Sometimes we went for a drive and got searched // stanzas from my Midday WalkssteemCreated with Sketch.

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2nd February 2019

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I found this quite intriguing. You've captured a scene quite well, overloaded with painful allusions to an egregious political situation.

Towards the end of a long-ish life, I've come to the unavoidable conclusion that virtually all forms of human "govern-ment" are quite beastly and destructive of human dignity and peace.

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Thanks for this

Well, i had to come to you to read your lates hehe. I read this poem few times, im not sure i fully understood though what is about. Seems too complex for my little brain i believe :^ .

Tks for reading. I tried my best to write something plain and simple this time -- tut-tut, I failed!

It's exactly what it says. A boy and others in a car. Things change, people die. Nothing hidden, so perhaps you're searching too hard -- wait EDIT

Apartrap is a a combination of part of one word - (think, colour-coded locked areas and that should help you) + the word, trap. The faceless driver (of the car or the conversation, it's blurry) is a sort of metaphor for social-political forces. Imbuia is wood used for furniture. Being deployed, has a loaded meaning where I come from, not sure if the poem is very plain and simple after all. HECK 😁

Oh i see, it makes a bit more sense now. You seem very technical and knowledgeable about wording and phrasing. That's interesting; probably you have a lot of experience at composing and laying it out :^. Thanks for sharing. I hope i didn't bothered you with my silly questions :^ .

Glad you can see it a bit more now. And, of course not. It caused me to reflect on my wording which is always a good thing to do. Writing about this topic gives me cause to self-censor quite a bit, so my lines are cryptic. It's something I am trying to shake off, because it doesn't make the lines more universal I think, it just makes them hard to understand for someone from elsewhere. Thanks for the feedback, my friend.

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Interesting write, mate.

Made me think of Yeats, "Things fall apart, the center cannot hold."

as plates on top of molten matters always do

Nice line. Molten matters ... wish I had thought of that.

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Thank you, my dear friend. I am extremely flattered by your feedback. So much that is beneath the surface is ignored at our peril - that's what I was attempting to convey. The stress, heat and potential for crises.

I struggle to press these short verses out - a singular metaphor like that, well - I still owe you guys a lot more ;-) - I am always in admiration of your poetry which is so much more detailed, well-considered and clear arguments for the issue your poem seeks to address. I feel like mine are pennies into a wishing well. Ah, what the heck. I feel lucky ;-)

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Very thought provoking and melancholic! Just like @oculussensori, I'm not sure I get the exact meaning behind it but damn did it take me for a ride, that unfortunately has to come to end. lol Great read @oneazania!

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