Marvelous Tales #8 -- Misty Vale
For anyone reading this now: I managed to make 1st place in the contest. I am very happy about this. Check out @playfulfoodie 's announcement for the info and to see if you want to try your hand at a later competition. My congratulations to @nexusfyre and @therovingreader also. Both impressed me with their writing and deserve a look-see.
(picture credit to @playfulfoodie, I thought it helped it fit in with the contest)
Misty Vale
After Eudora spoke the last words triggering the colossal spell from inside the pass, waves of thunder rolled and echoed above the misty vale. The mage, however, didn’t hear it, as she had instantly collapsed onto the path that now led only back down to the small town shrouded in mists. The pass itself was blocked by a dense wall of mist that surrounded the entire valley at that altitude. To the rest of the world, the tiny town of Misty Vale had never existed; even the four wizards who had helped lay the foundation for the spell no longer remembered their contribution.
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I'm so glad you decided to enter this piece @bex-dk. Well done and I'm looking forward to seeing more of your writing! Cheers.
Thank you! But be sure you poke me when you need a reader on your novel. I don't mind reading it a few times if you want a little feedback in a development phase to help you get through a tough spot.
Oh, I need all the help I can get :D. You say that now, but my writing tends to get a little long-winded haha. But I have the first 6 chapters of A World Long Sundered on my blog if you care to take a look.
I will try to read through them soon. I do a lot of my reading as night without Internet access. ;-) As for being long-winded, I enjoyed reading Moby Dick when I was in 6th grade. That doesn't scare me. I used to go through the library and borrow the thick books, because I was only allowed 10 a month and they lasted longer.
Whether some of it needs to go, that's another question. ;-)
You are definitely my kind of reader. All my favorite authors write 700+ page bricks that no editor seems to want to touch haha. My first chapter was around 6k words, then with @rhondak's help, I cut it down and broke it up into 2 parts. Take your time, there is plenty of work to go around at the Fiction Workshop. I don't want to burn you out!
Love it, it had me transfixed beginning to end. Also congratulations on making it your first public story in a while :)
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What an epic tale, and I enjoyed the reveal of the spell! (Plus any story that has horses in it is a win in my book... dreamy sigh)
I will often include horses. We have seven, but no stallions, blacks, or drafts... And 3 of the 7 are ponies. Thank you!
Ahh, I'm so jealous! One day...
very good!
Thank you!
Not much revision was needed - this is a spell binding tale, with lots of room for sequels and a prequel! Love it!
I hadn't thought about the prequel until your comments. Perhaps a prologue for the "book" it will eventually turn into if I can get myself writing it. I stressed so much over the birthing scenes, sure one of you mothers would rip it to shreds for something.... I have plans of where to go from here. I just need to start writing them.
I agree with that!
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Dang it - I wanted to read this in workshop, but it looks like it emerged beautifully. Good luck with this contest!
Because I was so late finishing, it didn't have much time for workshop love. It wouldn't have made the contest at all if not for Carol and a few others who rushed on it for me... I'd not have had the courage to post it without the feedback. I don't think I do well with deadlines, although I probably would have procrastinated and done nothing without it. Now the juices are flowing, so you will have the chance to scribble on some soon. ;-)
Great Work