Steem Block Chain -- Super-Intelligence
I'm working on this for @kevinwong's collaborative Steemit project, and I'm hoping for a bit of input on how I can improve it.
The image is irrelevant, I just wanted to throw that in there. It is the text that I would like some feedback on.
The text in larger print;
Imagine a mind with a limitless capacity to learn.
A mind that never forgets.
A mind that is in a constant state of expansion and evolution.
A mind that anyone is able to access and share information with.
A mind that makes all information stored within its memory available to the public.
A mind that is impervious to corruption and manipulation.
Imagine you had to imagine no more.
Steem Blockchain
Connect to super-intelligence.
Please let me know what you think.
This is what should be on the welcome page.
Sounds cool ! I like the top 3 ! And the second text is nice ! Large but not to large ! Steem on 😊👍
Nice. Now, if only the curated, archived Steemit content were more accessible... But I guess that's really a UI issue. BTW, love your GIF banner... ;) Did you make it? 😄😇😄
I expect that it will be before long, as people are continuously developing new things on the Steem blockchain.
Thank you, and yes I made it.
I also made a version for anyone in the community to download for free, so if you want one you can follow the link the below.
https://steemit.com/steemit/@son-of-satire/a-gift-to-the-community-download-a-free-animated-upvote-resteem-follow-gif-to-go-at-the-end-of-your-posts
Thanks for responding! ;)
That is awesome!
It looks very amateur, but there wasn't enough time available to create something professional looking. It's the message that I was trying to bring importance to.
Thanks still!
Looks good to me:)
It's catchy. The analogy isn't perfect, though, as mind implies some kind of intelligence. Maybe expand that to encompass the community aspects of Steemit? Blockchain + community = mind.
Community is an important buzzword. Attarcts the right type of people. I concur to the need for its use.
I don't think mind is a bad fit though.
The sharing of information and viewing of it was representative of the community, but I see now that you're correct. It's not clear enough and I should really emphasize the community aspect. Thanks--
I really like it. Potent.
Can't think of much to improve it, other than adding
"Welcome to the Steem Blockchain"; this would draw me in as a reader acting as a friendly invitation, and make me more likely to check it out. Also makes me feel like I'm already on it.
And also "connect to the super-intelligence"
I feel the "the"makes it seem like the Steem bloackchain is "THE" super-intelligence, other than just one of many.
And I'm not sure on this, but maybe switch "limitless" to "unlimted" or "infinite". I love the film and tv series "limitless" so I feel partial and biased towards limitless being a good fit.