SPU Poetry Contest #1: The process of writing a love letter
The process of writing a love letter
Emotions melt into words that pour out across pages
Empty white canvases finding reason to exist
Passionate once again after ages of solitude
Eagerly holding onto hopes of reply
The scratching of the pen breaking the comfortably eery silence
Diced in the dotting of i’s and the crossing of t’s
Becoming less complacent with every line
Ink and graphite and lead and text
Leaping from fingertips and quills and ballpoints of dusty drawers
Leaving no time to decipher the emotional overload
Until its existence is undone
Words dance on the tip of the tongue
Begging to be unleashed on eager eyes
To be spoken aloud
Awaken complacent bones
To infiltrate hearts
Eradicate apprehensions
And the emotional and geographical distance that lies in between
All unseen
The phonetics expressed emphasized themselves medium across medium
Gasping for outlet
And poems became letters and letters became songs
Each one a labor of love
Words dangling that the mouth dare not allow
My throat, a dam
Passing droplets while gushing waters attempt to overflow
My tongue, a straightjacket
Twisting arms and disorienting limbs
Struggling
Strangling
Suppressing
But words written spill easily in blank space
Exposing those letters locked in a dark tower of chaotic thought
Intent on extracting the utmost emotional endeavors of all that is you
Sometimes seeking love
Sometimes forgiveness
Emoting fear and insecurities at the apex
Waiting to tip the scale past my comfort zone
When the last i’s are dotted and the last t’s crossed
The heart beats stop
Awaiting response from the muse that started it all
That so calmly ignites the fuse of written rapid fire
The return was fleeting, fighting,
Abusing the useless attempts to reconcile a love long overdue
And two remains ones
Impaired by the distance
That one letter must travel
To find its way home to you
-B.faye
Many thanks to @poetrybyjeremy for sponsoring this Poetry Contest! This poem was inspired by the essence of A Birthday Limerick, by @madevi although creating another world from it that plays on the impact and constant forces at play in our minds:
life's wind in my head,
it refuses to play dead
and keeps resisting the forces of changing
All artwork and writings are my own. The image is a assemblage of actual love letters collaged and overlaid at varying scales, opacities, and saturation levels.
<33333333333333333 You know I loved this one. I read it to criticise it before for you but I couldn't. It's very good. You thought it had no structure, but I could pick it apart to show that it does. Each stanza touches one or two very specific themes. They're properly isolated and interconnected. It's an excellent poem. I hope you win this thing.
do you ever get tired of writing comments that make people feel like their lungs were just overinflated by a gaseous state of pure bliss? because youre really, really good at having that affect. im going to write a letter to myself ten years in the future and its going to be labeled: "Amazing things
peoplecryptosharon said to me".But in all seriousness, im so glad you think that about the structure. There's definitely consistency in my inconsistencies, if that makes any sense. An old professor of mine back in architecture school once asked me: "is there method in your madness?", to which he answered affirmatively at the end of the semester, although i imagine it is hard to see for some. I guess my mind has always worked kind of erratically that way. at least here its in a poem and not in a skyscraper 50 floors up ;p
cryptosharon is the best :)
Hahaha, to read than from you. Thank you. <3 I'm glad you think highly of me.
I was also surprised to see your rise in reputation. I saw that you had a big upvote. I'm glad you're being well received even though you haven't networked. It's an awesome thing to be discovered like that, and it was not for anyone but for you, a writer whose quality of work I look up to. This was a good week.
:PPPP I had never thought of saving compliments for later until you suggested the idea. I might start doing it. You've also given me a few. These things you said about me make me really happy. Let's add that to mr mdbrantingham's reply to your comment, it's a thread almost designed to fill me with bliss and confidence. Thank you!
it is a good idea - should've started earlier, but happy to start collecting now:) and happy i could contribute to yours <3
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STOPLoved reading this! Continue doing and producing lovely pieces!
so glad you enjoyed it:) its one of my longer most cohesive poems, but comprised of a lot of small moments like the one you pulled out. a lot of action packed into the words trying to come out of us all sometimes:)
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I liked this part!
You suppressed your inner nerd a lot in this poem, but i could see it sometimes struggling to get out xD
First time i actually read a poem in English, and on steemit xD poetry is not really my thing, but i liked yours :D
thanks so much @teutonium ! and can i say im very honored to pop your english poem cherry? ;p maybe thats the struggling part - the inner nerd trying to bust out with some crazy erudite vocabulary that will unfortunately not have the equal appeal of poetic fervor. alas, the struggle is real. and such is the nerd-artist fate ;p
nerdartist- you got yourself a new name if you ever think about changing yours xD
hehehe i could cover the walls with all the other account name options - dont even get me started teuto! (your new nickname i just bestowed upon you;p)
ahahha, most ppl in the online community call me teuto, it's easier than teutonium! ill call you Breana!
Beautifully written!!!
thank you lovely : )
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Oh wow! You have got some talent... Beautiful lines. It's not easy to keep me reading such a long poetry till the very end. Wonderfully written. I would never be able to write something like this
awww thank you @svkurlze :) I'm glad it kept you reading! sometimes poetry is hard because if the words lack flow your mind just drifts off. theres definitely an art to keeping people hooked on every line - and i give it my best!:)
Yes, it was really a great read
How does one comment on such poem? There were too many lines that were exceptional. Even simple imagery like writing, you described the "scratching of pen" and the "ink", "lead", "graphite". Simple things that make the imagery come to life and be felt in my senses.
This part was breathtaking! I do love how you took elements from the prompt, yet constructing them as your own.
thanks @poetrybyjeremy! that means a lot! especially because i was debating whether or not it'd be an acceptable submission since its not structured in a normal sense - so thanks for that:) i have a weird way of writing that doesn't really follow normal rules. the only rule i follow is to write words with constant flow and power - in this way theres softness with the flow, and interruption with the stronger words that create a powerful emphasis. It's really suited for spoken word because you can emphasize them the way you intended, but in poetry you have to hope the readers catch a glimpse at what you were intending. glad its catching on:)
You're on the right path - there are no definite rules in poetry; rules are meant to be bent. You construct the rules according to your poem, not your poem according to the rules ;) It was really pleasant to read, so thank you for submitting :)
:)