Love Please :: Original Flash Fiction

in #twentyfourhourshortstory2 years ago (edited)

In a world far far away, in a galaxy that doesn’t exist, and in a time that is already forgotten, there was a man who was fed up with it all. He was the most powerful person in the world, and everybody called him Mr. Everything. Mr. Everything had everything he could think of. He even had a machine especially built for him that created everything he could think of.

Yet he wasn’t happy. Perhaps this is not surprising to us, as we know that material things cannot make someone happy. But Mr. Everything was very angry about this. He shouted at the machine that it was supposed to take care of everything he needed. Even if he didn’t know what would make him happy.

The machine was confused. It could do a lot, but it could not produce anything his owner couldn’t think of. “Please think of something specific, Mr. Everything. And I’ll make it for you.”

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Mr. Everything sat down at his desk, and started to think. How was he to come up with something he didn’t know? Why was this machine torturing him like this?

“I… I want you to create love for me!” Mr. Everything was satisfied to have come up with something that would make him happy. Love would be good. It supposedly made everything look pink and would give him something to rely on. No matter what would happen in the future, he would have love.

The machine started whirling and doing what it did best. It searched through reference books and started to assemble everything needed to create love. Mr. Everything tried not to lose his patience, but the machine had never taken such a long time before. Perhaps it wasn’t possible to get love after all.

The display on the machine started blinking. A message appeared, and a big green button. “Press this.”

Now it was Mr. Everything’s turn to be confused. “What is the meaning of this, robot?”

“I have created love, Mr. Everything. Yet in order to give it to you, you need to accept the conditions attached. My programming forbids me to do interfere with your free will, therefore you need to press the green button to state that you agree.”

Mr. Everything started laughing. “Love comes with conditions? What is this? But okay, I’ll go along with your game.” Mr. Everything stepped closer to the machine and with a trembling finger he pushed the green button. Next time he got one of these crazy ideas, he should remember to ask for courage first.

As the conditions were agreed to, the machine produced a giant lake. “Here it is, Mr. Everything. This is love.”

Mr. Everything looked at it, but before he could say anything, the machine grabbed him tightly and pushed him in the direction of the lake.

“The literature is very clear about love. For it to work, we need to fall into it together.”

And before Mr. Everything understood what was going on, the machine pulled him into the lake. Mr. Everything was sure this what not what he meant when he asked to get love. But there was nothing he could do. So he let himself fall in love.

And he kept on falling. There seemed to be no end to it. And the lake was full of treachery, pulling on his legs and pushing him in directions he never knew existed. Giving him detours and making sure he was completely lost at times. Things were never what they seemed. Which, in itself, was to be expected.

Some years later, as he finally found his way out of the lake, Mr. Everything decided that he would never think of things he didn’t know anymore. Love was not for him, after all.

The machine stayed in love. It couldn’t swim.

This story was written exclusively for the contest organised by @mctiller, a 24-hour-challenge to write a story below 2000 words, on the topic ‘a robot falls in love with its owner’. #24hourshortstory


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We should all be so lucky to find love so easily.

Nice story! There's a little bit of Mr. Everything in us all.

400 upvotes and only 4 comments.

here, have another comment to fill your reply.

I love the premise, dare I say it, it reminds me of Asimov's the question. anyway, enjoy your 5th comment and 402nd upvote.

Now up to 413 and one more comment.

You present me with a dilemma: why did I begin your story and continue to read? Why did I start several others and not go on? As someone who likes to write but finds fiction challenging, I have to figure that out. I think it's the impossible proposition at the beginning--first of all he's Mr. Everything. That's already too big a concept for us to grasp, so we want to know more. But then, he has to think of something he doesn't know. Once again, we're stuck, with Mr. Everything.
I think it's the novelty and the pace--the story almost reads like a parable. And then the end rewards with that ridiculous last line. A great job. I think it's called talent :)

Thanks, very nice analysis. Yes, I also wondered, this is one of those stories that practically wrote itself once I felt it coming. And why it works... that it that nice balance between saying enough and leaving much to mystery as well.
Let's hope it's talent!

I wonder what the lake was made of, and if he experienced something as he fell. I guess this goes to show how difficult some things are to put down in paper.

I wouldn't be surprised at a machine reaching this conclusion after just checking what is written on love. Just look at this one definition of "falling in love", one of my favorites:

Romantic poses aside, let us recognize that "falling in love" an inferior state of mind, a form of transitory imbecility. - José Ortega y Gasset

Oh what a beautiful story. But i don't get the idea of love being a lake??

Thanks! And the machine that can make anything you think about is less troubling for you? Haha.
Lake of love, why not? Don't let your thoughts or how things are thought about keep you back from exploring your own fantasy :)

I was asking myself the same question, for what it may be worth 😉 I enjoyed the touch of humour though.

Wow... somebody likes crazy stories. I hope he delegates to comedyopenmic.

hahaha I hope love is like that as easy like a machine

Falling i love nahh. I prefer tiptoeing

I love the opening paragraph!

First of all, that was a really thought-provoking and fun story to read. Second of all, that ending was hilarious. Nice work!

Your story put me in a good mood. Thank you.


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