Steemit Open Mic Week 65 - "Meet Me on the Shore" - (Original Song Demo)

in #openmic6 years ago (edited)

Here's my creation for both Steemit OpenMic Week 65 & Songwriter's Challenge Week 5. It seemed easier to write a song about this theme (more so than the previous 2) despite it being so vague.

It will be interested to see what the feedback is on this one. I felt like the performance was a lot better (not necessarily the song tho). My Week 64 entry was super rough however, for that one I received some very encouraging feedback regarding the song lol, so I wonder...

I also broke my first string on this guitar during one of the earlier takes, so I've added in some photos for shits and giggles.



The Carnage

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My Shitty String Change

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Meet Me on the Shore – Jay Sussman

V: We left ourselves on the wind swept shore
A place we’d never been before
Held up there and it felt so right
Slept all day and stayed up all night
And when we left parted ways
Swore we’d meet again one of these days
It’s been some years still see your face
I hope that you still feel the same

C: Meet me on the wind swept shore
So I can hold you in my hands once more
And we can make it feel so right
Sleep all day and stay up all night

V: Meet me here just like before
Where the wind blows strong as the waves hit shore
Cause when we’re here we feel it more
And there’s nobody else we’d ever come here for
So pack your bags and sail towards
Where I am and I’ll make sure
That we will make it feel so right
Sleep all day and stay up all night

B: Well I’m trying to let you through
But you know that’s not so easy to do
When there’s so much uncertainty
If you and I are really meant to be

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jaybird ~

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every time i hear you I think god i want to get that guy in the studio and record album. your a great songwriter and a fantastic fucking singer!!! tops my friend. you need full band blazin

Ha, ur too kind to this unrefined yodeller ;)

Apprecite it tho. 1 day i’ll visit sunny California !

Looks my competition is going to be fierce in round # 65! Great song @jaybird. 100% upvote

Thanks Man! Much appreciated. I've been checking out some of the other entries and shudang! You're right about that!

Noooice ... good stuff jaybird resteemed ✌🏾👌🏿

Good music bro

Nice flourish at the end man. You really show off your pipes here; I would go hoarse halfway through the song!
(Then again I am getting to be an old fu__)
Is that a Baby Taylor?
Every time I see that ladder I wonder if there is a loft up there or if you are a painter...peace

I was starting to lose it at the end ha, you can sort of hear it in the bridge and that I don't quite make that last A... oh well. Better than my last one i thought where i had no voice to start with & literally pushed it out (not a good idea as a vocalist)

And Yes Yes Baby Taylor indeed. It's much easier to play for me...I've had some bad repetitive stress injuries in the past and they haunt me to this day. Playing this little guy lowers the chances of me overdoing it etc.

My personality is such that I don't like to stop once I'm workig on something and i've gone over my limit.
Unfortunately, I pay a price for loving music too much lol....It's ironic.

I have had RSI before too and actually I had many years where playing the guitar was painful in fact it is one reason I never pursued music more as a career/performer.
One thing that helps for me is that I now use lighter gauge strings and I tune my guitar down 2 steps which I prefer anyway but it gives lower string tension.

I believe it's an all too common issue for us musicians. We find a way tho right!

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