I appreciate ur input my friend. It is the first poem i have written in a very very long time and have lots of skills to work on. But the only way to get better is to write it, post it and wait for people to give feed back. However, if no one is honest about my writings and just always said nice things about it then i would never try to improve. So thank you for being a true friend and giving me your honest opinion.. now that u said that, i have re-read it and i honestly i think i could do better too! ;)