Steemit Open Mic Week 72 - Story Charlemagne - Time (Original)

in #openmic6 years ago (edited)

Good morning steemit fam!

Here is a scattered idea of this song and the place it has in the tale.

A pivotal moment in the story when our main character (Story) is captured. Story has the ability to bend the will of his life as it unfolds. When he writes, the situation are pushed in the direction that he has professed through his writing. But if for some reason he writes something that cannot be achieved or he fails to do (physically) his body is trapped for a period of time.

Yes I know this sounds a bit out there but the rules set up by this tale dictate the life of my main character. And because of his abilities he is a target for those who want to capture and control it. That is where "Time" comes in. Never mind how he is captured or who commits to it (you will find out in the future), he is trapped in a box with no light and is tortured in an attempt to break his will. His only retreat is within his mind within a back and forth struggle of trying to remember his past and why he is a target.

I have an older recording of song with a lot of instruments that were just automated but I am currently working on a full band, progressive rock version which this acoustic performance is based off. Tis also why the breakdown on sorts sounds so barren by itself :(


Really what I want more than anything is friends to be along for this musical ride. I appreciate all upvotes as it will help fund projects to come but if you enjoy please follow the page!


Feel free to check out & download the older version here : https://storycharlemagne.bandcamp.com/track/time

  • Story

Time

I have nothing to share
Its all I can bare, the words cause a tear
Irresitable taste, she cannot replace
Im not going there

But time isnt a thing I can prove
What if we're all ones just being used
And we feel, therefore we think that we are
Face the facts, were not going too far

Without, something that we know
Time moves way to slow
No plans for my flow
Washing burns from my skin
I can not begin to take the pain

But time isnt a thing I can prove
What if we're all ones just being used
And we feel, therefore we think that we are
Face the facts, were not going too far (x 2)

Instead
Put it all of my head
Learn what exactly has led to this life
You have created
Torn down below belated
Monsters that I once hated

Who dared put out the flame
The words that cause my shame
Go back to from where you came
Will I make it alive
Stand ground, see through this fight
We'll see by tonight

But time isnt a thing I can prove
What if we're all ones just being used
And we feel, therefore we think that we are
Face the facts, were not going too far (x 3)

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Love listening to your originals man and your way of thinking. I just finished reading the Watchmen by Alan Moore, you should check it out, really resonated with your idea's in this song.

I will check that out. I need source material to help to smooth out how I will tell this story. Thanks for the recommendation. Wonder if I can get an audiobook. Hmmm

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oh yeah! Great vocals especially. And we have the same guitar so that helps :-)

Great stuff.

Good luck this week.

Thanks man! Love Taylor guitars brother. My favorite acoustics especially to finger pick with imo!

Only got mine a few weeks ago and loving it. The sound when you record directly from it is something else!

Goosebumps. Nice song dude. Will upvote. Thanx for sharing.

Thank you for listening!

Jeez bro, you just keep upping your game! By large notches too!!!

Such a well crafted song, the lyrics are very moving and speak volumes to me as I'm in the midst of a long term relationship.

The music is so exceptionally well crafted too though, and I love the way you bring it up and down with both your ridiculously good control and tonal qualities of your voice, and the interchanges between some complex unusual fingerstyle picking and some driving rhythm.

It really is like discovering a new favourite artist, please, please keep them coming. Oh and if you ever release a vinyl be absolutely sure to let me know please. A definite fan here man!

Thanks a lot! As I said in this we are currently working on an EP so it will be out soon (hoping for beginning of April). This song will be on it with full instrumentation guitar (2) drums, bass, keyboard, harmonies, etc. My buddy found a perfect median to get the percussive feel of the song across with the rim of the snare drum so I am excited to share it soon.

AND VINYL IS DEFINITELY A GOAL FOR FULL ALBUM! Do you like colored vinyls? I'm thinking purple or blue lol

thanks for sharing

hey @storycharlemagne, really liked it, especially the guitar part, love the flow

Thanks so much. Please follow and stick around for more!

great brother!!! following you definetly to see the next video, hope you will follow me too and we can inspire each other and support our passion ;)

ohhh goodness! fantastic just awesome. praise for miles spilling over. love you big!!! lyrics are in

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