the repeating lines throughout the poem creates a whimsical, almost dreamlike atmosphere that is supported by the short punctuated and consistent stanzas.
the ever shifting verse like smoke the narrator reaches out to only to see it pass through their fingers.
As a reader, it speaks to a deep seated and whole bodied connection as strong as any love story.
It's a beautiful piece, Guy, no wasted words anywhere. ++
I've always wanted to write a poem in this form. The poem I like most, which is written in this form, uses it to weave together fairy-tales, so I very much agree on the playful and half-there feeling it lends itself to.
And well, it is a love story. Thank you for the kind words :)