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RE: SPU Poetry Contest #4: Witch Prey
I love the contrast between this surreal, animalistic experience and the matter of fact, very much real, "did not think of my husband". Like you're pointing outside the poem and throwing a new shade of context over the whole thing - makes it that much more engaging. Personally, I'd have broken it up into a few stanzas to highlight changes in focus, but that's just me. Otherwise a great read - thanks!
Thanks for your thoughtful comments! I played with stanzas and decided I liked it without; I thought it might evoke some of the confusion and swirled-togetherness of the narrator. But that's my own style, for sure—I tend to read aloud as I go and break lines based on the kind of flow I get that way.