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RE: Autumn Vertigo (Poetry)
Thank you for the detailed comment - I was like, oh no what I do with that line wrong. Then, a compliment. Repeat.
I'm not sure where the 's' in crisps came from. It doesn't make sense in any context - but fixed.
I agree - I was unsure of adding the birds, it felt out of place. Yet, without it, it's an expression of pain - whereas the birds make it so much more a tragedy and reality. It also connects to the fact that forests are not simply 'oxygen machines', but they ar home to millions of species.
Thank you once again - this is a great comment to wake up to :D