You perfectly identify the structure to the lines within each verse that I did not even realise I was doing. I was just thinking about what felt, this just blew me away <3 ;-; <3
I love reading the analysis of poetry, this was not so much what I put in there, well, in the most part it was. The first verse is about the actual physical pain felt within the heart, and came from trying to think of a way to describe it _{Tired of feeling your feelings, enter calluna patented 'describe it' mode, when you focus on whatever it is, not for what it is but from some nice detached, now how would i describe this for a poem or story angle, works wonders ;)} , the second is indeed as you put it, and more about the memory of what isn't there than breathing. Hmm with the last one, I was more thinking along the lines of something glorious and wonderful, like a celestial body, seemingly gone, and the coldness and I guess maybe loneliness that comes after. But then again, when poetry comes out like this, I don't really know how it comes to be, the words just suddenly seem to fit together, and what you see if indeed there, ahhh the magic of poetry <3 thank you so very much for this, I sincerely appreciated your analysis and feedback <3