STEEMIT Openmic Week 106 - Gente (ORIGINAL) - Benjamín Mora

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(ENGLISH TRANSLATION BELOW, VIDEO AT THE END OF THE POST!)

Alo Steemians!
Esta semana les dejo una canción autoral, surgida del horror que me genera pensar en humanos privando de su libertad a otros humanos. En un momento de mi vida estudié derecho, y solo podía reconocerme con las corrientes abolicionsitas del sistema penal, por la paz y el fin de la multiplicación de la violencia.
Que mis músicas sean un disparador de diálogo sería para mi un honor, asi que si estan de acuerdo o en contra de la abolición de la cultura represiva, los invito a que lo charlemos =).

Gente.

Encierran aves,
encierran mares,
encierran mentes,
encierran niños,
encierran cursos de agua corriente

Encierran gente,
encierran gente,
encierran gente

Encierran barrios
encierran vientos
encierran peces

Encierran pueblos
alteran ciclos de aire caliente

Encierran gente,
encierran gente,
encierran gente.

ENGLISH TRANSLATION:

This week i'll leave an original song born from the indignation that generates me knowing that there are people taking away freedom from other people. Once i was a law student, and i could only recognize myself with the authors that propose the abolishment of the penal sistem, for peace and to stop violence spreading violence.
I love when my songs are the starting point for ideas exchange, so if you are against or if you support the abolishment of the punishment sistem, lets talk about it!

It's difficult to translate the song, but i'll give it a try:

(they) imprison birds
(they) imprison seas
(they) imprison minds

(they) imprision kids
(they) imprison courses of running water

(they) imprison people
(they) imprison people
(they) imprison people

(they) imprision neighborhoods
(they) imprison winds
(they) imprison fishes

(they) imprison comunities
(they) alter hot air cycles

(they) imprison people
(they) imprison people
(they) imprison people

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woow thank you very much guys!!!! =)

Me gusta! Traté de entenderlo como un género en el que no me trataba de encajar, pero siempre prefiero no encadenarme a la idea de asociar toda música con los géneros y esto tiene varios toques, siento bossa, blues, rock, folk, indie, de todo un poco! Genial brother, me encantan esas guitarras gitanas, su sonido es perfecto para hacer jazz sobre todo. Te felicito por esta composición, mis buenas vibras para vos.

Muy buen oído Fer! Yo vengo del blues, y trabajo tocando blues, pero soy enamorado de muchos estilos, y especialmente de los que fusionan y trasgreden purismos. Por eso adoro también la bossa nova (ademas de que viajo hace 1 año y medio por Brasil y mi compañera de vida -de hace 3 años- es brasilera y escucha muuy buena musica). "Gente" es principalmente un Bossa en español y definitivamente tiene un poco de todos los géneros que nombraste, o sea, una mezcla que no pretende definirse jaja.
La guitarra la construí con mis propias manos, bajo la tutoría de un amigo luthier, hace ya 2 años. En los planos eran un poco diferente, pero durante la construcción, las propias madera determinaron ese formato y tamaño, que me terminó gustando mas que lo planificado. Parecido a lo que venimos hablando de los estilos musicales y las composiciones jaja. Meses despues de haberla terminado conocí esas guitarras gitanas que mencionaste y el parentesco realmente indiscutible.
Muchísimas gracias por tu comentario! me ayuda muchísimo a seguir adelante en este camino. Un abrazo grande y habrá mas musicas del estilo/no estilo para que disfrutes. Abrazo!

Toda una historia, genial hermanito! Qué bueno que la guitarra sea hecha por ti, ya me imagino que tu experiencia por Brasil es alucinante, hay mucha música de calidad allí, es lo que se respira.

Claro que sí espero seguir escuchando lo que propongas en esta plataforma, otro abrazo para ti.

Gracias amigo! voy a pasearme por tu contenido tambien, abrazo!

I like the long guitar intro. I thought you wouldn't even start singing :)

This is a strong inspiration behind the song. There are so many bad things happening in the world and you found a great idea to talk about it through your song.

Did you finish the law school or wasn't it for you? I can imagine you quit the school to pursue the music career :)

Thank you for sharing! Congratulations on your curie vote. I hope it will help to spread your message! Much love..

Thank you very much for your comment! The intro is long because i'm recording the guitar (part A and B) and then recording the base of both parts too -with the loop pedal. For a studio version (didn't happen yet), or with a band, i start singing before, but when playing solo i like to show that the loop is recorded live.
I finished law school knowing that it wasn't for me, lol. Two days after the last exam i was traveling through Brasil and making music as a living.
Music is defentely my passion, but i don't regret the years dedicated to law, i learned a lot of things and had the chance to see that world with my own eyes, and to choose my way with no "how would have been if..."doubts.
Thanks again fot watching the video and for the coment. I will defenitely work in more steemit content for you to enjoy!

I finished political science knowing that it wasn't for me, so I know what you're talking about, lol. I'm very happy for you that you found your passion and that you can live off it. I'm looking forward to seeing and listening to that content :)

Haha so you definetely know what im taking about ... it seems like your passion is traveling!! nice posts!!

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wow what an honor! ... I'll definitely vote! thank you very much!

Whoa, superb! I love what you're doing with that loop pedal. You've inspired me to plug mine in and do some jamming. Your vocal harmony alone is so well done.

Thank you very much!! i'll work more in the loop preformance if that is what you enjoy =) ... Its a pleasure to know i inspired you to jam with yourself, i'll take a look at your work too! see you!

