RE: Heart Break (poemchallenge by @margaretwise)
The repitition of “Heart Break / is a(n)” the usage of (negative connotative version of) verbs in the third line, the fourth line bringing a sudden shift to one quality, fifth of something sad or evoking sadness and the last line an obscenity yet one that actualized and incoporated all that transpired. Though all were artsy on heart break, focused on each particular of such which compounds each other when these particulars are brought together. The first, relates to physical pain as a mere metaphor yet referential to Unconscious-Conscious pains with disconnection. The second, aphysixation a referential to the Unconscious-Conscious pains of memory that acts like phantom pain. The last, lack of love that refers to Lack/Desire that formulated with the recognition of the M(Other) after seeing the M(Other) infrequently visiting the baby (and presumably taken away from by the name-of-the-Father / Phalluce / Master-Signifier) and then searching for an Other that can make itself complete. But ever-coming to realize the tragedy that the Other as another Subject is incomplete as well and lacks/desires as well.
You perfectly identify the structure to the lines within each verse that I did not even realise I was doing. I was just thinking about what felt, this just blew me away <3 ;-; <3
I love reading the analysis of poetry, this was not so much what I put in there, well, in the most part it was. The first verse is about the actual physical pain felt within the heart, and came from trying to think of a way to describe it Tired of feeling your feelings, enter calluna patented 'describe it' mode, when you focus on whatever it is, not for what it is but from some nice detached, now how would i describe this for a poem or story angle, works wonders ;) , the second is indeed as you put it, and more about the memory of what isn't there than breathing. Hmm with the last one, I was more thinking along the lines of something glorious and wonderful, like a celestial body, seemingly gone, and the coldness and I guess maybe loneliness that comes after. But then again, when poetry comes out like this, I don't really know how it comes to be, the words just suddenly seem to fit together, and what you see if indeed there, ahhh the magic of poetry <3 thank you so very much for this, I sincerely appreciated your analysis and feedback <3
That’s what the Other is! (In reference to the awe in yer comment and the last poem.)