The Streetlight (We-Write #11)
We-Write #11: Home Alone + Last Week's Winners Announced!
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Nathan peeped through the hole to see Mark’s hands waiving frantically. “What’s wrong, man?” Nathan shouted as he swung open the door. Out of breath, Mark replied, “In such a rush, picked up the wrong game. Gotta go back. Come with me”.
Seeing the window of opportunity narrow, before Mark could finish, Nathan shrugged his shoulders, grabbed his jacket from the entry closet, and tucked away his mom’s voice before she left.
Mark broke the silent, dark sprint down the sidewalk. “I’ll bet my mom gave that book to your mom after she found it under my bed.” Nearing the edge of the driveway at Mark’s home, Nathan half turned his head toward the streetlight before asking, “Did you read it?” Mark wondered why Nathan was staring so hard at the streetlight before answering, “Nah, flipped through some pages. Boring. Some kids’ series by two old decrepit-looking guys. Why she thought I’d be interested in that is a mystery to me”.
Nathan shuddered as he turned to look back towards his own house. It wasn't that cold outside. He had his jacket on, so why the need to wrap his hands around his shoulders. He shook his head quickly as though to shake it off and clear his thoughts. He didn't notice Mark had reached the side door to his parents' garage.
Mark opened the garage by the dim glow from the streetlight. Fumes from his mom’s car poured into the open air. “Mom” he called frantically while parting the thick air. No sign of her, he raced to the other side of the car and stepped into the house. His feet pushing his mom’s jacket and shoes out of his way.
“What’s wrong Mark?" Nathan shouted as the outline of his own mom’s car down the street came into view under the streetlight.
Welcome to We-Writes! I like the dialogue between Nathan and Mark, it felt very natural. I wonder what they stumbled upon with the moms, it's quite intriguing.
Thank you. Glad to be a part of this awesome community. Your encouragement is appreciated. i hope the nature of these stories aren't meant to provide a resolution at the end of the story because he boys are in for a great adventure, one in which they will mature a bit.
It's completely up to you! Some people like to leave a cliffhanger, others prefer to wrap everything up, any way is fine. A big theme of the contest is to just have fun and play with where you want the story to go.
awesome. thanks for the info. I love cliffhangers. that way, you have have a part 2 and beyong to weave a complete story to resolution.
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Ok. Thanks for letting me know. All advice is welcomek, as I'm still learning.
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Very interesting story! A mystery still, a murder mystery it seems to me. I want to know what the book was about (suicide? sex?) and what is going on between the two moms. Was the book a cry for help? There's a lot of depth in this one. Thank you so much for writing with us, and I hope you keep coming back.
Thank you so much for your kind words. I appreciate them. Yes, a mystery still.
I liked the fluency of your narrative all nicely animated and all. Although I got kind of confused in some expressions. For example this one...
Reminds me Beatles song, Elenor Rigby
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Hi. Thanks for your comments. "Tucked away" means to put it safely somewhere to retrieve later. He put it in the back of his mind. He knew he supposed to stay safe, but he ignored her and went outdoors in the dark anyway. Hope this helps.
Ah... Thank you! I knew what "tucked away" means, but I was only aware of its literal meaning. Cool!
Yes, it's used to describe putting something away in your mind you want to cherish and think about for later; then opposite- putting it so far back into your mind so you don't want to ever think about it again.
Thank you! Now, I will tuck it away. :)
Loved Eleanor Rigby. Shouldn't have seen that....now I got it in my head, and will play it all night, lol. Take care.
Certainly things of terror happened when Mark and Nathan met. In my part of the story I also mention funny moments of what happened. Welcome to Wewrite. Greetings friend @justclickindiva
Thank you for the warm welcome, and greetings to you. I've met some amazing and talented people here. And I do plan to be more active in the freewrite program. Indeed, those two boys will go on an adventure and learn a valuable lesson.