Phantom || Part 1 & 2 We-Write Short Story by @sarez and @aduragbemi

in wewrite •  14 days ago  (edited)

This is the first part of a Partner We-Write for the prompt- "phantom" by @zeldacroft, and @freewritehouse

I put up my hand to shield my eyes from the bright lights. It just did not work. WTF I shook my head a few times and scrunched my eyes and hid my face in my hands. Still the bright lights were shining right in my eyes. MY EYES. I have lost my eyes!

I sat up and looked in all directions. I can see. It was hazy and it seemed that all color had dimmed but I could see. I was sitting on a stretcher by the side of the road. The bright lights were the headlights of a police van. People all around me were busy photographing and picking up pieces of.... My car and the pick up that crashed into me veering from three lanes across. The bang must have been a blow out and the pick up had just turned in my direction. I had braked, I had been standing on the brake pedal trying to swerve away but the skid had taken me right into the truck . The Loud crash and the burning pain in my neck was the last thing I remembered.

Then I saw that I could see through my hands and my legs. They were bagging me, my body. And I was sitting right there. I am a Ghost. A Phantom...AAAAHH Before I knew it the area around me.. everything- the asphalt, the stretcher, the body bag, clothing of the few medics still nearby, all started to burn at once. I ran and kept on running, till I could think again. A harsh laugh started inside me and doubled. Thinking without brains and laughing without throats. Again I felt a change in the pace around me- I was like a center of a small whirlwind, scraps and plastic were flying up and around. OK OK Calm down. Deep Breaths. This started another bout of whirlwinds.

At this time I did not know how I ended up as a phantom.
by @sarez

My Part!


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It was no understatement to say I knew not what had happened to me. The air still hasn’t cleared. It was hazy and it seemed that all color had dimmed but I could see. Maybe it was partial, or maybe I saw nothing but at least thought I did.

The whirlwinds too. They caused the whole town to panic.

Maybe this is the end of the world, they murmured loudly amongst themselves.

I knew not if they were real, or maybe they were just voices in my head, maybe rehabilitation would’ve genuinely helped if I had just seek the help I needed right when I needed it. It was still so fresh on my mind what had transpired 14hours before the crash. I had just been dismissed from office on medical grounds. My employer said I was no longer fit to perform at maximum, and that I was starting to become a liability, not just to the company but myself also.
Leaving my office desk to never again return wasn’t easy. I had grown accustomed to it because it served me memories of pain and laughter- when my own conscious mind wouldn’t allow such.

I felt empty. Deep down I had warred my mind to a last-stretch state until totally worn and incapable of letting out the negative vibes and the auras of stress that however lingered for eternity. I had witnessed the colorless ocean water of remorse, and with no inner voice to keep me in check, dived in.

Swollen eyeballs could tell the tale of the burst bank of tear drops. Maybe I was headed home before it happened. The accident. The very loud crash. The burning pain in my neck. My head-on collision with a truck.

What surprised me was that for a minute, I felt my soul and spirit leave me. It wasn’t part of the plan. My plan- I wouldn’t die until I’ve thrashed it out, but thoroughly with my found purpose. I did come to terms with a lot, few hours just before the accident. I made some decisions that would have bested the life I was living, but veil wouldn’t let me.
Memories can be a tricky thing. Some part of mine seemed to have wiped- clean slate, and some memories I never thought I had were coursing through me.

Me, a phantom?

Well, I wouldn’t rule anything out just yet.

Then…a new page flipped, and once again they were all burning- the asphalt, the stretcher, the body bag, even clothing of the few medics nearby. The scene seemed to get played out when it seems to have just started, like someone is applying the rewind and fast-forward effect. It can’t be real.


Then again, it seemed kind of new- Thinking without brains and laughing without throat. I badly needed to see light. I needed Knowledge. I needed to see, but my rights to explore reality was once again denied me.

OK OK Calm down. Deep Breaths. This started another bout of whirlwinds.

I’ve been thinking…

What if the accident, in fact never occurred?

What if it was only in the minds?

What if all was a product of an unstable mind? One that had just experienced a complete melt-down. At least, that seemed more plausible to me than the whirlwinds, the phantom, body-bags etc. But again, it was so clear to me that I don’t think with my brain, at least not anymore- I don’t have one.

But why the fragments?

I suddenly jerk awake…

I had a seizure. The accident had been real all along. I had earlier on swerve off the road in a head-on collision with a truck. I was in a very bad shape, my head hurts and I could barely feel my legs.

My convulsed head had really done a lot. It really messed up my memory, but I know it will take a while before it gets better.

I had thought the worst part of the hellish nightmare was over.

Could hear the ambulance siren blare in the distance as I was been ferried to the hospital to get treated. Then I slid back into the dark…

Again I felt a change in the pace around me- I was like the center of a small whirlwind, scraps and plastic were flying up and around.

OK OK Calm down. Deep Breaths. This started another bout of whirlwinds.

And it again took me a while to realize that all were just fantasies that only existed in my mind.

The End!

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Good job on this exciting story, @aduragbemi. i am glad to see you taking part in we write. I could never do it and you have talent. Keep going!

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Thanks a lot @fitinfun. I'm glad you liked it!

And thanks on the upvote also!

Very happy to help, @aduragbemi. And BIG congrats on your curie vote. You deserve it :)

Excellent!!! a well deserved curie, also says so.
Keeping the mystery going was a brilliant idea.

This worked for me so maybe even next the time??

Thanks @sarez.

Your start to the story still intrigues me. I love every bit of it.

Yeah. We can partner up next time too. I'd love that!

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Hello Hello!

I love how you write, it's so exciting to keep reading and reading

Greetings from Venezuela

I'm glad you liked it @iamsaray.

dear @aduragbemi, absolutely love love love your story! so intriguing between reality and dream, spirit, perhaps soul, who looks at himself without memory, maybe he doesn't want to remember, maybe ... you have a lot of talent, keep on
Thanks for sharing with us and congratulations on your curie rating

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From my point of view it is not easy to continue a story written by another person. You did very well. You leaned towards drama and realism and narrated with several interesting descriptions. It has been a pleasure to have read. Regards @aduragbemi

Thanks @marcybetancourt. I'm glad you liked it!