Minnesota and New York aren't that far apart. ... I think this has a great tone for a modern love poem. It expresses genuine feeling, yet the poet seems to be self-conscious of that feeling. I see a sardonic tone in the second-to-last stanza, a sense that 'isn't this lovey dovey thing kind of ridiculous'. I think that works very well to make the genuine feeling more believable. As opposed to the unfettered passion of, say, a Shakespearean sonnet, which no modern reader would buy. Obviously, if the object of affection loves the poem, that's the real barometer of success! I think she did.