't be silly, we have reservations and you know who is ..."
Too late - the door shut.
They stare at each other as Fabio accelerates into the tunnel.

Very good. In my mind, they were not together in the train. But this is the fun...a story can take different turns depending on who contributes :-)

Sorry - I thought they were sitting next to each other.
Also sorry to seperate Fabio & Emma :(

too late :) hahaha its getting hot here
Let your phantasy play what fabio will be up to

you got me going :)

CHAPTER 3
Fabio's face turns pale and all he has in mind is how to open that damn door.
He screams "Emma, please wait for me, I come and get you ". She keeps on starring at him, doesn't move , watching the train leave slowly while Fabio runs quickly further back to try another door. Emma is the first girl he deeply fell in love with and he couldn't imagine a life without her . She turned his world up side down. How could he ever forget her innocent smile after making love to her. He let his head fall down, he knew she will go back to Italy to start her new job. Suddenly he hears a soft voice asking " Are you ok ?" He turns around and ......

Oh yeah ! Of course, the man will initiate a breakup and then break down before even making it into the tunnel ?
Come on ... Fabio is tougher than that :P

ok then ....Lets see

CHAPTER 6

Fiji, he thought. Why would she be asking me about Fiji? She doesn't even know me. I don't even know her.
"What's your name?" Fabio thought he'd try again. I can't talk about Fiji, not yet. Not before I know what her name is. At the least.
"You answer my question first." She said it with an element of mischeviousness. Fabio was intrigued. He was hoping she wouldn't push the Fiji issue. It reminded him of the time he spent a week there with Emma.
"Yes, I have been to Fiji. Once before." Why would she be asking about Fiji, Fabio thought. Is this just a coincidence?
"It's a beautiful place. So peaceful. I was there just last week." She confided in him.
"I met somebody there that knew you, Fabio."
How did she knows his name? Fabio's mind was racing. This woman is a mystery. Shouldn't he be chasing after Emma, not discussing Fiji with this mysterious woman? With this beautiful, mysterious woman, he thought. His thoughts were racing.
The more he considered it, the more he was captivated by her beauty.
He was entranced.

Sorry if I put it in the wrong spot! Thanks for the correct link.

CHAPTER 4
..and here she is: a very attractive black-haired girl speaking English with a strong Italian accent. She has probably not realized that Fabio is Italian, as Fabio has been living in London for many years. His Italian accent is not evident and in fact he can even fake a decent Cockney accent! Anyway, the black-haired girl is very attractive and within a split Fabio finds himself imagining a whole life together with her. His mother would certainly love her (emma on the contrary is not very popular in the family), and they could make love using Italian terms of endearment, etc, etc, etc...
All of a sudden, Fabio feels stupid for making all these fantasies up out a single sight of the woman.
He would like to stop the train and run after Emma. But this is impossible at this stage, so why not keep his point and get to know an interesting person...?
Fabio then goes like: "It's been a terrible day and you girls are really weird" (he speaks Italian now). The girls looks at him with interest and, after one second, nods.

Yap , Thats exactly what I had in my mind . The seduction is always around the corner when you at least expect it. In a split of a second life changes....I never write fiction and actually just overcame my block signing up on steemit. I am learning through writers like you. Cant wait who will continue with chapter 5

But Fabio is not a leaf in the wind -He's a trader and a gambler !
Hes not like a butterfly hopping from flower to flower, blown arround by the wind.
that's usually what girls do in novels

I am enjoying this a lot :)
All 3 of us are not native speakers of english, am I right ?

Fabio is a soft as any gambler can be . traders have weaknesses too ! I still have Emma in mind that she will be the one and will come back just at the right time with her suitcase in her hand , ready for the adventure . Will it be too late ? Lets hope you are right @felixxx that he is not a butterfly going with the wind

I am viennese and never wrote one line before I joined steemit . Hallihallooo . Thats fun !

Pretty cool idea! I'm curious to see how this proceeds! upvoted! But do tell is it really fiction?

@kus-knee (The Old Dog)

It is...what do you mean? It's not my own life :-)

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