Who? (part 3)

akiofthemitovski (37)in #poetry • 6 years ago

Hi all/whoever is reading.

So, I've posted about my older poems translated into English before. This is gonna be the last poetic post for a while, as I think it hasn't really struck anyone's fancy really. Thanks to those who're reading, though.

Anyway, following my last post about reworking a poem of mine I wrote back in 2001 called Who?, I just couldn't leave it at that, so I reworked the poem one more time.

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Here's the most recent rework:

WHO?

What do you wanna know?

I could walk, I could free the world,
I was able to see from afar
Loneliness huddled into a human
I couldn’t carry one to happiness,
that’s all I could.

I had a spirit that took me wandering,
that got me shipwrecked once or twice,
it never got me buried, never got me
nailed on a century of one,
that’s all I had.

and then, I could run, sprint even,
and then I got myself crawling
mud could soak my pant legs,
it does so now, it does ‘cos it rains.
That’s all it does.

And now I hear people approaching,
footsteps rumble on muddy roads,
and I could only think of that,
and I had no answers.
That’s all.

21 June 2001

Any thoughts?

Have an awesome day!

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