Love the guitar, the singing and the harmonica @benjaminmora. I can hear your message through the song and you move me to sing along. Thank you for sharing the lyrics and the translation :)

It's a big pleasure for me to spread my message and my music, and is a bigger pleasure to see that there are people enjoying!! thank you very much @marbely ... i'll work in more content for this comunity =)

:) Yes, please do. You do it very well! Have a good Sunday there @benjaminmora :)

I am not really against the punishment system because I think it is necessary to put control on abuses. If you are against it, how do you suggest that abuses are controlled or much so, prevented in the first place? I am curious to know...

Your post title says original, so you compose this song? What do you call that instrument that your foot is working on?

Good luck on the contest!

Hi @macoolette ! I'll start from the back to the beginning

The thing i'm operating with my feet is a loop pedal. When i press, it records guitar and/or mic. Thats why i played the hole song recording guitar and bass (bass line with the guitar) and the voices of the chorus while im singing.

The song is mine yes!

And the most important, why do i want to end up with the punishment system? That answer is very long, ill do my best to make it as brief as a reply shoud be, just sticking to what you mentioned.

When i started studying law i had the same opinion you havE, that punishment was good to prevent and control crimes, but a deeper look at the penal system, criminological studies and the history of penal punishment shows that jail has the exact opposite efect. The more you punish, the more crimes you have, the more people you trap and force to live under those inhuman conditions, the more (and worst) criminals you'll get, the less control you have.

Thinking in alternatives is not easy, because we were born and educated to believe that torture and prision solve those problems, and even when we understand that studies show that they just make it worse, we are afraid to keep "criminals free". Authors that propose abolishment of penal system are not lunatic lawyers that want to close jails in 24 hours and leave all problems unsolved, in fact, they are the only ones who want to really solve the problem.

The first point is to start with alternatives in the less harmfull crimes (like theft or marihuana possession) that are 90 percent of the reasons why people are in jail. Alternatives could be as mediation,comunity services (but while they are free, near the family that helps a lot, and away from hardcore criminals). In my country there are prisions where prisioners can study (elementary, highschool and some university careers), and the more they achieve, the more their sentences are shortened. Those are just examples of how to avoid or reduce punishment.

But the most important thing to understand is that you don't have to propose a fully eficient alternative, those things resolve themselves while the change is being done, one experience helps the other, and helps creativity. When slavery abolishment was proposed, abolitionists didn't know a fully efective alternative to make the economic and social system work without slaves, but they where sure that slavery had to stop anyway, and now we are better than those days (in fact the end of slavery and the beggining of the penal system as we know it today are extremely related -there is a netflix documentary called "13 enmend" that speaks about this, it is VERY GOOD.

@macoolette as i said, it's amazing for me to know that a song i wrote was the starting point of critical thinking and debate! There are thousands of things to say regarding crimes and punishment, but i don't want to bore you! If you are still interested, we can continue, it's a pleasure for me.

Thank you very much for your comment!! =)

I fully agree with what you mentioned about alternatives because we also have an open prison here in my country. I got the chance to visit that prison and you can never tell it is a prison if you were not told beforehand. It is a very wide farm where prisoners are not in prison but are free to till the farm for as long as they can. While talking to one of the locals there, he was saying that there are even many of the prisoners who do not want to be freed from there so they stayed. However, those are for lighter crimes or those who have served long enough that their sentence has been lightened.

How about heinous crimes? How about repeat offenders? Are we also going to put them in something like the open jail? While I agree that indeed punishment may cause more harm than good, I am still not in the position to fully oppose it when I do not have any proposed alternative. As they say, "If you oppose something then give a valid and reasonable alternative. If you can't give an alternative, you have to go with it."

Wow great example of alternatives you gave there!
I think that the most important thing to do is to understand that prision is torture, is slavery, is sadic, AND it spreads violence and makes the situation worse.
If that fact enters in peoples minds, changes and options will start reaching those minds. What we have today is the opposite, people moslty think that jail is fair, that we must punish, so peace changes are always (almost always) interrupted.
The most serious crimes are the most difficult to think of, especially when it's not the first offender's crime, and when the offender is some kind psyco with no empathy. But we can choose to leave THOSE cases untill we come to a wise solution. Prisions are overcowded, and more than 90 per cent of prisioners are there because of lighter crimes, so alternative solutions for lighter crimes will also help "hard criminals" to live in better conditions.
Maybe in 100 years of alternative experiences we will come to an alternative solution for harder crimes, and if we dont, the world will be better anyway.
So, i insist in the fact that it's a long way, and that real changes come from the inside, so what i plan to do is to pay atention to my thougts and feelings, to think critically, to be opened to unlearn old constumes and to try new ones, to read, to debate, to write and compose.
Its a big peasure to speak with you! thanks =)

we can choose to leave THOSE cases untill we come to a wise solution.

Leave the cases of heinous crimes? Now, that is something I can not agree on. I had few opportunities to visit prison cells for outreach activities and I can say that the prisoners are not being tortured, maybe at least in those places we visited. Assuming that there are those who are being tortured, I would be sorry for them but I would rather have them tortured in jail rather than letting them on the loose and cause more damage to innocent lives.

When i said "we can choose to leave THOSE cases untill we come to a wise solution" i meant to keep sending to prision until we find a wise solution that doesn't involve danger to other citizens nor torture and inhuman punishments. First thing is to focus in lighter crimes, i insist. Changes in lighter crimes first.

i meant to keep sending to prision until we find a wise solution

Okay, that's what I can agree on. 😊

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